PUSH
On Christmas Eve a grieving teenage sister, haunted by her brother’s suicide after relentless bullying, finds a newborn abandoned on the subway platform — forcing her to transform private grief into a rescue that becomes a plea for tolerance.
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PUSH distinguishes itself through its raw, unflinching portrayal of LGBTQ+ bullying and its ripple effects on families. The screenplay's unique structure interweaves present-day grief with flashbacks to create a powerful indictment of intolerance, while the subway station setting serves as both literal and metaphorical space for societal neglect. Its combination of social commentary, emotional depth, and redemption arc makes it particularly compelling for audiences seeking meaningful stories about acceptance and healing.
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Genres:Setting: Contemporary, present day, Urban subway stations and a family home
Themes: Societal Pressure, Bullying, and Lack of Acceptance, Identity and Acceptance (Especially LGBTQ+), Family Dynamics and Dysfunction, Grief, Loss, and Trauma, Hope, Resilience, and Redemption, The Power of Words and Rumors
Conflict & Stakes: Eve's struggle with grief and guilt over her brother Billy's death, compounded by his rejection from their father and societal bullying, with the stakes being her emotional well-being and the truth about Billy's death.
Mood: Intense, melancholic, and ultimately hopeful.
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- Unique Hook: The emotional journey of a sister grappling with her brother's suicide and her quest for truth.
- Plot Twist: Billy's coming out and the subsequent rejection from his father, which adds depth to the family dynamics.
- Innovative Ideas: The use of flashbacks to explore character backstories and emotional depth.
- Distinctive Setting: The urban subway environment serves as a metaphor for isolation and societal pressure.
Comparable Scripts: The Perks of Being a Wallflower, A Star is Born, Dear Evan Hansen, 13 Reasons Why, The Fault in Our Stars, The Glass Castle, The Miseducation of Cameron Post, The Virgin Suicides, The Outsiders
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- High emotional impact (98.12) indicates the screenplay effectively resonates with audiences, likely evoking strong feelings.
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Executive Summary
- Immediate, cinematic hook with strong sensory detail: the subway roar, the memorial bouquets and the abandoned platform establish atmosphere and stakes quickly. The opening shot sets the tone and gives the film a recognisable visual identity. high ( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) )
- Clear emotional core: the sibling relationship (Eve/Billy) is well drawn; Billy’s revelation and the parents’ violent reaction are believable and painful, giving the story moral weight and motivation for Eve’s pain. high ( Scene 3 (FLASHBACK - INT. APARTMENT) Scene 6 (INT. - DINING ROOM - THANKSGIVING AFTERNOON) )
- Powerful staging of the fatal sequence: the hallucinated crowd chant of 'Push' and the train sound design are visceral and effective, turning abstract bullying into a cinematic and memorable moment. high ( Scene 10 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION (Billy's death sequence)) )
- The redemptive pivot—Eve discovering the infant—gives the short a hopeful close, transforming grief into action and providing a satisfying emotional reversal for the protagonist. medium ( Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- The inclusion of a communal song ('Pass On The Love') and the split-screen choir creates an uplifting community voice that supports the film’s educational/advocacy purpose and expands the emotional palette beyond the intimate story. medium ( Scene 12 (SPLIT SCREEN - CREDITS and SONG) )
- Exposition-heavy V.O. and phone scenes: the script relies heavily on interior monologue and parenthetical phone dialogue to carry context, which risks flattening the dramatic action. Replace some V.O. with scenes that show consequences or use shorter, sharper beats to preserve momentum. high ( Scene 4 (INT. SUBWAY STATION (phone call sequence)) )
- Supporting characters (Javier, the parents, student tormentors) need more specificity and internal life—Javier’s decision to leave and his reasoning are compressed and feel convenient for the plot; expanding or clarifying his conflict would increase believability. high ( Scene 9 (EXT. - PLAYGROUND) )
- Pacing/sensory overload at the climax: while intense, the montage-like hallucination of voices (parents, students, Javier) is emotionally effective but theatrical; consider trimming or focusing on fewer voices to sharpen emotional clarity and cinematic impact. medium ( Scene 10 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION) )
- Resolution feels thematically right but narratively convenient: the infant-in-trash-can beat is a strong symbolic device but it risks seeming contrived. Adding a short thread earlier (news, rumor, or a hint that abandonment is possible) would make the ending feel earned. medium ( Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT (infant reveal)) )
- Tone occasionally shifts between theatrical monologue and cinematic realism—decide whether you want a stagey, poetic short or a naturalistic film and maintain that register consistently (or lean into hybrid fully). medium ( Scene entire script )
- Javier’s motivations and background: the script states he must return to Pamplona for work, but we never see or hear what would make him abandon Billy; a small scene or line adding cultural/familial stakes would deepen his choice and reduce 'plot convenience' feel. high ( Scene 9 (EXT. - PLAYGROUND) )
- Parent arcs left underdeveloped: Father and Mother are mainly antagonistic/symbolic. If the film wants to show potential for reconciliation (phone scene hints at this), a brief visible action by a parent (a remorseful gesture, attempt at outreach before/after) would make the reconciliation thread less vague. medium ( Scene 6 (INT. - DINING ROOM - THANKSGIVING AFTERNOON) )
- Practical plausibility beats: the logistics/legal consequences of Eve removing an infant from a trash can are unaddressed (call to authorities, exposure). Even a line referencing 'child services' or Eve's plan would keep the film believable without undercutting its emotional arc. medium ( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) )
- Alternative perspectives or scenes for other stakeholders (a teacher, school counselor, or a peer who could have intervened) are missing—adding one small witness could broaden the film’s call-to-action and classroom discussion utility. low ( Scene entire script )
- A clear denouement/aftercare: we end with Eve walking away with the baby, song and credits; a single tight last image or title card about resources/help could make it more usable in social campaigns and avoid an overly tidy finish. low
- Use of auditory motif and strobing light to convert bullying into literal lethal pressure is striking and cinematic — a teachable, memorable sequence for festival programmers and educators. high ( Scene 10 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION (Billy pushed sequence)) )
- Ghostly/fantastical moment where Billy appears to Eve provides emotional closure and lets the script balance grief with tenderness—it's a strong tone pivot that earns empathetic release. medium ( Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT (Billy apparition)) )
- The explicit musical coda and call-to-action lyric give the film outreach potential; pairing narrative with original song enhances memorability and marketing possibilities. medium ( Scene 12 (SPLIT SCREEN - CREDITS and SONG) )
- Strong theatrical/monologue voice: the script reads like a staged piece adapted to screen, which makes it ideal for low-budget production and actor-driven performance festivals. medium ( Scene entire script )
- Repetition of phone ring motif highlights family tension and the push/pull of reconciling with parents; a useful structural device, but borderline repetitive. low ( Scene 4 (INT. SUBWAY STATION (phone calls)) )
- Over-reliance on exposition/monologue The writer often explains character feelings and backstory through V.O. or dialogue rather than dramatizing them. Examples: extended V.O. in Sequences 4 and 11 that recount events already shown, and the phone call scene that tells the viewer the parents' remorse rather than showing action that demonstrates it. This reduces cinematic subtlety and can exhaust audience empathy. high
- Convenient plot devices Key turns (Javier's abrupt departure, the infant exactly at the place of grief) feel engineered to deliver theme rather than emerging organically from character behavior. Javier's refusal to stay (Sequence 9) is under-motivated; the infant reveal (Sequence 11) lacks foreshadowing. medium
- Didacticism The script's message is explicit and repeated (the chorus of 'Push', the repeated line 'Push', and the closing song) — effective for outreach but it reduces ambiguity and artistic nuance, risking an audience feeling lectured rather than moved. medium
- On-the-nose dialogue Characters often state exactly what they feel or what the theme is ('You were pushed', 'I’m in love', 'No questions asked'), without subtext. This is particularly evident in Sequence 4 (V.O./phone exchanges) and Sequence 6 (Thanksgiving dinner) where lines lean into expository bluntness rather than layered emotion. medium
- Stagey formatting and heavy direction The script reads like a stage play adapted for film: extended monologues, explicit camera/shot calls embedded in the script, and very prescriptive sensory cues (train strobe, school bell morph, etc.). While cinematic in moments, the mix of theatrical and filmic directions sometimes clashes and can feel unpolished for screen scripts. low
- Pacing inconsistencies The middle sections (extended flashbacks, V.O.) slow momentum after a visceral opening; conversely the climax compresses many auditory and visual elements, creating sensory crowding. Tightening or redistributing reveals would correct this. medium
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Executive Summary
- Eve's character arc from anger and despair to redemption and hope is deeply explored through voice-over introspection and pivotal interactions, providing emotional authenticity and growth. high ( Scene 2, 4, 11 )
- Flashbacks effectively build Billy's backstory and the conflicts driving the narrative, illustrating the 'push' metaphor through bullying, family rejection, and romantic abandonment. high ( Scene 3, 5, 8, 9 )
- The redemptive ending with the discovery of the abandoned infant ties into themes of unconditional love and passing on tolerance, culminating in a uplifting song that reinforces the message. high ( Scene 11, 12 )
- Consistent thematic focus on tolerance as a 'tool' is evident from the dedication and title to the final song, creating a cohesive narrative aimed at adolescent victims of abuse and ignorance. medium ( Scene 1, 12 )
- Symbolic use of the subway setting and recurring train roars heightens tension and mirrors emotional turmoil, enhancing the sensory immersion of the story. medium ( Scene 2, 10 )
- Dialogue in family confrontation scenes feels overly expository and stereotypical, with characters like the father delivering lines that border on caricature, reducing nuance. high ( Scene 8 )
- Flashback pacing feels rushed, packing multiple conflicts into quick cuts without enough breathing room for emotional beats to land fully. medium ( Scene 3, 5, 8, 9 )
- Javier's character lacks depth, serving more as a plot device for rejection rather than a fully realized partner, weakening the romantic subplot. medium ( Scene 9 )
- Repetitive use of the 'push' chant and voice-over exposition can feel heavy-handed, potentially overwhelming the subtlety needed for emotional impact. low ( Scene 4, 10 )
- Phone conversations with parents repeat similar dynamics without much variation, diluting the tension in Eve's isolation. low ( Scene 2, 4 )
- Deeper exploration of Eve's life before Billy's death, such as her own experiences with identity or prejudice, to make her arc more relatable and complete. medium
- Full resolution for the parents' arc beyond the phone call; a brief visual or implied reconciliation could strengthen family dynamics. medium ( Scene 11 )
- Cultural or personal backstory for Javier to explain his abandonment, adding layers to the theme of internalized homophobia in immigrant contexts. low ( Scene 9 )
- Subtle foreshadowing of the infant's discovery earlier in the script to tie it more organically to the 'passing on love' theme. low
- More diverse representation in supporting characters (e.g., students or bystanders) to broaden the tolerance message beyond the immediate family. low
- Strong opening with the dedication and title card sets a clear purpose as a 'tool for tolerance,' immediately engaging socially conscious viewers. medium ( Scene 1 )
- The hallucinatory sequence with tormentors chanting 'push' effectively conveys Billy's psychological descent, blending reality and perception. high ( Scene 10 )
- Billy's ghostly appearance and shared memory provide catharsis, humanizing the supernatural element without overexplaining. medium ( Scene 11 )
- Split-screen credits with the gospel chorus singing 'Pass On The Love' innovatively extends the emotional high, tying back to the featured song. medium ( Scene 12 )
- The red jacket as a recurring prop symbolizes Billy's presence and protection, culminating in its use to wrap the infant. low ( Scene 2, 11 )
- Over-reliance on exposition The writer frequently uses voice-over (e.g., sequences 4 and 11) to explain emotions and backstory, which, while effective for a short, misses opportunities for visual storytelling to convey the same depth, potentially making scenes feel told rather than shown. medium
- Stereotypical antagonist portrayals Characters like the father (sequence 8) and bullies (sequence 5) are drawn with broad strokes of anger and slurs, overlooking nuanced motivations that could add complexity without diluting the theme of intolerance. medium
- Inconsistent formatting and minor errors The script has occasional inconsistencies like varying capitalization in action lines (e.g., 'CU' vs. 'ECU' without standardization) and typos (e.g., 'Havi-what?' in sequence 3), which suggest it needs a final polish; also, some scene headers lack precision in transitions. low
- Repetitive phrasing Phrases like 'push' are hammered repeatedly (sequences 5, 8, 9, 10), and similar emotional beats in phone calls (sequences 4 and 11) feel formulaic, indicating a need for more varied language to avoid amateurish redundancy. low
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Executive Summary
- The screenplay excels in its raw and visceral portrayal of grief and trauma. Eve's emotional journey from despair and anger to a moment of profound empathy is incredibly moving and provides a strong emotional anchor for the story. Her internal monologues are particularly effective in conveying her inner turmoil. high ( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- The use of flashbacks is highly effective in building the narrative and revealing the motivations behind Billy's tragic fate. The contrast between the loving sibling relationship and the harsh realities of bullying and parental rejection creates significant dramatic impact. high ( Scene 3 (FLASHBACK - INT. APARTMENT) Scene 5 (FLASHBACK - INT. HIGH SCHOOL HALL - A MID-DECEMBER AFTERNOON) Scene 8 (INT. DINING ROOM) Scene 9 (EXT. - PLAYGROUND - DAYTIME) )
- The discovery and care of the infant by Eve is a powerful and unexpected turning point. It represents a shift from despair to active compassion and offers a symbolic representation of hope and a 'new beginning,' mirroring the film's themes of tolerance and breaking cycles. high ( Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- The central theme of 'PUSH' – the devastating consequences of intolerance, bullying, and societal pressure – is powerfully conveyed. The screenplay effectively shows how external forces can 'push' individuals to their breaking point. high ( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 5 (FLASHBACK - INT. HIGH SCHOOL HALL - A MID-DECEMBER AFTERNOON) Scene 10 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION) )
- The visual storytelling, particularly the use of the subway station as a liminal space and the juxtaposition of the past and present, is effective. The sound design, especially the train roars, enhances the emotional intensity. medium ( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- While Eve's phone conversation with her parents is crucial for exposition and character motivation, it feels somewhat lengthy and repetitive. The 'blah, blah, blah' comment, while intended to show her detachment, could be more subtly conveyed or the dialogue streamlined. medium ( Scene 4 (INT. SUBWAY STATION) )
- The introduction of the 'two Teenage Girls' and their gossip feels a bit on-the-nose in setting up the bullying. While functional, it could be integrated more organically into the scene. low ( Scene 5 (FLASHBACK - INT. HIGH SCHOOL HALL - A MID-DECEMBER AFTERNOON) )
- The dialogue between Eve and Billy in this flashback, particularly Eve's somewhat cynical view of love, while establishing their dynamic, can feel a little overly expository and less naturalistic. The line 'I’d bet anything you’re working on some kind of love poem or story in that notebook of yours right now' feels a bit too on-the-dot. medium ( Scene 3 (FLASHBACK - INT. APARTMENT) )
- Javier's characterization as someone who readily abandons Billy due to societal pressure feels a bit underdeveloped. His motivations for so definitively cutting ties could be explored with more nuance, making his later presence at the station in Sequence 10 more impactful. medium ( Scene 9 (EXT. - PLAYGROUND - DAYTIME) )
- The visual representation of Billy's tormentors, parents, and Javier 'pushing' him is very direct. While effective thematically, a slightly more abstract or psychologically driven visual might enhance the feeling of internal struggle over external force. low ( Scene 10 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION) )
- While the film centers on 'tolerance,' a deeper exploration of what that means beyond the immediate context of Billy's tragedy and Eve's experience could be beneficial. The 'tool for tolerance' stated in the opening could be more explicitly demonstrated through Eve's actions or internal growth beyond caring for the infant. medium
- The backstory of Billy and Javier's relationship, beyond the 'I love you' and the mention of shared things, could be slightly more fleshed out to fully invest the audience in Billy's heartbreak. low
- While the ending provides a hopeful resolution for Eve, the ultimate fate of the infant remains a lingering question. While it serves the thematic purpose of Eve's compassion, a brief hint of a plan for the infant's future could add a layer of completeness. low
- The song 'Pass On The Love' is present, but its thematic integration into the core narrative could be more pronounced, beyond its use in the credits. While the message is clear, connecting it more directly to Eve's evolving perspective might strengthen its impact. low
- The motivations of the student tormentors and the father, while clearly depicted as cruel and bigoted, could benefit from a slightly more nuanced portrayal to avoid them becoming solely archetypal villains, although for a short film, this is a challenging balance. low
- The title 'PUSH' is incredibly apt and multi-layered, referring to the act of bullying, the pressure on Billy, and ultimately, Eve's decision to push forward and embrace compassion. high ( Scene 1 (PUSH) )
- The recurring motif of the subway station acts as a powerful and evocative setting, representing a space of transit, despair, and unexpected encounters. high ( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- Eve's initial defensiveness and readiness to use a box cutter, contrasting with her eventual nurturing of the infant, showcases a significant and compelling character arc of transformation. high ( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- The inclusion of the wilting bouquets and the trash can as central elements in the subway station adds a layer of poignant symbolism to Eve's emotional state and the place of Billy's death. medium ( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- The visual representation of Billy being 'pushed' by various forces (students, parents, Javier) in Sequence 10 is a striking and memorable visual metaphor for the film's central theme. high ( Scene 10 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION) )
- Over-reliance on exposition via voiceover While Eve's voiceover is crucial for conveying her internal state, particularly in Scenes 2, 4, and 11, some of these passages become quite lengthy and can feel more like telling than showing. For example, the extensive explanation of her feelings towards her parents in Sequence 4 could be partially conveyed through more visual cues or briefer, more impactful lines. medium
- The clear dichotomy of good/evil in antagonist portrayals While the thematic point about intolerance is made, characters like the father, the teenage boy bully, and even Javier (in his final rejection) are portrayed as unequivocally negative. A touch more nuance in their motivations or complexities, even in brief moments, could make the narrative feel more grounded and less like a direct allegory, though this is a common challenge in shorts aiming for strong thematic messages. low
- On-the-nose dialogue and plot mechanics Some of the dialogue, particularly in the early flashbacks, can be quite direct in stating the characters' emotions or plot points. For instance, Billy saying 'Love's a risk, sis, sometimes you have to push yourself to the edge and take a chance' in Scene 3, while thematic, is very explicit. Similarly, the immediate use of the box cutter in Scene 2 by Eve, while designed for immediate threat, could be perceived as a slightly melodramatic setup. medium
- Repetitive thematic reinforcement The word 'push' is used repeatedly, both in dialogue and description (e.g., 'Eve', 'Push.' in Scenes 5 and 8, and the students' chant in Scene 10). While it reinforces the central theme, the repetition can sometimes feel heavy-handed, especially when it's explicitly stated by the protagonist. medium
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Executive Summary
- The screenplay effectively establishes the emotional core of the story through the character of Eve and her grief over the loss of her brother Billy. The scenes in the subway station, where Eve grapples with her memories and emotions, are particularly poignant and well-executed. high ( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 4 (INT. SUBWAY STATION) )
- The flashback sequences effectively explore the events leading up to Billy's tragic death, providing valuable context and depth to the characters and their relationships. The Thanksgiving dinner scene, in particular, is a powerful and emotionally charged moment that showcases the screenplay's strong character development. high ( Scene 5 (FLASHBACK - INT. HIGH SCHOOL HALL - A MID-DECEMBER AFTERNOON) Scene 8 (INT. DINING ROOM - THANKSGIVING AFTERNOON) )
- The final sequence, where Eve encounters the abandoned infant and contemplates her own future, is a poignant and thought-provoking conclusion that ties the narrative together and leaves a lasting impact on the audience. high ( Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- The opening title sequence and dedication effectively set the tone and thematic focus of the screenplay, establishing it as a work that aims to address important social issues surrounding adolescent and teenage victims of abuse, bullying, and exploitation. medium ( Scene 1 (PUSH) )
- The use of the a cappella song 'Pass On The Love' during the closing credits adds an emotional and thematic resonance to the overall narrative, reinforcing the screenplay's message of tolerance and compassion. medium ( Scene 12 (SPLIT SCREEN - CREDITS SCREEN RIGHT - INT. SUBWAY PLATFORM) )
- While the flashback sequences are generally well-executed, there are moments where the pacing feels uneven, with some scenes feeling slightly rushed or underdeveloped. Improving the overall pacing and flow of these transitions could enhance the screenplay's narrative strength. medium ( Scene 3 (FLASHBACK - INT. APARTMENT) Scene 7 (INT. STAIRCASE OUTSIDE DINING ROOM) )
- The playground scene, while important in establishing Billy's relationship with Javier, could benefit from additional development and exploration of their dynamic. Expanding on this sequence could deepen the audience's understanding of Billy's character and the challenges he faces. medium ( Scene 9 (EXT. - PLAYGROUND - DAYTIME) )
- While the ending is poignant and thought-provoking, the screenplay could potentially benefit from a more definitive resolution or conclusion for Eve's character arc. Exploring her next steps or providing a clearer sense of her future direction could strengthen the overall narrative. medium ( Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- The incorporation of the found infant and Eve's decision to take the child with her is a unique and compelling narrative choice that adds depth and complexity to the story. This element could be further explored and developed to enhance the screenplay's thematic resonance. high ( Scene 11 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
- The use of the a cappella song 'Pass On The Love' during the closing credits is a stylistic choice that effectively reinforces the screenplay's thematic focus on tolerance and compassion. This unique approach to the credits sequence is a notable strength of the screenplay. medium ( Scene 12 (SPLIT SCREEN - CREDITS SCREEN RIGHT - INT. SUBWAY PLATFORM) )
- Lack of Diverse Perspectives While the screenplay effectively explores the challenges faced by the LGBTQ+ community, it could potentially benefit from the inclusion of more diverse perspectives and experiences. Incorporating additional characters or storylines that represent a wider range of backgrounds and identities could further enhance the screenplay's thematic depth and resonance. medium
- Uneven Pacing As noted in the areas of improvement, there are moments in the screenplay where the pacing feels slightly uneven, with some scenes feeling rushed or underdeveloped. Addressing these pacing issues could help to create a more cohesive and engaging narrative. medium
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Executive Summary
- Powerful emotional authenticity in depicting grief and trauma, with raw, believable character reactions high ( Scene 2 (Subway Station - Present) Scene 10 (Billy's Suicide Scene) )
- Strong, relevant social message about LGBTQ+ acceptance and the devastating consequences of bullying high ( Scene 3 (Flashback - Billy's Coming Out) Scene 5 (School Bullying Scene) )
- Effective use of visual symbolism (subway station as liminal space, red clothing as connection) medium ( Scene 11 (Baby Discovery and Redemption) )
- Compelling character dynamics, particularly the sibling relationship between Eve and Billy high ( Scene 8 (Thanksgiving Dinner Confrontation) )
- Ambitious integration of musical elements that reinforce the thematic message medium ( Scene 12 (Final Musical Sequence) )
- The abandoned baby plot device feels somewhat contrived and convenient for the redemption arc medium ( Scene 11 (Baby Discovery) )
- Some dialogue veers into melodrama, particularly in high-emotion scenes medium ( Scene 8 (Thanksgiving Dinner) Scene 9 (Playground Confrontation) )
- Secondary characters (bullies, Javier) could benefit from more nuanced development medium ( Scene 5 (School Hallway) Scene 9 (Playground) )
- Pacing issues with frequent flashback interruptions that disrupt narrative flow medium ( Scene Multiple (Flashback Sequences) )
- The 'push' metaphor becomes somewhat heavy-handed in the climactic sequence low ( Scene 10 (Suicide Scene) )
- Lack of deeper exploration of Javier's motivations and internal conflict medium ( Scene 9 (Javier's Departure) )
- Missing transitional scenes showing Eve's journey to the subway station low ( Scene 4 (Phone Call with Parents) )
- Insufficient development of the parents' emotional journey and potential redemption medium ( Scene Multiple (Parent Scenes) )
- Limited exploration of Eve's life and relationships outside of her connection to Billy low ( Scene General (Throughout) )
- Strong opening that immediately establishes mood, setting, and character vulnerability high ( Scene 2 (Opening Scene) )
- Effective use of the notebook as a symbolic object representing Billy's voice and legacy medium ( Scene 11 (Final Scene) )
- Bold choice to visually depict the collective 'pushing' through metaphorical representation high ( Scene 10 (Suicide Sequence) )
- Unconventional integration of gospel choir for thematic reinforcement in closing medium ( Scene 12 (Musical Finale) )
- Emotional Subtlety The writer tends toward overt emotional expression rather than subtext, particularly in high-stakes scenes where characters explicitly state their feelings rather than showing through behavior medium
- Secondary Character Development Supporting characters like Javier and the parents are primarily functional to the main narrative rather than fully realized individuals with their own complexities medium
- Dialogue Over-explanation Characters sometimes explain their emotions and motivations directly rather than allowing subtext to emerge naturally from the situation medium
- Convenient Plot Devices The abandoned baby discovery serves the thematic purpose but feels somewhat contrived as a narrative solution medium
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Title: PUSH
Genre: Drama
Summary: "PUSH" is a poignant exploration of grief, identity, and the impact of societal pressures on personal relationships. The film opens with an intense auditory experience as the protagonist, Eve, navigates her tumultuous emotions in the wake of her brother Billy’s untimely death. Set predominantly in a subway station during Christmas Eve, the narrative unfolds through a series of flashbacks and present-day interactions.
In the early scenes, Eve confronts her own fears and regrets, reflecting on Billy’s struggles as he wrestles with his sexuality and the hostile reactions from their father. Billy’s attempts to come out and take risks in love culminate in family conflict as he faces rejection and bullying at school. The film showcases their sibling bond and the barriers that keep them apart, with moments of warmth juxtaposed against heart-wrenching despair.
As the story progresses, Eve grapples with her grief, internalizing the pain of losing her brother, leading to moments of anger, reflection, and the chaotic public bullying Billy endured. In a climactic scene, the emotional buildup reaches its peak as external and internal conflicts coalesce, resulting in Billy’s desperate moment at the subway edge, drowning in the chants of "Push!" from tormentors, friends, and family alike.
The final act reveals a turning point for Eve, who discovers a crying infant amidst her turmoil at the subway platform. This serendipitous encounter sparks a transformative moment for her as she reconciles with her parents over the phone, nurturing a newfound sense of purpose while holding onto the memories of her brother.
In the film's conclusion, a gospel performance resonates with themes of love, hope, and societal change, embodying the message to "Pass On The Love." This hopeful finale encapsulates the journey from grief to healing, emphasizing the importance of connection, acceptance, and the enduring spirit of kindness in the face of adversity.
"PUSH" is a heartfelt examination of the complexities of love and loss, underscoring the need for empathy and understanding in a world often fraught with bullying and rejection.
PUSH
Synopsis
On Christmas Eve, a poignant tale unfolds in a dimly lit subway station where 16-year-old Eve finds herself alone, grappling with the aftermath of her brother Billy's tragic death. The screenplay opens with Eve sitting against a support beam, surrounded by wilted bouquets, a haunting reminder of loss. As she reflects on her family's turmoil and her brother's struggles with identity and acceptance, the audience is drawn into her emotional turmoil. Eve's voiceover reveals her anger and confusion, expressing her feelings of abandonment and despair. She recalls the moment her brother came out to her, revealing his love for Javier, a revelation that would ultimately lead to his tragic fate.
Flashbacks reveal the dynamics of Eve and Billy's relationship, showcasing their bond and the challenges Billy faced as a gay teenager in a hostile environment. The narrative shifts between Eve's present anguish and the past moments that shaped their lives, including a Thanksgiving dinner where Billy bravely declares his love for Javier, only to be met with violent rejection from their father. This pivotal moment sets the stage for the family's unraveling, as Billy's struggle for acceptance culminates in his heartbreaking decision to end his life.
As Eve navigates her grief, she encounters a young girl in the subway, a fleeting moment that symbolizes hope and connection. Despite her initial fear, Eve's instinct to reach out reflects her desire to help others who are suffering. The screenplay poignantly captures the ripple effects of bullying and intolerance, illustrating how societal pressures can push individuals to their breaking point.
In a climactic moment, Eve confronts her own feelings of guilt and anger, questioning why Billy didn't come to her for help. The subway station becomes a metaphor for the isolation and despair that many young people face, and Eve's journey is one of self-discovery and healing. The narrative culminates in a powerful scene where Eve finds an abandoned infant in the trash, a moment that signifies a new beginning and the potential for love and compassion in the face of tragedy.
Ultimately, 'PUSH' is a story about the importance of tolerance, understanding, and the bonds of family. It challenges viewers to reflect on their own prejudices and the impact of their actions on others. The screenplay concludes with Eve embracing her role as a protector, vowing to pass on the love that her brother was denied, and offering a glimmer of hope for a brighter future.
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Scene by Scene Summaries
- The scene opens with the deafening roar of a passing subway, immersing the audience in an intense sound experience against a black screen. This auditory introduction sets the tone for the film, culminating in the display of the title 'PUSH'. The scene concludes with a 'CUT TO:' direction, transitioning to the next part of the screenplay, without any characters, dialogue, or visual actions.
- In a dimly lit subway station on Christmas Eve, 16-year-old Eve wakes up to confront a hooded figure, mistaking her for a threat. The figure, revealed to be a frightened young girl, flees despite Eve's attempt to show compassion by offering food. Frustrated and emotional, Eve reflects on her troubled life and memories of a deceased friend named Billy, expressing her sorrow and vulnerability as the scene closes with a close-up of her teary eyes.
- In a flashback scene, 18-year-old Billy excitedly announces he's in love, prompting a skeptical response from his sister Eve, who worries about his frequent heartbreaks. Their conversation shifts from playful teasing to a heartfelt hug, revealing their close bond despite underlying tensions about love and family. The scene culminates in a surprising revelation that Billy's love interest is named Javier, hinting at a same-sex attraction, before cutting back to the present.
- In a subway station, Eve reflects on her late friend Billy's struggles with his sexuality and her feelings of confusion and regret for not realizing it sooner. As she answers a tense phone call from her parents, who plead for her to come home without questions, Eve responds with sarcasm and anger, ultimately hanging up. Overwhelmed by grief and frustration, she rants against the media's portrayal of Billy's death, insisting he was 'pushed.' The scene captures her emotional turmoil through various shots, culminating in a powerful moment as a train rushes by, transitioning into the sound of a school bell.
- In a flashback set in a high school hallway, two girls gossip about Billy Davis, suggesting he might be gay after seeing him with a 'Spanish guy.' Their conversation escalates until a teenage boy confronts Billy, hurling homophobic slurs and stealing his notebook. Despite the bullying, Billy asserts himself by retrieving his notebook, but the taunting continues as a crowd laughs. The scene ends with Eve's face filling the frame as she says 'Push,' hinting at a narrative transition.
- In a cozy dining room on Thanksgiving afternoon, Father eagerly awaits dinner, urging his family to join him at the table. Mother enters with the final dish and calls for their children, Billy and Eve, to come downstairs. Father adds a stern reminder not to delay, but Eve responds affirmatively from off-screen. The scene captures a warm, familial atmosphere filled with anticipation as Mother prepares to take her seat, leading to a cut to another part of the film.
- In this tense scene, Eve confronts Billy at the bottom of a staircase, questioning his certainty about a plan. Billy, uncertain yet defensive, suggests they act immediately. Their whispered exchange is abruptly interrupted by Father, who impatiently pushes past Eve, demanding they hurry to the dining room. Eve calls out to Billy in distress as the scene cuts to the next part of the film.
- During a tense Thanksgiving dinner, Billy attempts to come out as gay to his dismissive and hostile father, Martin. As Billy struggles to express his feelings, Martin interrupts with demands for food and escalates the confrontation with homophobic slurs and physical aggression. Despite his mother's attempts to mediate, the situation deteriorates, leading to Billy's emotional exit from the home. Eve, serving as a narrative observer, punctuates the scene with reflective commentary, highlighting the painful conflict and familial rejection.
- In this emotionally charged scene, Billy sits alone on a seesaw, writing in his notebook when Javier informs him of his permanent return to Pamplona for a job. This revelation shocks Billy, who pleads for their relationship, revealing he came out to his family but faced rejection. Javier criticizes Billy's decision and insists their relationship is too complicated to continue, leading to a heated argument. As high school students mock them, Billy's desperation escalates, culminating in him shaking the fence and attempting to climb it while shouting for Javier not to leave. The scene ends with a close-up of Eve's angry face as she commands 'Push,' highlighting the emotional turmoil and public humiliation Billy experiences.
- In this intense scene, Billy stands on a subway platform, grappling with overwhelming emotions of sadness and rage as he faces a group of student tormentors, his parents, and Javier, all chanting 'Push!' and advancing toward him. The atmosphere is charged with tension as Billy's internal conflict escalates, leading him to the edge of the platform. He emits a primal scream that merges with the sound of an approaching train, culminating in a chaotic climax before the scene abruptly cuts to blackout.
- In a poignant subway station scene on Christmas Eve, Eve mourns the loss of Billy at the spot of his death, grappling with grief and suicidal thoughts. A ghostly apparition of Billy offers her comfort, leading to a shared memory that brings a moment of laughter. As she discovers a crying infant in a trash can, Eve finds a renewed sense of purpose in caring for the child. A phone call with her parents reveals familial tension but ends with a promise of support and a fresh start. The scene concludes with Eve walking away from the platform, holding the infant and Billy's notebook, symbolizing hope amidst despair.
- In the final scene, presented in a split-screen format, a gospel singer and a high school chorus perform 'Pass On The Love' on a subway platform, echoing themes of overcoming fear and hate while promoting love, hope, and social responsibility. The uplifting lyrics encourage active participation from the audience, addressing parents and siblings to instill values of worth and pride in children. As the performance concludes, the scene fades out with the music and rolling credits, leaving a message of unity and a call to action against negativity.
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Analysis: The screenplay effectively develops its characters, particularly Eve and Billy, showcasing their emotional journeys and complex relationships. However, there are opportunities to enhance the depth of supporting characters and refine their arcs to strengthen audience engagement.
Key Strengths
- Eve's emotional journey is compelling, showcasing her transformation from anger to acceptance, particularly in scenes where she confronts her grief and family dynamics.
- Billy's character arc is poignant, illustrating his struggle with identity and love, especially during his coming out scene and interactions with Javier.
Areas to Improve
- Supporting characters, particularly the parents and antagonists, lack depth and complexity, which diminishes their impact on the main characters' arcs.
Analysis: The screenplay effectively establishes a compelling premise centered around themes of grief, identity, and societal pressures. However, enhancing the clarity of character motivations and refining the emotional arcs could further engage the audience.
Key Strengths
- The exploration of sibling dynamics and the impact of societal rejection creates a relatable and emotionally charged narrative.
Analysis: The screenplay 'PUSH' effectively explores themes of grief, identity, and societal pressures through a well-structured narrative that intertwines the lives of Eve and Billy. The emotional depth of the characters is compelling, and the pacing maintains audience engagement. However, there are areas for improvement, particularly in refining dialogue for clarity and enhancing the resolution to provide a more satisfying conclusion.
Key Strengths
- The emotional depth of Eve's character and her journey through grief is compelling and relatable.
Areas to Improve
- Some dialogue lacks clarity and could be more impactful with tighter writing.
Analysis: The screenplay 'PUSH' effectively conveys its themes of grief, identity, and the impact of societal pressures on individuals, particularly within the context of LGBTQ+ experiences. The emotional depth of the characters, especially Eve and Billy, enhances the narrative's resonance. However, there are areas where the themes could be further refined for clarity and impact, particularly in the integration of family dynamics and societal commentary.
Key Strengths
- The emotional depth of Eve's character and her journey through grief and guilt is a significant strength, providing a relatable and poignant exploration of loss.
- Billy's character arc, particularly his struggle with identity and acceptance, adds a powerful layer to the narrative, highlighting the importance of love and understanding.
Analysis: The screenplay 'PUSH' effectively utilizes visual imagery to convey deep emotional themes surrounding grief, identity, and familial conflict. The vivid descriptions of settings and character emotions create a strong atmosphere that enhances the narrative's impact. However, there are opportunities to further enhance the visual storytelling through more dynamic imagery and symbolism.
Key Strengths
- The emotional depth conveyed through the subway station setting is particularly striking, serving as a powerful symbol of isolation and grief. The imagery of Eve weeping at the memorial site effectively captures her turmoil.
Analysis: The screenplay 'PUSH' effectively elicits strong emotional responses through its exploration of grief, identity, and familial conflict. The characters, particularly Eve and Billy, are well-developed, allowing audiences to invest deeply in their journeys. However, there are opportunities to enhance emotional depth by further exploring the complexities of their relationships and the societal pressures they face.
Key Strengths
- The emotional authenticity of Eve's grief and her relationship with Billy is a standout strength, particularly in scenes where she confronts her feelings of loss and guilt.
Analysis: The screenplay effectively presents conflict and stakes through the emotional turmoil of its characters, particularly Eve and Billy. However, there are opportunities to enhance narrative tension by deepening character interactions and exploring the consequences of societal pressures more vividly.
Key Strengths
- The screenplay excels in portraying the emotional depth of its characters, particularly in scenes where Eve confronts her grief and guilt over Billy's death.
Analysis: The screenplay 'PUSH' presents a poignant exploration of grief, identity, and societal pressures through the lens of its two central characters, Eve and Billy. Its originality lies in the raw emotional depth and the unique narrative structure that intertwines present-day struggles with impactful flashbacks. The use of a subway station as a central setting symbolizes both confinement and transition, enhancing the thematic resonance of the story. The screenplay effectively challenges societal norms and expectations, particularly regarding LGBTQ+ issues, making it a significant contribution to contemporary narratives.
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Screenplay Story Analysis
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Character Eve
Description Eve's emotional responses fluctuate dramatically between scenes, particularly her anger and grief. In Scene 2, she is aggressive and confrontational, while in Scene 11, she is reflective and forgiving. This inconsistency may confuse the audience regarding her emotional state and motivations.
( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 4 (INT. SUBWAY STATION) Scene 11 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) ) -
Character Billy
Description Billy's character shifts from being hopeful and loving to being portrayed as a victim of bullying without sufficient development of his internal conflict. His transition from a confident young man in love to a broken individual feels abrupt and lacks depth.
( Scene 3 (FLASHBACK - INT. APARTMENT) Scene 8 (INT. DINING ROOM) Scene 9 (EXT. - PLAYGROUND - DAYTIME) )
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Description The timeline of events surrounding Billy's death is unclear. The transition from his life to Eve's grief lacks clarity, particularly how quickly Eve learns about his death and her immediate emotional response. This could be better established to enhance narrative flow.
( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 10 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION) ) -
Description Eve's knowledge of the public perception of Billy's death seems inconsistent. She claims to know the truth about what happened, yet her understanding of the events leading to his death is not fully explored, creating a gap in her character's insight.
( Scene 4 (INT. SUBWAY STATION) Scene 10 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION) )
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Description The reaction of Billy's parents to his coming out is extreme and leads to his subsequent actions, but the script does not adequately explore the aftermath of this confrontation. The lack of follow-up on how this affects the family dynamics creates a significant plot hole.
( Scene 8 (INT. DINING ROOM) Scene 10 (INT. - SUBWAY STATION) ) -
Description Billy's confrontation with Javier and the bullying students lacks a resolution. The scene ends with Billy feeling abandoned, but there is no clear transition to his emotional state afterward, leaving a gap in the narrative.
( Scene 9 (EXT. - PLAYGROUND - DAYTIME) )
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Description Some of Billy's dialogue about love feels overly scripted and lacks the natural flow of a conversation between siblings. The emotional weight of his revelation could be conveyed more authentically through less formal language.
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Description Eve's internal monologue sometimes feels too polished for a teenager in distress. The language used may not accurately reflect the raw emotions and confusion she would realistically experience in her situation.
( Scene 4 (INT. SUBWAY STATION) )
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Element Eve's emotional outbursts
( Scene 2 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - 5AM CHRISTMAS EVE) Scene 4 (INT. SUBWAY STATION) Scene 11 (INT. SUBWAY STATION - PRESENT) )
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Element Billy's bullying incidents
( Scene 5 (FLASHBACK - INT. HIGH SCHOOL HALL - A MID-DECEMBER AFTERNOON) Scene 9 (EXT. - PLAYGROUND - DAYTIME) )
Suggestion The bullying incidents could be consolidated to create a more powerful narrative impact. Repeating similar scenarios dilutes their significance and could be combined to show a progression of events.
Characters in the screenplay, and their arcs:
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| Eve | Eve begins the short as a conflicted and emotionally charged teenager, struggling with her grief over Billy's death and her feelings of isolation within her family. Throughout the narrative, she confronts her emotions, grappling with her resentment towards her brother and her longing for understanding. As she navigates her family's dynamics, she evolves from a place of anger and skepticism to a more empathetic and introspective state. By the end of the short, Eve finds a sense of acceptance and responsibility, recognizing her need to heal and connect with her family's past, ultimately leading to a poignant moment of self-discovery and emotional release. | While Eve's character arc is compelling, it may feel rushed in a short format. The emotional depth and complexity of her journey could be challenging to convey fully within a limited timeframe. The transitions between her feelings of anger, grief, and acceptance may need to be more nuanced to avoid feeling abrupt or superficial. Additionally, the screenplay should ensure that Eve's interactions with other characters effectively highlight her internal struggles and growth. | To improve Eve's character arc in the short screenplay, consider focusing on a single pivotal moment that encapsulates her emotional journey. This could be a confrontation with a family member or a moment of reflection that crystallizes her feelings about Billy and her family. Streamlining her emotional transitions can help maintain clarity and impact. Additionally, incorporating visual storytelling elements, such as flashbacks or symbolic imagery, can enhance her internal conflict and growth without requiring extensive dialogue. This approach will allow the audience to connect with Eve's journey more deeply within the constraints of a short format. |
| Billy | Billy begins as a conflicted young man, struggling with his identity and the expectations placed upon him by his family and society. As the story progresses, he confronts his fears and vulnerabilities, ultimately finding the courage to reveal his truth to his parents. This act of bravery marks a turning point in his character arc, as he moves from a place of uncertainty to one of self-acceptance and emotional growth. By the end of the short, Billy has transformed into a more confident individual, embracing his identity and seeking authentic connections, particularly with Javier. His journey reflects a deep emotional transformation, culminating in a sense of acceptance and love. | While Billy's character arc is compelling and showcases significant emotional depth, it may benefit from a clearer structure given the short format. The transitions between his internal struggles and moments of growth could be more defined to ensure that the audience fully grasps his transformation within the limited time. Additionally, some emotional beats may feel rushed, potentially leaving viewers wanting more context for his decisions and relationships. | To improve Billy's character arc in the short screenplay, consider focusing on a single pivotal moment that encapsulates his internal conflict and growth. This could be a climactic scene where he confronts his parents or a moment of vulnerability with Javier that crystallizes his journey. Additionally, incorporating visual storytelling elements, such as flashbacks or symbolic imagery, could enhance the emotional weight of his experiences without requiring extensive dialogue. Streamlining his emotional journey to highlight key moments of change will help the audience connect with him more deeply within the short format. |
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Theme Analysis Overview
Identified Themes
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Societal Pressure, Bullying, and Lack of Acceptance
95%
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Billy is subjected to homophobic bullying in high school, his father's violent rejection of his sexuality during Thanksgiving dinner, and the taunting from students, parents, and Javier in the subway station, all contributing to immense pressure. Eve also experiences societal pressure and isolation, particularly after Billy's death, grappling with her parents' calls and her own feelings of helplessness.
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This theme explores how external forces, including social prejudice, verbal abuse, and familial rejection, can crush an individual's spirit, leading to profound despair and, in Billy's case, a tragic act. The screenplay highlights the destructive power of intolerance and the immense burden placed on those who deviate from societal norms. |
This theme is intrinsically linked to the primary theme, acting as its direct cause. The pressure, bullying, and lack of acceptance are the fundamental elements that lead to Billy's 'push' and Eve's subsequent grief.
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Strengthening Societal Pressure, Bullying, and Lack of Acceptance
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Identity and Acceptance (Especially LGBTQ+)
90%
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Billy's revelation of his love for Javier and his subsequent coming out are central to the plot. His father's violent rejection and the taunting he receives directly stem from his sexual identity. Eve's journey also involves a form of seeking acceptance, particularly from her parents and in understanding Billy's truth.
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This theme delves into the struggle for self-discovery and the desperate need for validation, especially for those whose identities are often marginalized. It examines the pain of not being accepted for who you are, both by society and by one's own family, and the devastating impact this can have. |
This theme is a critical component of the primary theme. Billy's struggle with his identity and the subsequent lack of acceptance are the direct triggers for the events that define the screenplay's central tragedy.
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Family Dynamics and Dysfunction
85%
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The dysfunctional relationship between Billy, Eve, and their parents is a significant backdrop. Father's aggressive and homophobic reaction during Thanksgiving, Mother's ineffective attempts at peacemaking, and their strained relationship with Eve after Billy's death all contribute to the turmoil. Eve's voice-over mentions her 'parents' issues' early on.
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This theme examines the complex and often damaging relationships within a family unit. It highlights how a lack of communication, emotional abuse, and unaddressed issues can create a toxic environment that negatively impacts individuals, especially during times of crisis. |
Family dysfunction directly exacerbates the primary theme. The parents' reactions and the overall family atmosphere contribute significantly to Billy's feeling of being 'pushed' and Eve's subsequent isolation and grief.
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Grief, Loss, and Trauma
80%
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Eve's struggle after Billy's death is the most prominent example. She visits his memorial spot, experiences suicidal ideations, and grapples with intense grief and anger. The memory of Billy and his death permeates much of her experience.
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This theme explores the profound emotional and psychological impact of loss and trauma. It examines how individuals cope with the death of a loved one, the lingering pain, and the difficulty of moving forward when deeply affected by a traumatic event. |
This theme is the direct consequence and narrative consequence of the primary theme. The loss of Billy, caused by the pressures and lack of acceptance, drives Eve's arc and much of the screenplay's emotional weight.
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Hope, Resilience, and Redemption
75%
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Eve's discovery of the infant and her decision to take it with her, along with the reconciliation with her parents and the uplifting song at the end, suggests a path towards hope and resilience. The gospel song 'Pass On The Love' acts as a powerful message of overcoming adversity and building a better future.
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This theme focuses on the human capacity to endure hardship, find light in darkness, and move towards a brighter future. It suggests that even after profound loss and trauma, there is the possibility for healing, growth, and the continuation of life and love. |
This theme serves as the resolution and counterpoint to the primary theme. While the primary theme depicts the devastating consequences of societal issues, this theme offers a message of overcoming those issues and finding a way to live and love despite the pain.
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The Power of Words and Rumors
70%
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The initial gossip among the high school girls about Billy and Javier plants the seed for much of the subsequent bullying. The repeated chanting of 'Push!' by various groups also acts as a powerful, destructive force.
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This theme highlights how words, whether whispered gossip or explicit taunts, can have significant and often destructive consequences. It emphasizes the impact of rumors in shaping perceptions and fueling prejudice, as well as the power of collective verbal abuse. |
This theme supports the primary theme by illustrating specific mechanisms through which societal pressure and bullying manifest. The spread of rumors and the chanting of 'Push!' are direct tools that contribute to the overwhelming pressure on Billy.
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Screenwriting Resources on Themes
Articles
| Site | Description |
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| Studio Binder | Movie Themes: Examples of Common Themes for Screenwriters |
| Coverfly | Improving your Screenplay's theme |
| John August | Writing from Theme |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
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| Story, Plot, Genre, Theme - Screenwriting Basics | Screenwriting basics - beginner video |
| What is theme | Discussion on ways to layer theme into a screenplay. |
| Thematic Mistakes You're Making in Your Script | Common Theme mistakes and Philosophical Conflicts |
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Emotional Analysis
Emotional Variety
Critique
- The screenplay demonstrates strong emotional variety overall, with scenes effectively transitioning between suspense, empathy, fear, surprise, joy, and sadness. However, there's a noticeable imbalance toward negative emotions, with joy appearing only briefly in Scene 3 (intensity 4) and Scene 12 (intensity 7), creating an emotionally draining experience.
- Scene 6's warm familial tone (joy intensity 2) feels disconnected from the surrounding emotional landscape and could be better integrated to provide more meaningful contrast. The scene's emotional isolation reduces its impact as a respite from the prevailing sadness and tension.
- The emotional journey heavily favors despair and grief, with sadness intensity consistently high (8-10) across most scenes after Scene 2. While appropriate for the subject matter, the lack of emotional relief points risks audience fatigue and reduces the impact of the most tragic moments.
Suggestions
- Introduce more moments of genuine connection and warmth in earlier scenes between Billy and Eve to establish stronger emotional contrast. For example, expand Scene 3 to include more shared laughter or positive memories that will make Billy's loss more poignant.
- Consider adding brief moments of unexpected kindness or beauty in the subway station scenes (2, 4, 11) to provide emotional breathing room. A small act of human connection from a stranger or a moment of quiet beauty could offer temporary relief without undermining the serious tone.
- Strengthen the hopeful elements in Scene 11 by showing Eve experiencing moments of genuine connection with the infant before the phone call with her parents, creating a more gradual emotional transition from despair to hope.
Emotional Intensity Distribution
Critique
- The emotional intensity distribution shows problematic clustering, with Scenes 8-10 all reaching maximum intensity levels (9-10 across multiple emotions), creating an emotionally exhausting sequence that may overwhelm viewers and reduce the impact of the climax.
- Scene 7 serves as an effective intensity ramp-up (suspense 8, fear 7) but is immediately followed by the extremely intense Scene 8, missing an opportunity for strategic pacing. The emotional whiplash between these high-intensity scenes reduces their individual impact.
- The screenplay lacks sufficient emotional valleys between major peaks. After the intense opening sequence, the emotional intensity remains consistently high, with Scene 6 providing only minimal relief (joy intensity 2) before plunging back into high-stakes emotional territory.
Suggestions
- Reduce the intensity of Scene 7 slightly by making the confrontation less physically aggressive from the father, saving the full explosive anger for Scene 8. This would create a more gradual escalation toward the climactic rejection.
- Add a brief, quieter moment between Scenes 9 and 10 where Billy shows vulnerability or reflection rather than immediate escalation to the platform confrontation. This would give viewers emotional breathing room before the final tragedy.
- Strengthen Scene 6's emotional contrast by emphasizing the warmth and normalcy of the Thanksgiving setting before the conflict erupts, making the subsequent rejection more devastating while providing necessary emotional variation.
Empathy For Characters
Critique
- Empathy for Billy is exceptionally strong (intensity 9-10 across multiple scenes) due to his vulnerability and the multiple forms of rejection he faces. However, this empathy is primarily built through his victimization rather than his agency or positive qualities.
- Eve's empathy journey is well-developed but inconsistent - she reaches maximum empathy (intensity 10) in Scene 11, but earlier scenes like Scene 4 show her as somewhat abrasive in her interactions with her parents, which may temporarily reduce audience connection.
- Secondary characters like Javier and the parents remain somewhat one-dimensional in their emotional impact. Javier's cold rejection in Scene 9 and the parents' participation in the torment in Scene 10 feel emotionally simplistic compared to the complexity given to Billy and Eve.
Suggestions
- Show Billy demonstrating strength or resilience in earlier scenes, such as standing up for others or pursuing creative interests beyond his romantic relationships. This would create a more balanced empathy that isn't solely based on his suffering.
- In Scene 4, add a moment where Eve shows vulnerability or regret immediately after hanging up on her parents, reinforcing that her anger stems from pain rather than simple defiance. This would maintain consistent empathy throughout her emotional journey.
- Give Javier a moment of visible internal conflict in Scene 9 before his final rejection, showing that his decision causes him pain rather than appearing purely callous. This would add emotional complexity to his character and make the breakup more nuanced.
Emotional Impact Of Key Scenes
Critique
- Scene 10 achieves maximum emotional impact through its hallucinatory quality and collective torment, but the surreal approach may distance some viewers emotionally compared to a more grounded depiction of Billy's final moments.
- Scene 8's Thanksgiving confrontation has extremely high emotional stakes but could be even more impactful with more nuanced reactions from the mother character, whose passive response reduces the scene's emotional complexity.
- Scene 11's discovery of the infant provides strong emotional resolution, but the transition from Eve's suicidal despair to hopeful caretaker happens quite rapidly, potentially reducing the emotional authenticity of her transformation.
Suggestions
- In Scene 10, add brief moments where Billy's tormentors show flickers of hesitation or internal conflict before joining the chant, making the collective pressure more psychologically realistic and emotionally devastating.
- Strengthen Scene 8 by giving the mother a more active emotional arc - perhaps she initially tries to defend Billy before being silenced by the father's aggression, creating a more complex family dynamic and heightened emotional stakes.
- Extend Scene 11 to show Eve's internal struggle between her grief and her emerging protective instincts toward the infant. A moment where she considers walking away before deciding to care for the baby would make her choice more emotionally resonant.
Complex Emotional Layers
Critique
- Many scenes successfully layer multiple emotions, particularly Scene 11 which combines grief, compassion, hope, and sadness effectively. However, some pivotal scenes rely on single dominant emotions rather than emotional complexity.
- Scene 5's bullying sequence focuses heavily on sympathy and outrage but misses opportunities to incorporate more nuanced emotions like Billy's internal conflict between shame and pride, or the bystanders' mixed reactions.
- The parental characters in Scenes 6-8 are portrayed with relatively simple emotional ranges (impatience, anger, ineffectiveness) compared to the complexity given to Billy and Eve, reducing the emotional richness of family dynamics.
Suggestions
- In Scene 5, show Billy experiencing moments of defiance or pride alongside his humiliation. Perhaps he makes eye contact with one student who looks away in shame, adding layers of social complexity to the bullying scene.
- Give the father character in Scene 8 moments of visible pain or conflict beneath his anger - perhaps he struggles to maintain his aggressive posture or shows flickers of regret before doubling down on his rejection.
- In Scene 9, incorporate more of Billy's hopefulness and romantic idealism alongside his desperation, showing the beautiful aspects of his love for Javier even as the relationship collapses, creating a more bittersweet emotional experience.
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Emotional Pacing and Audience Recovery
Critiques
- The screenplay moves rapidly from one high-emotion scene to another without sufficient recovery time, particularly in the sequence from Scene 7 through Scene 10 where emotional intensity remains consistently at peak levels.
- Scene 12 provides emotional resolution but comes after such intense suffering that some viewers may struggle to fully embrace the hopeful message, having been emotionally drained by the preceding scenes.
- The emotional transitions between scenes are often abrupt, particularly between flashbacks and present-day sequences, which can disrupt the audience's emotional immersion and processing time.
Suggestions
- Add a brief transitional scene between Scenes 9 and 10 showing Billy in a moment of quiet reflection or reaching out to one last potential source of support, providing emotional breathing room before the final confrontation.
- Extend the opening of Scene 11 to show Eve's gradual emotional breakdown rather than beginning with her already at peak despair, creating a more nuanced emotional journey toward her redemption.
- Consider adding a brief scene between the intense bullying of Scene 5 and the family dinner of Scene 6, showing Billy and Eve connecting and processing the incident together, which would provide emotional continuity and recovery time.
Secondary Character Emotional Depth
Critiques
- Javier's emotional journey is underdeveloped - his rejection in Scene 9 feels emotionally simplistic, lacking the internal conflict or regret that would make his character more three-dimensional and the breakup more emotionally complex.
- The mother character's emotional arc is inconsistent, shifting from nurturing in Scene 6 to passive in Scene 8 to concerned in Scene 11 without clear emotional throughlines or development.
- The student tormentors in Scenes 5, 9, and 10 are portrayed as uniformly cruel without individual emotional differentiation, reducing the psychological realism and emotional impact of the bullying scenes.
Suggestions
- Give Javier a moment of visible emotional struggle in Scene 9 - perhaps he looks away or shows physical signs of distress while rejecting Billy, indicating this decision causes him pain rather than indifference.
- Show the mother attempting to contact Billy after Scene 8 in a brief additional scene or voiceover, demonstrating her ongoing concern despite her inability to stand up to her husband in the moment.
- Differentiate the student tormentors by showing varied reactions - one who participates reluctantly, another who seems to enjoy the cruelty, creating a more nuanced portrayal of group dynamics and social pressure.
Emotional Symbolism and Visual Metaphors
Critiques
- While the subway setting provides strong visual atmosphere, it could be used more consistently as an emotional metaphor throughout the screenplay, particularly in representing Billy's feelings of being trapped or in motion toward disaster.
- Billy's notebook serves as an effective emotional symbol but could be used more consistently across scenes to track his emotional journey and the destruction of his hopes and dreams.
- The memorial bouquets in the subway station are powerful visual elements that could be used more deliberately to mark Eve's emotional progression throughout her vigil.
Suggestions
- Use the subway environment more deliberately to reflect emotional states - for example, show empty trains passing by during Billy's most isolated moments, or crowded platforms during scenes of social pressure.
- Incorporate the notebook more consistently as an emotional barometer - show it becoming increasingly damaged or stained through Billy's journey, making its final destruction in Scene 10 more emotionally resonant.
- Use the memorial bouquets as emotional markers - show them wilting or being refreshed at key emotional turning points in Eve's journey, visually representing her changing relationship with her grief.
Top Takeaway from This Section
| Goals and Philosophical Conflict | |
|---|---|
| internal Goals | Throughout the script, the protagonist's internal goals evolve from seeking healing from past trauma and bullying to striving for acceptance and authenticity in relationships. As the story progresses, their internal journey shifts towards facing grief and searching for meaning after the loss of loved ones, culminating in a desire to find hope and purpose. |
| External Goals | The protagonist's external goals develop from navigating immediate challenges in perilous environments, like confronting bullies and seeking validation from family, to taking a stand for themselves and ultimately pursuing a musical performance that conveys their message of love and unity. Each external goal becomes increasingly intertwined with their internal journey. |
| Philosophical Conflict | The overarching philosophical conflict involves the struggle between love and acceptance versus societal rejection and prejudice. This tension mirrors the protagonist's personal journey as they wrestle with their identity and the fear of societal backlash. |
Character Development Contribution: The protagonist's internal and external goals drive their character development as they transition from a state of isolation and grief to one of empowerment and connection, ultimately influencing their decisions and actions throughout the narrative.
Narrative Structure Contribution: The interplay between the protagonist's goals and conflicts propels the narrative structure forward, creating a dynamic arc that climaxes with significant turning points, ultimately leading to resolution through self-acceptance and acceptance by others.
Thematic Depth Contribution: These elements add thematic depth by exploring complex issues such as identity, acceptance, the impact of societal prejudices, and the redemptive power of love, allowing the screenplay to resonate emotionally with the audience.
Screenwriting Resources on Goals and Philosophical Conflict
Articles
| Site | Description |
|---|---|
| Creative Screenwriting | How Important Is A Character’s Goal? |
| Studio Binder | What is Conflict in a Story? A Quick Reminder of the Purpose of Conflict |
YouTube Videos
| Title | Description |
|---|---|
| How I Build a Story's Philosophical Conflict | How do you build philosophical conflict into your story? Where do you start? And how do you develop it into your characters and their external actions. Today I’m going to break this all down and make it fully clear in this episode. |
| Endings: The Good, the Bad, and the Insanely Great | By Michael Arndt: I put this lecture together in 2006, when I started work at Pixar on Toy Story 3. It looks at how to write an "insanely great" ending, using Star Wars, The Graduate, and Little Miss Sunshine as examples. 90 minutes |
| Tips for Writing Effective Character Goals | By Jessica Brody (Save the Cat!): Writing character goals is one of the most important jobs of any novelist. But are your character's goals...mushy? |
| Compelled to Read | Story Content | Character Development | Scene Elements | Audience Engagement | Technical Aspects | ||||||||||||||||||
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| Click for Full Analysis | Page | Tone | Overall | Scene Impact | Concept | Plot | Originality | Characters | Character Changes | Internal Goal | External Goal | Conflict | Opposition | High stakes | Story forward | Twist | Emotional Impact | Dialogue | Engagement | Pacing | Formatting | Structure | |
| 1 - Auditory Prelude: PUSH Improve | 1 | Serious, Reflective | 7.5 | 1 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 6 | 2 | 8 | 7 | 3 | 8 | 4 | 5 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 2 - Christmas Eve Encounter Improve | 3 | Intense, Emotional, Suspenseful | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 3 - Sibling Revelations Improve | 5 | Emotional, Reflective, Intimate | 8.5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 7.5 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 4 - Echoes of Grief Improve | 9 | Angry, Grief-Stricken, Defiant, Regretful | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 5 - Hallway Confrontation Improve | 13 | Intense, Emotional, Confrontational, Heartbreaking | 8.7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 6 - Thanksgiving Anticipation Improve | 15 | Tense, Emotional, Reflective | 8.5 | 3 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 9 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 5 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 9 | |
| 7 - Tension on the Staircase Improve | 16 | Tense, Doubtful, Confrontational | 8.2 | 8 | 8 | 9 | 7.5 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 7 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8 | 8.5 | 8.5 | 9 | 9 | |
| 8 - Thanksgiving Turmoil Improve | 16 | Intense, Emotional, Confrontational | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 8 | 7.5 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 9 - Seesaw of Heartbreak Improve | 19 | Emotional, Intense, Heartbreaking | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 7.5 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8.5 | 8 | 8 | |
| 10 - Descent into Despair Improve | 24 | Anger, Sadness, Rage, Desperation | 9.2 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | |
| 11 - A New Beginning Improve | 26 | Emotional, Reflective, Heartfelt | 9.2 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 7 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 10 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
| 12 - Pass On The Love: A Final Call to Unity Improve | 33 | Emotional, Reflective, Heartfelt | 8.7 | 1 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 9 | 9 | 8 | 6 | 8 | 5 | 8 | 8 | 6 | 9 | 8 | 9 | 8 | 8 | 8 | |
Summary of Scene Level Analysis
Here are insights from the scene-level analysis, highlighting strengths, weaknesses, and actionable suggestions.
Some points may appear in both strengths and weaknesses due to scene variety.
Tip: Click on criteria in the top row for detailed summaries.
Scene Strengths
- Emotional depth of characters
- Effective tension-building
- Compelling character dynamics
- Engaging dialogue
- Strong thematic elements
Scene Weaknesses
- Limited character development
- Some dialogue may feel slightly melodramatic
- Lack of resolution in certain scenes
- Heavy reliance on stereotypes
- Limited exploration of secondary character perspectives
Suggestions
- Develop secondary characters further to create more enriching storylines.
- Balance emotional dialogue with action or external conflict to enhance pacing.
- Avoid melodrama by refining dialogue to ensure authenticity.
- Ensure resolutions are clear in scenes to provide satisfying character arcs.
- Introduce visual cues that complement emotional beats, enhancing viewer engagement.
Scene 1 - Auditory Prelude: PUSH
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene serves purely as an introduction and title card. There is no narrative, character, or plot introduced, which means there is absolutely nothing to compel the reader to immediately jump to the next scene. It is designed to establish tone and title, and nothing more. It doesn't end with any questions, cliffhangers, or suspense, as it's simply an opening slate.
As the very first scene, the script continuation score is inherently low because there is no prior context or established narrative threads to draw the reader in. The scene's sole purpose is to present the title and some acknowledgments. It doesn't pose any questions or introduce any conflicts that would make a reader anticipate what comes next. The reader has no investment in the story yet.
Scene 2 - Christmas Eve Encounter
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene masterfully hooks the reader by immediately establishing intrigue and raising questions. The initial encounter with the mysterious hooded figure, the subsequent chase, and Eve's protective yet hesitant reaction create immediate suspense. Her dialogue, particularly her address to "Billy" and her frustration with her family, hints at a deeper, unresolved emotional narrative. The voice-over narration about a significant revelation on Thanksgiving morning, cut short by the mention of a past secret, leaves the reader desperate to know what Billy told her and why it's connected to her current distress.
The script is building a compelling mystery around Billy's death and Eve's current state. Scene 2 introduces Eve as a central figure dealing with grief and mystery, while hinting at a significant past event with Billy. The abrupt introduction of the memory of Thanksgiving morning, coupled with Eve's assertion that "everything's such a freakin' mess," creates a powerful urge to understand the events that led to this point. The audience is now invested in Eve's emotional journey and eager to uncover the truth about Billy.
Scene 3 - Sibling Revelations
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene is incredibly compelling because it masterfully builds suspense and emotional depth. It starts with Billy's enthusiastic declaration of love, immediately piquing curiosity about the object of his affection. Eve's skepticism, rooted in their family's history and Billy's past heartbreaks, creates a relatable tension. The back-and-forth between them, disguised as playful banter, slowly reveals the significance of this love for Billy, making the audience invest in his happiness. The final moments, where Eve repeatedly guesses incorrect female names, create a powerful build-up, and the abrupt reveal of 'Javier' is a significant turning point, leaving the reader with a profound sense of surprise and a strong desire to understand the implications of this revelation for Billy and his relationship with Eve, as well as his family. The cut back to the present at this exact moment, leaving the audience hanging, is a masterful cliffhanger.
The screenplay's momentum is exceptionally strong after this scene. The revelation of Billy's sexuality, and the potential conflict it introduces with his family and his previous relationships, opens up a wealth of dramatic possibilities. This scene directly addresses the 'significant thing' Billy revealed to Eve on Thanksgiving, which was hinted at in Scene 2. It deepens our understanding of Billy's character and sets the stage for how his family, particularly his father, might react. The lingering question of how Eve will process this news, and how it connects to her current distress and her conviction that Billy was 'pushed,' makes the overall narrative incredibly engaging. The story has woven together Eve's present-day grief with Billy's past life, making the reader desperate to see how these threads will resolve.
Scene 4 - Echoes of Grief
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene masterfully ramps up the emotional stakes and introduces new layers of mystery, compelling the reader to immediately discover what Eve knows and what her parents are hiding. Eve's internal monologue grapples with the profound shock and confusion of Billy's revelation, coupled with her own guilt for not realizing it sooner. This personal turmoil is amplified by the invasive and manipulative phone call from her parents, which skillfully reveals their desperation and hints at a history of unspoken truths. The "no questions asked" offer is a clear red flag, and Eve's explosive reaction and subsequent declaration that Billy was "pushed" directly sets up a suspenseful investigation into the circumstances of his death. The abrupt transition from the train's roar to a school bell further jolts the reader, creating an urgent need to understand the connection.
The script as a whole is building significant momentum. Scene 3 introduced the revelation of Billy's sexuality, and Scene 4 immediately dives into Eve's processing of this information and her complex relationship with her parents. The central mystery of Billy's death has now taken a dramatic turn with Eve's assertion of foul play. This immediately raises the stakes and provides a strong impetus to continue, as the reader wants to know what really happened, why her parents are acting so strangely, and how Eve, a 16-year-old girl, plans to uncover the truth against powerful forces. The emotional arc of Eve, stemming from her grief and her brother's revelations, is deeply engaging.
Scene 5 - Hallway Confrontation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene is incredibly compelling due to its escalating tension and raw emotional impact. The introduction of homophobic bullying directed at Billy, culminating in the theft of his notebook and public humiliation, creates a powerful sense of injustice. The scene effectively builds suspense by showing Billy's initial reaction, his attempt to retrieve his notebook, and then his desperate leap, only to be met with further taunts. The crowd's complicity and the escalating verbal abuse amplify the horror, making the reader desperate to see how Billy will cope with this trauma and if Eve will intervene.
The script has maintained a strong forward momentum, especially with the introduction of Billy's internal struggles and the external pressures he faces. Scene 5 dramatically escalates the stakes by showcasing the brutal reality of the homophobia Billy endured, directly linking to the 'pushed' narrative Eve espouses. This scene powerfully explains the *why* behind Billy's potential despair, making the earlier revelations about his sexuality and his conflict with his family feel even more significant. The unresolved tensions from his parents' rejection, his complicated relationship with Javier, and the very real threat of bullying all combine to make the reader desperate to know how this will lead to his ultimate fate.
Scene 6 - Thanksgiving Anticipation
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene is a stark contrast to the previous, rapidly escalating events. Instead of continuing the tension or revealing more about the bullying incident, it abruptly shifts to a domestic, seemingly peaceful Thanksgiving dinner setup. While it establishes the family dynamic, it feels like a deliberate pause rather than a continuation of the narrative momentum. The lack of immediate resolution or further plot development makes the reader less compelled to immediately jump to the next scene, especially after the dramatic climax of the previous one.
The script so far has built considerable tension, moving from Eve's present-day distress to flashbacks revealing Billy's struggles, his relationship with Javier, and the bullying he endured. The immediate preceding scene ended with a powerful "Push" and a violent bullying incident, creating a strong desire to know the consequences or what happened next. This current scene, however, is a significant tonal shift, presenting a seemingly idyllic family dinner before the major conflict at Thanksgiving dinner is revealed. While it's crucial for setting up the family's environment and potentially foreshadowing the conflict, its placement immediately after a high-stakes scene dilutes the immediate compulsion to continue reading.
Scene 7 - Tension on the Staircase
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene brilliantly injects immediate tension and mystery into the narrative. The confrontation between Eve and Billy on the staircase, coupled with their hushed, urgent dialogue about an unspecified plan, creates a strong sense of unease. Billy's wavering "No" followed by his defiant "Why not do it now?" is particularly compelling. The abrupt interruption by their father, forcefully dismissing Eve, adds another layer of conflict and raises questions about the nature of the "plan" and its consequences for both siblings. The scene ends with Eve's desperate call to Billy, leaving the reader desperate to know what happens next.
The script maintains a very high level of engagement. The revelation of Billy's love for Javier in Scene 3, followed by Eve's grief and suspicion in Scene 4 that Billy was 'pushed' rather than suicidal, and then the violent bullying in Scene 5, have all built a significant emotional investment. Scene 7 directly precedes a major confrontation hinted at throughout the script (Billy's coming out to his parents and subsequent departure). The sibling tension here, combined with the looming presence of their father and the mystery of Billy's 'plan,' propels the reader forward, eager to see how this pivotal moment unfolds and impacts the larger narrative, especially concerning Billy's fate and Eve's quest for the truth.
Scene 8 - Thanksgiving Turmoil
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene is incredibly compelling due to its raw emotional intensity and the explosive conflict it depicts. The audience is immediately drawn into the painful moment of Billy coming out and the brutal rejection he faces from his father. The escalating verbal and emotional abuse, coupled with Eve's visceral reaction (filling the frame with her 'And then you dropped the bomb' and 'Push'), creates a desperate need to understand the aftermath and how Eve will cope with this trauma, especially given her earlier assertions that Billy was 'pushed.' The scene ends on a cliffhanger of Billy running out and the implication of his potential demise.
The script has maintained a high level of engagement throughout. The introduction of Billy's coming out and his subsequent brutal rejection in this scene provides a powerful emotional core and a significant turning point. This event directly fuels Eve's ongoing investigation and her insistence that Billy was 'pushed,' not that he committed suicide. The unresolved tension from his expulsion from the home and the implied future tragedy makes the reader eager to see how these events connect to the present-day narrative and Eve's own struggles.
Scene 9 - Seesaw of Heartbreak
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene is a powerful emotional climax that leaves the reader desperate to know what happens next. Billy's heartbreak is palpable, and the harsh rejection from Javier, compounded by the public humiliation from the teenage boy and the general mocking from the students, creates immense sympathy for Billy. The tension ratchets up with Billy's desperate attempts to hold onto Javier and his public declaration of love. The abrupt cut to Eve's angry face and the word 'Push' creates an immediate cliffhanger, forcing the reader to question its meaning and its connection to the events that just transpired.
The script has built significant momentum through the compounding tragedies and escalating emotional stakes for Billy. The previous scenes detailing his bullying, his parents' rejection, and now Javier's definitive departure have created a profound sense of despair for him. This scene directly leads into what is likely the inciting incident for Eve's investigation and the film's central mystery – Billy's death. The recurring 'Push' motif, now delivered by Eve with visible anger, is a powerful hook that suggests a deliberate act, intensifying the desire to see how this tragedy unfolds and if Eve's suspicions will be validated. The unresolved nature of Billy's fate and Eve's commitment to finding the truth ensure a high level of reader engagement.
Scene 10 - Descent into Despair
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene is a masterclass in building suspense and emotional intensity. The gradual reveal of the tormentors – first students, then parents, and finally Javier – creates a relentless sense of dread. Billy's transformation from sadness to rage and then to despondency is incredibly compelling. The use of POV shots, mirroring his internal state, makes the reader feel his despair. The scene ends on an incredibly powerful and gut-wrenching moment, leaving the reader desperate to know if he succumbs to the pressure and what the immediate aftermath will be.
The script has masterfully built towards this devastating climax. The earlier scenes established Billy's struggles with his sexuality, the homophobic bullying, his painful coming out, and the rejection from both his family and Javier. Eve's voice-over has consistently foreshadowed "Push," creating a lingering sense of foreboding. This scene directly delivers on that promise, bringing all the accumulated emotional weight to a head. The sheer brutality of the mental torture is almost unbearable, and the reader is now fully invested in understanding the consequences and Eve's role in uncovering the truth.
Scene 11 - A New Beginning
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene is highly compelling due to its emotional intensity and the introduction of a significant new plot element. Eve's raw grief and anger at Billy's memorial spot, coupled with the ghostly reunion, create a powerful emotional core. The discovery of the infant in the trash can is a major turning point, immediately raising questions about its origin and Eve's role. The scene ends with a strong hook as Eve decides to take the baby and finds Billy's notebook, promising further exploration of these new threads.
The script maintains a very high level of engagement. The previous scenes have built significant emotional investment in Eve's grief and her quest for truth about Billy's death. The introduction of the infant in this scene acts as a powerful new catalyst, creating immediate forward momentum. The conversation with her parents, hinting at a potential reconciliation and a 'fresh start,' adds a layer of complexity to Eve's immediate future and the overall trajectory of the story.
Scene 12 - Pass On The Love: A Final Call to Unity
The #1 Rule of Screenwriting: Make your reader or audience compelled to keep reading.
“Grab ‘em by the throat and never let ‘em go.”
The scene level score is the impact on the reader or audience to continue reading.
The Script score is how compelled they are to keep reading based on the rest of the script so far.
This scene serves as the final act and resolution of the screenplay, with the credits rolling. As such, there is no inherent need or desire for the reader to continue to another scene, as the story is explicitly concluding. The music and visual elements are designed for closure, not for cliffhangers or further narrative propulsion.
The script has reached its conclusion with this final scene, which features the rolling credits and a concluding song. All plot threads regarding Billy's tragic story, Eve's grief and subsequent healing, and the family's reconciliation have been addressed. The themes of love, hope, and societal change are encapsulated in the final song, providing a sense of resolution. Therefore, the compulsion to read further is non-existent as the narrative arc is complete.
- Physical environment: The physical environment of the screenplay is predominantly urban and gritty, centered around a bustling city with recurring settings like dimly lit subway stations, high school hallways, family homes, and playgrounds. Subway stations serve as a central motif, symbolizing danger, isolation, and emotional turmoil with elements such as beams, platforms, trash cans, and yellow safety stripes. Other locations include intimate domestic spaces like dining rooms and staircases during holidays, and outdoor areas like playgrounds, which contrast the urban chaos with moments of personal reflection or confrontation. This environment often feels oppressive and chaotic, with elements like passing trains adding auditory and visual intensity, creating a sense of urgency and instability.
- Culture: Cultural elements in the screenplay emphasize modern American traditions and social dynamics, including holidays like Christmas Eve and Thanksgiving, which highlight themes of family gatherings, loneliness, and tradition. Christmas is depicted with a sense of isolation and despair, while Thanksgiving focuses on familial bonds and tensions. Teenage culture is explored through gossip, bullying, and social interactions in high schools, reflecting issues like homophobia and peer pressure. Music, such as gospel singing and high school choruses, serves as a cultural outlet for expression, unity, and hope, contrasting the darker aspects of society and underscoring themes of love and redemption.
- Society: The societal structure portrayed is one of dysfunction and intolerance, characterized by strained family dynamics, homophobic bullying, and social hierarchies. Families are shown as conservative and judgmental, with conflicts arising from rejection of non-conforming identities, as seen in parental responses to Billy's coming out. School environments depict a culture of gossip and discrimination, where individuals face verbal and physical abuse, contributing to a broader societal theme of intolerance and isolation. Public spaces like subways and playgrounds amplify these issues, showing how societal pressures can lead to despair and conflict, while also hinting at potential for community and change through collective actions like musical performances.
- Technology: Technology in the screenplay is minimal and grounded in everyday contemporary life, with elements like subways, cell phones, box cutters, and notebooks playing supporting roles. Subways represent modern urban infrastructure, adding to the atmosphere of speed and danger, while cell phones facilitate communication and reveal familial tensions. Simple tools like box cutters and notebooks symbolize personal defense and creativity, emphasizing traditional forms of expression over advanced technology. This sparse technological presence highlights human emotions and interactions, reinforcing a focus on raw, unmediated experiences rather than digital detachment.
- Characters influence: The world's elements profoundly shape the characters' experiences and actions by amplifying their emotional and psychological states. The urban physical environment, with its isolating subway settings, heightens Eve's grief and vulnerability, prompting defensive actions like wielding a box cutter or pacing in anger. Cultural holidays expose familial conflicts, influencing Billy's decision to come out and Eve's cynicism about love, while societal intolerance, such as bullying and homophobia, drives Billy's despair and eventual death, and fuels Eve's quest for truth and redemption. Technology, like cell phones, facilitates confrontations that reveal character flaws and growth, such as Eve's sarcastic responses to her parents, ultimately pushing characters toward introspection, resilience, and acts of compassion, like caring for the abandoned infant.
- Narrative contribution: The world elements drive the narrative by providing settings and contexts that escalate conflicts and facilitate key plot developments. The recurring subway stations serve as a symbolic space for pivotal events, from Billy's death to Eve's reflections and discoveries, creating a cohesive thread that ties together flashbacks and present-day actions. Cultural and societal elements, such as holiday gatherings and school bullying, trigger flashbacks that reveal backstory and motivations, advancing the plot through emotional revelations and confrontations. Technology and physical environments add urgency and realism, with elements like passing trains and phone calls punctuating transitions and heightening tension, ultimately guiding the story from despair to a redemptive conclusion involving community and hope.
- Thematic depth contribution: These world elements enrich the thematic depth by underscoring themes of isolation, intolerance, love, and redemption. The physical environment's stark urbanity mirrors the characters' internal loneliness and the harshness of societal rejection, deepening the exploration of grief and mental health. Cultural aspects, like holidays and music, highlight the contrast between idealized family unity and harsh realities, emphasizing the impact of homophobia and bullying on personal identity. Societal structures reveal systemic issues of discrimination, contributing to themes of social injustice and the need for change, while minimal technology focuses attention on human relationships, reinforcing messages of empathy and human connection. Collectively, these elements enhance the narrative's emotional resonance, illustrating how environmental and social factors can both destroy and heal, culminating in a powerful call for societal transformation and personal growth.
| Voice Analysis | |
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| Summary: | The writer's voice in this screenplay is characterized by a potent blend of raw, gritty realism and profound emotional introspection. This is evident in the dialogue, which is often sharp, confrontational, and unflinchingly honest, capturing the pain and vulnerability of its characters. The narrative descriptions are evocative, painting vivid pictures of urban decay, internal turmoil, and the harsh realities faced by the protagonists. The direction emphasizes atmosphere, often using tight shots and stark settings to amplify the emotional weight of the scenes. There's a recurring thematic exploration of loss, identity, prejudice, and the struggle for acceptance, delivered with an urgent and often heartbreaking intensity. |
| Voice Contribution | The writer's voice significantly contributes to the screenplay by establishing a mood of intense emotional realism and social commentary. It grounds the narrative in a palpable sense of struggle, making the characters' pain and resilience deeply felt. The directness and rawness of the voice foster empathy and compel the audience to confront difficult themes like bullying, familial rejection, and the aftermath of trauma. This authentic voice imbues the script with a powerful, unflinching quality that elevates it beyond a simple story to a deeply resonant exploration of the human condition. |
| Best Representation Scene | 10 - Descent into Despair |
| Best Scene Explanation | Scene 10 best showcases the author's unique voice due to its intense emotional depth, vivid imagery, and unflinching portrayal of internal conflict and external pressure. The scene masterfully blends raw, visceral descriptions (ECU on Billy's face, his scream) with hallucinatory and psychologically charged elements (POV shots of tormentors, parents, and Javier chanting 'Push!'). The escalation of the chant and Billy's descent into despair, culminating in a primal scream that merges with the approaching train, perfectly encapsulates the writer's ability to convey overwhelming anguish and the tragic consequences of societal and familial rejection. The stark contrast between Billy's inner torment and the external forces pushing him to the brink is powerfully rendered through the combination of direction, dialogue (the chant), and descriptive narrative, making it a peak representation of the screenplay's voice. |
Style and Similarities
This screenplay demonstrates a multifaceted writing style that traverses a range of emotional and thematic territories. It features a strong emphasis on character-driven narratives, often exploring complex human relationships, internal struggles, and societal pressures. The dialogue is frequently sharp, authentic, and crucial to driving the plot and revealing character. There's a notable capacity for both intimate, naturalistic moments and intense, dramatic confrontations. The screenplay also touches on themes of social consciousness, diversity, and resilience, alongside darker, more gritty explorations of human nature. A blend of realism and occasional surrealism or heightened dramatic elements suggests a dynamic and engaging narrative approach.
Style Similarities:
| Writer | Explanation |
|---|---|
| Aaron Sorkin | Sorkin's influence is apparent in multiple scenes (7 and 12) due to the consistent emphasis on sharp, impactful, and message-driven dialogue. The ability to craft conversations that effectively reveal character dynamics and convey societal themes is a strong hallmark across these instances. |
| Gillian Flynn | Flynn's presence is felt in scenes 2 and 4, highlighting a shared inclination towards exploring dark themes, complex characters, and a degree of gritty realism. The focus on emotional turmoil and intense, gripping narratives suggests a consistent thread of psychological depth and suspense. |
| Richard Linklater | Linklater's style, seen in scene 3, contributes to the screenplay's ability to capture intimate moments and authentic dialogue, focusing on human emotions and relationships with a naturalistic feel. |
| Greta Gerwig | Gerwig's contributions, noted in scenes 3 and 11, emphasize the exploration of complex female characters, emotional depth, and authentic dialogue, particularly in the context of personal growth and relationships. |
Other Similarities: The screenplay exhibits a remarkable versatility, capable of shifting between intimate character studies and broader thematic explorations. The consistent strength in dialogue across various scenes is a defining characteristic. The thematic range, from social commentary to psychological thrillers and coming-of-age stories, suggests a mature and ambitious storytelling approach. The interplay between realism and occasional dramatic intensity creates a compelling narrative tapestry.
Top Correlations and patterns found in the scenes:
| Pattern | Explanation |
|---|---|
| Opening Scene Vulnerability | The first scene exhibits notably lower scores in conflict (3), high stakes (4), and character changes (2) compared to the average of later scenes (conflict averaging 8.3, high stakes 8.1, character changes 8.2), suggesting a slower start that may fail to hook the audience immediately. This could indicate an opportunity to heighten tension or stakes early on to better align with the high-engagement style of subsequent scenes. |
| Emotional Tone as a Strength Driver | Scenes with tones including 'Emotional' or 'Intense' (e.g., scenes 2,3,5,6,8,9,10,11,12) consistently score 9 or 10 in emotional impact and overall grade, while the non-emotional toned scene 1 scores lower (emotional impact 8, overall 8). This pattern highlights your proficiency in using emotional tones to elevate scene quality, potentially at the expense of variety; consider introducing contrasting tones to add depth and prevent emotional fatigue. |
| Conflict Build-Up and Narrative Momentum | Conflict scores start low in scene 1 (3) and rise sharply, correlating positively with 'move story forward' scores (rising from 5 to an average of 8.6 in later scenes), as well as with plot and character changes. This indicates a deliberate escalation that effectively propels the story, but the initial dip might cause pacing issues; ensuring earlier conflict could make the narrative more cohesive and engaging from the outset. |
| Character Evolution in Intense Moments | High character change scores (8 or 9) occur predominantly in scenes with confrontational or heartbreaking tones (e.g., scenes 4,5,8,9,10), often paired with high emotional impact and dialogue scores, whereas reflective tones in earlier scenes (like scene 1) show minimal changes. This suggests that your key emotional confrontations are where character arcs shine, but it may reveal underutilized opportunities for subtler development in reflective scenes to create a more nuanced progression. |
| Dialogue's Role in Emotional Consistency | Dialogue scores are generally high (average 8.5) and correlate strongly with emotional impact in most scenes, but scene 1 shows a disconnect (dialogue 6 vs. emotional impact 8), implying that dialogue effectiveness improves as the story deepens. This could mean your dialogue is stronger in character-driven moments, and refining it in introductory scenes might enhance overall emotional coherence and audience connection from the start. |
Writer's Craft Overall Analysis
The screenplay demonstrates a strong ability to convey emotional depth and complex character dynamics. The writer effectively captures internal and external conflicts, creating engaging narratives that resonate with themes of resilience, acceptance, and societal issues. However, there is room for improvement in areas such as dialogue authenticity, character development, and scene structure to enhance the overall impact of the story.
Key Improvement Areas
Suggestions
| Type | Suggestion | Rationale |
|---|---|---|
| Book | 'Save the Cat!' by Blake Snyder | This book provides valuable insights into character development, plot structure, and scene construction, which can enhance the writer's understanding of effective storytelling. |
| Screenplay | 'Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind' by Charlie Kaufman | This screenplay exemplifies the blending of emotional depth with narrative complexity, offering insights into character interactions and internal conflicts. |
| Video | Interviews with screenwriters like Aaron Sorkin or Greta Gerwig | These interviews can provide practical insights into the writing process, character development, and crafting authentic dialogue. |
| Exercise | Practice writing dialogue-only scenesPractice In SceneProv | This exercise will help sharpen the writer's ability to convey emotions and conflicts through dialogue, enhancing character voice and authenticity. |
| Exercise | Develop character motivation worksheetsPractice In SceneProv | By outlining character motivations and conflicts, the writer can create more nuanced interactions and deepen emotional dynamics in their scenes. |
| Exercise | Write scenes with varying emotional arcsPractice In SceneProv | Practicing different emotional trajectories will help the writer understand pacing and tension, leading to more engaging narratives. |
Here are different Tropes found in the screenplay
| Trope | Trope Details | Trope Explanation |
|---|---|---|
| Coming Out | Billy attempts to come out as gay during Thanksgiving dinner, but is met with hostility from his father. | The coming out trope involves a character revealing their sexual orientation, often leading to conflict or acceptance. A notable example is in 'Moonlight,' where the protagonist struggles with his identity and ultimately comes out to a friend. |
| Sibling Bond | Eve and Billy share a close relationship, with Eve expressing love and concern for Billy throughout the screenplay. | The sibling bond trope highlights the deep connection between siblings, often showcasing loyalty and support. An example is in 'The Lion King,' where Simba and Nala's bond is central to the story. |
| Tragic Death | Billy's death is a pivotal moment that drives the narrative and affects Eve deeply. | The tragic death trope involves a character's demise that significantly impacts the story and other characters. A classic example is in 'Romeo and Juliet,' where the deaths of the titular characters lead to a resolution of family conflict. |
| Flashbacks | The screenplay uses flashbacks to reveal Billy's character and his relationship with Eve. | Flashbacks are used to provide backstory and context, enhancing character development. An example is in 'Lost,' where characters' pasts are explored to deepen the narrative. |
| The Mentor | Eve reflects on Billy's guidance and support, positioning him as a mentor figure in her life. | The mentor trope involves a character who provides guidance and wisdom to another, often leading to growth. An example is Mr. Miyagi in 'The Karate Kid,' who teaches Daniel valuable life lessons. |
| Misunderstood Villain | Billy faces bullying and hostility from peers, who misunderstand him and his relationship with Javier. | The misunderstood villain trope involves characters who are perceived as antagonists due to misunderstanding or prejudice. An example is in 'Maleficent,' where the titular character is shown in a sympathetic light despite her villainous actions. |
| Emotional Breakdown | Eve experiences emotional turmoil and breakdowns throughout the screenplay, particularly after Billy's death. | The emotional breakdown trope depicts a character reaching a breaking point due to overwhelming circumstances. An example is in 'A Star is Born,' where the protagonist struggles with addiction and emotional pain. |
| The Call to Action | Eve's journey is initiated by the need to confront the truth about Billy's death and her family's dynamics. | The call to action trope involves a character being prompted to take action due to a significant event. An example is in 'The Hunger Games,' where Katniss volunteers to take her sister's place. |
| Redemption Arc | Eve seeks to redeem herself and honor Billy's memory by confronting her family's issues and societal prejudices. | The redemption arc involves a character seeking to atone for past mistakes or failures. An example is in 'The Shawshank Redemption,' where Andy Dufresne seeks freedom and justice after wrongful imprisonment. |
| The Power of Love | The screenplay emphasizes love as a transformative force, particularly in the relationships between Eve, Billy, and their family. | The power of love trope highlights love's ability to heal and inspire change. An example is in 'The Fault in Our Stars,' where love helps characters cope with illness and loss. |
Memorable lines in the script:
| Scene Number | Line |
|---|---|
| 9 | Billy: I love you! |
| 4 | EVE: You were pushed! |
| 5 | EVE: Push. |
| 2 | EVE: I know you’re behind that pole, you might as well come out where I can... I’m warning you, I’ve got a sharp blade in my hand and I’m not afraid to use it, so if you’re thinking of trying any funny stuff, you’d better think again. |
| 8 | Father: You get the hell out of here and don’t ever come back! Now who’s got the freakin’ butter? |
Logline Analysis
Top Performing Loglines
Creative Executive's Take
Logline_1 stands out as the top choice for its factually accurate depiction of Eve's grief following her brother's public humiliation and suicide, directly supported by scenes of bullying, family rejection, and the subway setting in the script summary. Commercially, it excels with a high-stakes emotional hook—the choice between succumbing to despair or saving the abandoned baby—that mirrors the story's core conflict, making it incredibly marketable for festivals and streaming platforms focused on social issues. The phrase 'hatred pushes people over the edge and how love can pull them back' cleverly ties into the film's title 'PUSH' and themes of intolerance and redemption, creating a universal appeal that could resonate with audiences seeking cathartic, redemptive arcs, much like successful films such as 'The Perks of Being a Wallflower' or 'Moonlight'.
Strengths
This logline succinctly sets the time and emotional context, effectively linking the protagonist's personal loss to a call for societal change, which mirrors the script's thematic depth.
Weaknesses
It could better emphasize the protagonist's internal goal and the specific conflicts, making the narrative arc slightly less immediate.
Suggested Rewrites
Detailed Scores
| Criterion | Score | Reason | Evidence |
|---|---|---|---|
| Hook | 10 | The discovery of the abandoned baby on Christmas Eve is a strong, emotional hook that ties into themes of hope and tolerance. | "This directly references Scene 11's pivotal moment, creating an immediate sense of urgency and transformation." |
| Stakes | 10 | High emotional and societal stakes are conveyed, with the rescue symbolizing a broader plea for tolerance against bullying and hatred. | "The script's exploration of bullying in Scenes 5 and 8, and Eve's suicidal thoughts in Scene 11, underscore the personal and social consequences." |
| Brevity | 9 | At 39 words, it is concise and focused, avoiding unnecessary details while delivering a complete story arc. | "The logline efficiently summarizes key elements without the redundancy seen in longer versions, fitting standard brevity guidelines." |
| Clarity | 10 | The logline is straightforward, clearly stating the setting, inciting incident, and outcome, leaving no ambiguity about the story's premise. | "It aligns with Scene 2's Christmas Eve setting and Scene 11's baby discovery, providing a clear entry point into Eve's journey." |
| Conflict | 9 | Conflict is well-represented through bullying and grief, leading to the rescue, though it could delve deeper into family dynamics. | "Flashbacks in Scenes 3 and 8 depict family rejection and bullying, which the logline captures but not as comprehensively as some other loglines." |
| Protagonist goal | 9 | The goal of transforming grief into action is implied, but it could be more explicitly stated as Eve's personal evolution. | "Eve's voice-over in Scene 4 and her redemptive act in Scene 11 show this transformation, though the logline focuses more on the event than her internal drive." |
| Factual alignment | 10 | It accurately portrays the script's events, including the timing, bullying context, and redemptive rescue, with strong thematic fidelity. | "Matches the Christmas Eve setting in Scene 2, Billy's suicide due to bullying in Scene 10, and Eve's transformation in Scene 11." |
Creative Executive's Take
Drawing directly from the script summary, logline_0 accurately portrays Eve as a grieving sister haunted by her brother's suicide due to bullying, with the Christmas Eve subway setting and the discovery of a newborn that catalyzes her transformation, all of which are explicitly detailed in scenes 2, 4, and 11. Its commercial appeal lies in the concise, emotionally charged narrative that positions private grief as a catalyst for a broader plea for tolerance, offering a hook that's both intimate and socially relevant, ideal for YA audiences and advocacy groups. This logline's strength is in its clear progression from loss to action, evoking a sense of hope that could attract directors interested in stories like 'Wonder' or 'The Hate U Give', enhancing its marketability through a blend of personal stakes and universal themes.
Strengths
This logline clearly specifies key details like the brother's sexuality and setting, effectively building a cohesive narrative arc from despair to hope.
Weaknesses
It could enhance the emotional depth by more explicitly tying the rescue to broader themes, making the transformation feel even more profound.
Suggested Rewrites
Detailed Scores
| Criterion | Score | Reason | Evidence |
|---|---|---|---|
| Hook | 9 | The combination of haunting flashbacks and the infant rescue creates a strong hook, though it could be more visceral. | "The abandoned baby in Scene 11 and the suicide in Scene 10 provide emotional pull, but the logline's strength lies in its specific details." |
| Stakes | 10 | High stakes are evident in the personal and societal levels, with the risk of despair versus the reward of hope and action. | "The script's portrayal of Billy's suicide in Scene 10 and Eve's emotional crisis in Scene 4 underscore the life-altering consequences." |
| Brevity | 10 | At 22 words, it is concise and efficient, packing in essential elements without fluff. | "The logline's brevity mirrors the script's focused narrative, avoiding unnecessary elaboration." |
| Clarity | 10 | The logline is highly clear, detailing the protagonist, setting, conflicts, and resolution in a logical sequence. | "It accurately reflects the Christmas Eve timing in Scene 2, Billy's sexuality reveal in Scene 3, and the subway setting throughout." |
| Conflict | 10 | Conflict is well-defined through family rejection and bullying, directly linking to the protagonist's journey. | "Scenes like the Thanksgiving dinner in Scene 8 and school hallway bullying in Scene 5 are explicitly referenced, enhancing authenticity." |
| Protagonist goal | 10 | Eve's goal of confronting past traumas and finding hope is explicitly stated, driving the story forward. | "Flashbacks in Scenes 3-10 show her processing family rejection and bullying, leading to the redemptive act in Scene 11." |
| Factual alignment | 10 | It perfectly aligns with the script's events, characters, and themes, including the gay brother's story and the platform rescue. | "Details like Billy's coming out in Scene 3, family confrontation in Scene 8, and Eve's rescue in Scene 11 are accurately depicted." |
Creative Executive's Take
Logline_4 is factually precise, referencing the 'offhand chant' from the bullying scene in scene 5 and the 'anthem to pass on the love' from the final song in scene 12, while capturing Eve's emotional journey on the 'thin ledge between despair and action' as seen in her suicidal thoughts and ultimate rescue in scenes 4 and 11. Commercially, its poetic language and symbolic elements create a vivid, cinematic hook that elevates the logline above standard summaries, making it highly appealing for arthouse or indie markets where metaphorical depth can draw in audiences, similar to films like 'Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind'. This approach not only highlights the story's tension but also underscores its redemptive message, positioning it as a thoughtful entry point for viewers interested in psychological dramas with a strong visual and thematic identity.
Strengths
This logline effectively captures the emotional core of the story, clearly defining the protagonist's internal conflict and the thematic contrast between hatred and love, which aligns well with the script's focus on grief and redemption.
Weaknesses
It is somewhat lengthy and the tagline feels redundant, potentially reducing its punchiness and making it less concise for quick pitches.
Suggested Rewrites
Detailed Scores
| Criterion | Score | Reason | Evidence |
|---|---|---|---|
| Hook | 10 | The contrast between following her brother in death and saving a new life is highly compelling and immediately grabs attention. | "The abandoned baby discovery in Scene 11 serves as a pivotal hook in the script, paralleling the logline's dramatic choice." |
| Stakes | 10 | The stakes are high, involving life-or-death decisions and emotional redemption, which effectively convey the consequences of Eve's choices. | "The script depicts Eve's potential suicide and the transformative act of saving the baby, emphasizing themes of hatred pushing people to the edge as seen in Billy's death flashbacks." |
| Brevity | 7 | At 54 words, it is a bit long for a logline, with the tagline adding unnecessary length that could be tightened. | "Ideal loglines are under 50 words; the descriptive tagline echoes themes already present, as seen in the script's overall narrative." |
| Clarity | 9 | The logline clearly outlines the protagonist's situation, her brother's death, and the central choice, making the premise easy to understand. | "This mirrors scenes like Eve's return to the subway in Scene 2 and her suicidal contemplation in Scene 11, as well as the baby rescue." |
| Conflict | 8 | Conflict is implied through the choice and past events, but it could be more explicit about external forces like bullying and family rejection. | "Flashbacks in Scenes 3-10 show bullying and family strife, which the logline references indirectly but not as strongly as in loglines that detail these elements." |
| Protagonist goal | 9 | The goal is evident as Eve must choose between succumbing to despair or taking redemptive action, reflecting her emotional journey. | "In Scene 11, Eve's voice-over and actions show her struggle with suicide versus saving the baby, directly supporting the logline's conflict." |
| Factual alignment | 10 | It accurately reflects the script's events, including the subway setting, brother's death, and baby rescue, with strong thematic consistency. | "Key elements like Eve's grief in Scene 2 and the redemption arc in Scene 11 are faithfully represented." |
Creative Executive's Take
Factually accurate to the script, logline_7 mirrors the use of voice-over narration and flashbacks in scenes 2, 3, 4, 5, and 8 to piece together the 'societal pushes' leading to Billy's suicide, culminating in Eve's redemptive act, which is clearly depicted in scene 11. Its commercial viability stems from the structured narrative style that promises a gripping, introspective story, appealing to audiences who enjoy layered storytelling, as seen in hits like 'A Beautiful Mind'. By emphasizing the investigative and emotional unraveling, this logline offers a strong hook that could attract screenwriters and producers looking for character-driven dramas with a clear arc, making it a solid choice for adaptations into longer formats or series.
Strengths
This logline effectively highlights the narrative structure with voice-over and flashbacks, clearly linking the investigation of causes to personal redemption.
Weaknesses
It could better emphasize the emotional stakes and specific conflicts, making the story feel more immediate and engaging.
Suggested Rewrites
Detailed Scores
| Criterion | Score | Reason | Evidence |
|---|---|---|---|
| Hook | 8 | The use of voice-over and flashbacks is intriguing, but it may not grab attention as forcefully as more dramatic elements like the baby rescue. | "While the script uses these devices effectively, the hook could be stronger by emphasizing the abandoned baby in Scene 11 for immediate emotional impact." |
| Stakes | 9 | Stakes are high with societal and personal implications, but they could be more vividly portrayed to heighten tension. | "The script's depiction of bullying and family rejection in Scenes 5 and 8 supports the stakes, though the logline generalizes them slightly." |
| Brevity | 10 | At 20 words, it is exceptionally concise, delivering a complete arc without wasted words. | "The logline's tightness mirrors the script's efficient use of voice-over and flashbacks to advance the story." |
| Clarity | 9 | The logline clearly describes the method (voice-over and flashbacks) and the protagonist's journey, making the premise accessible. | "This directly references Eve's voice-over in Scenes 2, 4, and 11, and flashbacks in Scenes 3-10, which are central to the script's storytelling." |
| Conflict | 9 | Conflict is strongly tied to societal 'pushes' and internal struggle, effectively conveyed through the narrative devices. | "Flashbacks reveal conflicts like homophobic bullying in Scene 5 and family discord in Scene 8, which the logline accurately summarizes." |
| Protagonist goal | 9 | Eve's goal of piecing together the 'pushes' and achieving redemption is well-defined, showing her investigative and transformative arc. | "In Scene 4, Eve's voice-over questions Billy's death, and in Scene 11, she finds redemption, aligning with the logline's structure." |
| Factual alignment | 10 | It precisely matches the script's narrative style and key events, including the 'pushes' theme and redemption. | "Eve's voice-over in multiple scenes and the baby rescue in Scene 11 are faithfully represented, with strong thematic consistency." |
Creative Executive's Take
Logline_5 accurately reflects the script's elements, including Eve's grief over her gay brother's suicide due to 'homophobic pressures' as shown in scenes 5, 8, and 9, and her finding hope through rescuing an abandoned infant in scene 11, all set on Christmas Eve. While commercially appealing with its straightforward emotional journey and reference to the central theme of 'passing on the love', it lacks the poetic flair of higher-ranked loglines, making it slightly less hooky for broad audiences. Nonetheless, its clarity and focus on key events ensure it remains marketable, particularly in genres dealing with loss and recovery, akin to 'Ordinary People', providing a reliable, if less innovative, pitch for potential buyers.
Strengths
This logline poetically captures the thematic essence and symbolic elements, using metaphors like the chant and the infant to evoke the story's emotional and social messages.
Weaknesses
It lacks clarity on specific character details and plot events, making it somewhat vague and less accessible for immediate understanding.
Suggested Rewrites
Detailed Scores
| Criterion | Score | Reason | Evidence |
|---|---|---|---|
| Hook | 9 | The metaphorical 'thin ledge' and the infant as a 'fulcrum' create an intriguing hook, tying into the story's themes of love and healing. | "The abandoned baby in Scene 11 and the chant in Scene 10 serve as strong hooks, but the logline's abstraction might not land as sharply for all audiences." |
| Stakes | 9 | Stakes are high with themes of healing versus despair, but they are presented symbolically rather than personally, reducing emotional immediacy. | "The script's life-or-death moments, like Billy's suicide in Scene 10 and Eve's rescue in Scene 11, support the stakes, but the logline generalizes them." |
| Brevity | 10 | At 28 words, it is highly concise, delivering a poetic summary without excess, which enhances its impact. | "The compact structure efficiently conveys symbolism, aligning with the song 'Pass On The Love' in Scene 12, without unnecessary details." |
| Clarity | 7 | The logline uses metaphorical language that may obscure the core premise, making it less straightforward about who the protagonist is and what happens. | "References to the 'chant' align with the 'Push' chants in Scene 10, but it doesn't explicitly name Eve or her brother's death, unlike more direct descriptions in the script." |
| Conflict | 8 | Conflict is evoked through the chant and the survivor's struggle, but it could better integrate external conflicts like bullying and family issues. | "The 'offhand chant' refers to the tormentors' 'Push' in Scene 5 and 10, yet it omits key conflicts such as family rejection in Scene 8." |
| Protagonist goal | 8 | The goal of choosing between despair and action is implied, but it's abstract and could be more concrete to highlight Eve's personal journey. | "Eve's movement from grief to redemption in Scenes 4 and 11 is suggested, but the logline's vagueness dilutes the specificity of her goal compared to the script's narrative." |
| Factual alignment | 9 | It accurately reflects the script's themes and key symbols, though it generalizes events rather than specifying characters and incidents. | "The chant and infant elements match Scenes 10 and 11, and the healing theme ties to the finale in Scene 12, but it overlooks explicit details like Eve's identity." |
Other Loglines
- When a bullied honor student’s suicide leaves his sister shattered, she is given a second chance at hope when she discovers a baby in a trash can — leading her to reckon with the family who rejected them and to become an advocate for compassion.
- A raw, theatrical short about how a chorus of cruelty can become a physical force: a sister relives the moments that 'pushed' her brother and ultimately answers the cycle of abuse by choosing to protect the next generation.
- Grieving her brother's death from homophobic pressures, Eve spends a desolate night at the subway station where he jumped, only to discover a baby in the trash that reignites her will to 'pass on the love' he embodied.
- In a raw tale of tolerance, Eve's vigil at the site of her brother's fatal leap exposes layers of ignorance and abuse, transforming her despair into a promise to protect the vulnerable.
- As trains roar by like echoes of loss, a young woman relives her family's explosive rejection of her brother's coming out, culminating in a miraculous encounter that challenges her to forgive and move forward.
- On Christmas Eve, a grieving teenager haunted by her brother's suicide in a subway station finds an unexpected path to healing when she discovers a discarded infant.
- A young woman, consumed by the loss of her brother to bullying and intolerance, confronts her own despair when an abandoned baby forces her to choose between succumbing to her pain and extending compassion.
- When a girl seeking solace at the site of her brother's tragic death finds a helpless infant, she must confront her family's past and her own trauma to offer a lifeline to a new generation.
- Haunted by the memory of her brother, who was 'pushed' to his death by hate and misunderstanding, a teenager's Christmas Eve vigil takes a life-altering turn when she hears the cry of an abandoned baby.
- A short film about the ripple effects of intolerance, where a sister's profound grief is transformed by an act of unexpected kindness and a fragile new life.
- After the tragic suicide of her LGBTQ+ brother, a grieving teenager finds an abandoned infant and must decide whether to return home or forge a new path forward.
- A young woman grapples with the aftermath of her brother's suicide and the devastating impact of intolerance, leading her to make a life-changing decision on Christmas Eve.
- On Christmas Eve, a teenager's world is shattered when her brother takes his own life after being rejected by their parents for his sexuality. As she navigates her grief, she unexpectedly encounters an abandoned infant, forcing her to confront her own future.
- In the wake of her brother's tragic death, a teenager must confront her family's intolerance and her own grief, ultimately finding hope and purpose in an unexpected encounter on Christmas Eve.
- A young woman's life is upended when her brother's suicide forces her to confront the consequences of bullying and intolerance, leading her to make a profound decision that could change the course of her life.
- A grieving teenage girl confronts her brother's suicide in the subway station where he died, discovering that healing begins when she stops blaming others and starts saving herself.
- On Christmas Eve, a homeless teenager mourning her gay brother's suicide finds redemption when she discovers an abandoned baby in the same subway station where he took his life.
- Through flashbacks and present-day grief, a sister pieces together how societal and family rejection 'pushed' her brother to suicide in this powerful indictment of LGBTQ+ bullying.
- In the liminal space of a subway station, a young woman's journey through anger and grief leads to an unexpected chance at redemption and family healing.
- A raw exploration of how intolerance destroys families, following one sister's Christmas Eve reckoning with the multiple 'pushes' that led to her brother's tragic death.
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suspense Analysis
Executive Summary
Suspense is a driving force throughout 'PUSH,' primarily generated through foreboding atmosphere, escalating tension, and anticipation of tragic events. The screenplay masterfully uses the bleak subway setting, the mystery surrounding Billy's death, and Eve's emotional turmoil to keep the audience on edge. The narrative expertly builds anticipation for revelations and resolutions, particularly concerning Billy's true story and Eve's path forward. While the suspense is effective, a slight critique could be that the inevitable outcome of Billy's story is heavily foreshadowed, which can sometimes diminish the surprise element of the suspense, but amplifies the dread.
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fear Analysis
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Fear in 'PUSH' is primarily expressed through the anxiety of vulnerability, the dread of rejection, and the terror of societal prejudice. It's not just external threats, but the internal fear of not being accepted, of being ostracized, and of facing insurmountable personal and familial pressures. This fear is embodied by Billy's struggles and Eve's subsequent despair. The screenplay effectively uses setting, dialogue, and character interactions to convey these deep-seated fears, making them central to the tragic narrative.
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joy Analysis
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Joy in 'PUSH' is scarce and fleeting, primarily appearing in moments of genuine connection or hope. It serves as a poignant contrast to the overwhelming sadness and tragedy, highlighting what is lost. The joy is most evident in Billy's initial declaration of love and later, in Eve's unexpected maternal instinct and the glimmer of hope presented by the infant and her father's promise. The screenplay's sparse use of joy makes these moments more impactful and emotionally resonant.
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sadness Analysis
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Sadness is the pervasive emotional undercurrent of 'PUSH,' permeating nearly every scene. It stems from loss, grief, rejection, and the devastating consequences of societal intolerance. The screenplay utilizes dialogue, visual cues (bleak settings, tearful characters), and internal monologues to evoke deep sadness, making it a core element of the audience's experience. The sadness is not just about Billy's death, but also about the broken family dynamics and Eve's profound loneliness.
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surprise Analysis
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Surprise in 'PUSH' is primarily used to reveal character truths and plot twists, effectively re-contextualizing previous events and emotional arcs. The most impactful surprise is the revelation of Billy's sexuality, which subverts expectations and deeply affects Eve's understanding of her brother and their family. The unexpected discovery of the infant also serves as a significant narrative surprise, shifting the focus and offering a new direction. The screenplay uses surprise strategically to enhance dramatic impact and engage the audience.
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empathy Analysis
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Empathy is a cornerstone of 'PUSH,' skillfully evoked through the raw emotional vulnerability of its characters, particularly Eve and Billy. The screenplay consistently aims to foster empathy by showcasing their struggles with grief, rejection, self-doubt, and societal pressures. This is achieved through relatable dialogue, intimate internal monologues, and the depiction of genuine human pain. The audience is consistently invited to feel for the characters, understanding their motivations and the heartbreaking consequences of their circumstances, making the story profoundly moving.
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