The Descent

After a false missile alert locks a corporate bunker for eight hours, the CEO’s decision to protect his encrypted vault forces employees to face the moral calculus of worth — and the people deemed disposable become the ones who save everyone.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

"The Descent" stands out from other screenplays in the drama/thriller genre by its nuanced exploration of the moral and ethical implications of the systems that the wealthy and powerful have built to protect themselves. The screenplay's unique perspective, which challenges the notion of meritocracy and the value placed on human life, is likely to resonate with audiences who are increasingly concerned about the growing divide between the haves and the have-nots. The compelling narrative, well-developed characters, and the relevance of the themes make this screenplay a compelling piece of storytelling that is sure to captivate its target audience.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Recommend
Claude
 Recommend
Average Score: 8.4
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The script’s core is very strong: a claustrophobic, idea-driven thriller that ties a ticking technical crisis to an incisive social critique. Your next pass should tighten plausibility and humanize the antagonist. Concretize the vault (specific documents, moral compromises, or blackmailable evidence) and add 2–3 short, concrete beats that explain why the vault materially ties up system resources and why Elliot can’t (or won’t) let it go. Trim on-the-nose exposition in the whiteboard/merit-panel scenes by showing consequences in parallel (one or two intimate, visual micro-scenes) and give Elliot one small, sympathetic pre-lockdown moment that complicates him beyond hubris—this will make the eventual moral collision feel earned rather than schematic.
For Executives:
High commercial potential: timely, topical thriller with festival/streaming appeal—strong attached talent could drive critical interest and awards-friendly positioning (think prestige ethical-thriller). Key risks: tech implausibility and on-the-nose thematic beats could alienate savvy critics/audiences and depress word-of-mouth; the lead antagonist needs more texture to avoid a one-note villain that undermines nuance in coverage. Mitigation: invest one rewrite pass to tighten tech logic and vault specifics, and attach a credible technical advisor; these inexpensive fixes materially reduce audience disbelief and preserve the script’s marketable USP (workers-as-heroes + corporate satire).
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Thriller 50% Science Fiction 40%

Setting: Near future, during a crisis situation, A high-tech underground bunker and the Axiom Dynamics campus

Themes: The Dehumanizing Nature of Systems and Hierarchy, The Primacy of Human Life Over Profit and Control, Class Divide and Social Inequality, The Nature of True Leadership and Accountability, The Power of Truth and Transparency, The Resilience of the Human Spirit and Collective Action, The Illusion of Control and Security, Eugenics and Moral Relativism, The Pursuit of Efficiency vs. Human Empathy

Conflict & Stakes: The struggle for survival in a failing bunker system, ethical dilemmas surrounding a merit panel that prioritizes lives based on worth, and the personal stakes of characters facing life-threatening situations.

Mood: Tense and urgent, with moments of desperation and moral reckoning.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The merit panel system that ranks individuals based on perceived value, creating moral dilemmas.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation that the workers, deemed replaceable, are the ones who ultimately save everyone.
  • Innovative Ideas: The exploration of AI ethics and resource allocation in a survival scenario.
  • Distinctive Setting: A high-tech bunker that contrasts luxury with the dire circumstances of its inhabitants.
  • Character Dynamics: Complex relationships that evolve under pressure, highlighting themes of trust and betrayal.

Comparable Scripts: The Stanford Prison Experiment, Snowpiercer, Lord of the Flies, The Hunger Games, The Martian, The Road, The Platform, The Good Place, The Leftovers

Data Says…
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Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

1. Concept
Big Impact Scene Level
Your current Concept score: 8.6
Typical rewrite gain: +0.29 in Concept
Gets you ~2% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~1,412 similar revisions)
  • This is currently your highest-impact lever. Improving Concept is most likely to move the overall rating next.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Concept by about +0.29 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: At your level, improving this one area alone can cover a meaningful slice of the climb toward an "all Highly Recommends" script.
2. Visual Impact (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Visual Impact (Script Level) score: 8.4
Gets you ~1% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Note: Not enough revision data for scripts at this high level
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • Why this is flagged: We don't have enough revision data for scripts at this high score, but our model knows this is still a high-impact area to focus on for refinement.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.
3. Characters (Scene Level)
Light Impact Scene Level
Your current Characters (Scene Level) score: 8.6
Typical rewrite gain: +0.2 in Characters (Scene Level)
Gets you ~0% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Confidence: High (based on ~3,528 similar revisions)
  • This is another meaningful lever. After you work on the higher-impact areas, this can still create a noticeable lift.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Characters (Scene Level) by about +0.2 in one rewrite.
  • Why it matters: After you address the top item, gains here are still one of the levers that move you toward that "all Highly Recommends" zone.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.68
Key Suggestions:
Focus your next draft on two linked craft problems: pacing in the ethics/dialogue-heavy sequences and the emotional grounding of your antagonist. Condense and sharpen the merit-panel and rationing debates so each scene hits a single, escalating beat; intersperse those tightened beats with small, concrete revelations about Elliot (brief flashbacks, a diary line, or a physical tic tied to his trauma) so his refusal to delete the vault reads as fraught and human rather than obstinate. Trim redundant exposition, add non-verbal beats and varied lighting to give the bunker visual variety, and give one or two secondary characters (Derek, Rhea/Carlos) short, defining moments to avoid caricature. These changes will preserve your thematic power while increasing emotional impact and forward momentum.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
Tighten the emotional logic by humanizing your antagonist and sharpening the technical stakes. Subtly foreshadow Elliot’s personal desperation (e.g., a medical detail, a private scene, or recurring visual motif) so his refusal to delete the vault reads as tragic complexity rather than pure villainy. Also clarify the AI’s constraints and the vault’s strategic value just enough to make the dilemma feel unavoidable — let character choices, not voice-over exposition, carry the moral weight. Finally, deepen two or three board characters with small, specific nuances so the class conflict feels textured instead of schematic.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character work is strong overall, but the script would benefit most from deepening the emotional reality of your antagonistic center (Elliot) while tightening a few underwritten supporting arcs. Right now Elliot reads as conceptually potent (a symbol of tech hubris) but often feels unrelatable—his refusal to authorize the vault wipe risks turning him into a cartoonish villain rather than a tragic figure. Add short, grounded moments that tether his decisions to the sister-fire trauma (flashbacks, private rituals, or small humane gestures), show occasions where his leadership legitimately helps others, and tighten pacing around his moments of obstinacy. Simultaneously, nudge underdeveloped players (Derek, Jade) with one humanizing beat each and slightly increase Marcus’s small emotional vulnerabilities so the investigative spine carries more heart. These changes will make moral conflicts feel earned and heighten the payoff when workers save everyone.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s core moral conflict and high-stakes premise are compelling, but the emotional design is currently too relentless: long stretches of maximal tension with few moments of human connection or respite risk numbing the audience and weakening the climaxes. Introduce deliberate "valleys" — brief, quieter beats of empathy, humor, or small victories — and deepen key character access (especially Elliot and select secondaries) so the audience can both root for and feel complexity in those who make bad choices. Tightening emotional pacing and adding a few well-placed humanizing moments will preserve the story’s urgency while making the moral reckonings land with far greater impact.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
Tighten and dramatize Elliot’s internal arc so the moral pivot—choosing human lives over his data/ego—feels earned and inevitable. Right now the screenplay clearly sets up the philosophical conflict, but the emotional throughline depends on the audience connecting to Elliot's fear, guilt, and eventual sacrifice. Add earlier micro-moments that reveal his vulnerability and why the vault represents more than money (e.g., explicit evidence of past trauma, concrete consequences if data is lost, brief intimate beats showing his dependence on control). Then stage a visible tipping point where Elliot makes a small, costly concession before the final wipe so the final surrender reads as true transformation, not a late plot convenience.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s core — a moral showdown between human life and a corporate logic of efficiency — is powerful and timely. To sharpen its impact, tighten the emotional through-line: make Elliot’s moral choices and the workers’ counteractions more character-driven and inevitable. Foreshadow the vault/AI constraint earlier and humanize key beats (Victoria’s insulin, Maya’s perspective, Rhea/Carlos/Jade’s motivations) so dramatic reversals feel earned rather than engineered. Trim or combine repetitive exposition scenes and let visual motifs (whiteboard, vault, the dog) carry thematic weight to avoid didacticism while preserving the ensemble dynamics.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's moral and dramatic core — who gets to decide who lives — is compelling, but several choices undercut its credibility. The most urgent fixes are to deepen and justify characters' extreme decisions (especially Victoria and Elliot) and to tighten the bunker/AI mechanics so the lockdown and eventual workaround feel inevitable rather than convenient. Give the audience clear, early signals (personal history, private stakes, technical constraints) that make the later betrayals and choices feel earned. Consolidate repeated rationing/AI exposition scenes to keep pace and sharpen the emotional throughline between workers and leadership.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice—concise, tense, and morally probing—is a major strength. To elevate the script further, deepen the audience's emotional access to the central characters (especially Elliot) so moral complexity doesn't read as coldness. Add a few compact, humanizing beats (micro-flashbacks, private moments, or sensory details) that complicate motivations without diluting the tautness. Maintain the spare dialogue and visual tension that make Scene 6 sing, but vary rhythm with quieter, character-driven moments to sustain empathy through the escalating crisis.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You have a compelling, high-concept drama with clear thematic teeth (AI, inequality, moral triage) and taut scene design. The immediate craft priority is to deepen character interiority and subtext so audiences care about choices rather than just observe them. Focus rewrites on revealing interior stakes through small, specific actions and layered dialogue (practice dialogue-only scenes and pressure-decision scenes), tighten pacing so tension escalates and releases deliberately, and rework key set-pieces (Elliot’s vault choice, Victoria’s insulin arc, the merit-panel scenes) to show motivation rather than explain it.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
Lean into the central moral engine: make Elliot’s internal stakes and the workers’ competence emotionally and visually compelling so the ethical conflict feels inevitable rather than didactic. Trim expository scenes, show motivations through behavior and small flashbacks (the house fire, the vault’s tangible contents) and tighten pacing around the vault/AI crisis. Emphasize contrast between polished corporate surfaces and claustrophobic bunker detail with images that reinforce theme (optimization as dehumanization) rather than long debates. Let the workers’ technical ingenuity and quiet courage earn the climax — make their choices feel earned, not scripted.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
You already have a powerful engine: sustained tension, moral confrontation, and escalating stakes drive strong emotional moments. Tighten the emotional throughline by clarifying who the audience should root for (the moral anchor) and sharpening the protagonist arc so the payoff (vault deletion / rescue) feels earned. Trim any repetitive beats, lean into the confrontational/philosophical scenes that score highest, and use quieter moments to reveal inner conflict earlier so character changes land more believably.
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