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SEVERANCE- PILOT EPISODE- "MISTER" Written by Dan Erickson Benjamin Blake
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INT. DARKENED HALL. DAY. Mark creeps cautiously down a thin, unlit hall. The hall is full of sharp twists, preventing Mark from seeing more than a few feet ahead. Ahead is a bend, around which Mark can see light.
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INT. STAIRWELL. DAY. Mark bursts through the stairwell door and runs down the stairs, tripping over his feet as he goes. Spinning around on a middle landing, he comes face to face with HELLY RIGGS, 19, small but quietly fierce.
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INT. CULLING OFFICE. DAY. IRVING BAILIFF, 65, sits under his desk. Irving is heavy and bald, but his demeanor is childlike. On the carpet in front of him sit a dozen small objects. A snow globe paperweight. A couple of glue sticks. A handheld
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INT. CULLING OFFICE. CONTINUOUS The office is large, blank and white. In the center, four desks face one another. Helly sits at one, and to her left is Irving. To her right is DYLAN HOGAN. Dylan is 40, and despite a sense of swagger, looks vaguely
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INT. CULLING OFFICE MEN’S ROOM. DAY. Mark enters the men’s room stall and sits down. He rubs his face, breathing heavily. After a moment, he opens his eyes. He notices a message scratched into the bottom corner of the
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INT. STORAGE CLOSET. CONTINUOUS. Mark enters the closet, which is small and cramped and lined on all sides by deep shelves. He shuts the door and turns on the light. He locates this room on the map. Here, Helly has written the
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INT. VIDEO ARCHIVE ROOM. CONTINUOUS. Mark enters the small, cramped room bathed in green light. He slams the door behind him and locks it. All walls are covered with heavy file cabinets. In the corner is a small, dusty television with a built-in VCR.
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EXT. HALE HOUSEHOLD, YARD. MORNING. Mark goes to his car. Devon follows him out. The suburban, Pacific Northwest neighborhood is coated in a layer of frozen dew. Devon and Mark’s breath is visible in the morning light.
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INT. CRAZY EAGLE VIDEO. DAY. A card table has been set up in the middle of the store. Racks of DVD’s line the walls. Mark sits across from SETH, the store manager, 25 and mustached.
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EXT. VICTORIAN HOUSE. DAY. Mark knocks on the door. He looks around. The forest is silent. A LITTLE GIRL, 3, opens the door. MARK
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INT. COBEL’S HOUSE, PARLOR. DAY. Mark and Cobel stand over the body of the cat, which lays on a white linen tablecloth surrounded by candles. Cobel munches on a pickle. She offers one to Mark. COBEL
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INT. COBEL’S HOUSE, BASEMENT. NIGHT. Mark slowly awakens, his head spinning. The room is dank, the walls made of rotted wood. He sits in a chair at a table. Cobel sits across from him. In her hand is a shoebox.
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INT. POLICE STATION, OFFICE. NIGHT. Mark sits across from OFFICER IRONS, 40 and incredulous. OFFICER IRONS Okay, so- You hit the woman’s cat. MARK
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INT. PORT-O-POTTY. MORNING. Mark enters and sits down. He shuts the door behind him. He looks around, silent for a long moment. MARK Are you here?
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INT. UPPER HALLWAY. NIGHT. Mark opens the door and steps quietly out of the archive room. Cobel and Milchick stand before him. MARK

severance (TV)

Can Mark navigate the bizarre world of the sterile office and figure out how to escape?

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"Severance" is a captivating and thought-provoking television drama that explores the themes of identity, reality, and the boundaries between work and personal life. With its unique blend of mystery, humor, and existentialism, the series offers a fresh and original perspective on human nature and the modern workplace. Unlike other dramas in the psychological thriller genre, "Severance" stands out with its distinctive characters, innovative storytelling techniques, and its compelling exploration of the psychological and emotional consequences of corporate control and manipulation. Unraveling the secrets of the Lumon Corporation and the enigmatic characters within, "Severance" keeps viewers on the edge of their seats, eager to discover the truth behind the cryptic messages and the sinister motivations that drive the mysterious organization.

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Story Facts

Genres: Drama, Mystery, Thriller, Sci-Fi, Psychological Thriller, Psychological, Dark Comedy, Crime, Science Fiction

Setting: Present day or near future, Unclear, but features an office building, a suburban neighborhood, and a forest

Themes: Identity and Existence, Control and Power, Isolation and Alienation, Choice and Morality, Existential Dread, Grief and Loss, Duality and Paradox

Conflict & Stakes: Mark's struggle to uncover the truth about his past and present, as well as the ethical implications of the severance procedure. The stakes include Mark's identity, his relationship with his colleagues, and the well-being of the overall organization.

Mood: Tense, mysterious, and unsettling, with a sense of paranoia and uncertainty

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The concept of severance, which allows employees to have their work memories surgically separated from their personal memories.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation that Mark's decision to undergo severance was not as simple as it seemed and that he had a deeper connection to the company than he initially realized.
  • Distinctive Setting: The mysterious and isolated office building where the severance procedure takes place, creating a sense of unease and uncertainty.
  • Innovative Idea: The exploration of the ethical implications of the severance procedure and the question of what it means to be truly human.
  • Unique Characters: The eccentric and enigmatic characters who work at Lumon, each with their own motivations and secrets.
  • Genre Blend: The screenplay blends elements of psychological thriller, science fiction, and dark comedy, creating a unique and captivating cinematic experience.

Comparable Scripts: The Matrix, Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind, The Truman Show, The Parallax View, The Prisoner, The Adjustment Bureau, Mr. Robot, Black Mirror: White Christmas, 1984, The Game

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