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Crossing the Rubicon 203 and 204 Part 6 of 7 series Based on the books
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4 INT. VLISSINGEN - LOWER DECK - CONTINUOUS 4 Jacob and Tom help the hurt sailor below deck, setting him on the floor. An officer comes to his aid to see about his cuts. 5 INT. VLISSINGEN - MAIN HALL LOWER DECK - LATER 5
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8 EXT. VLISSINGEN - SAILING SHIP SOUTH ATLANTIC - AFTERNOON 8 Subtitled: May 31, 1741 The storm is as strong as the day before, the sails are all but stripped from the ship's masts. The skies are dark, almost black. Lightning flashes....
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14 INT. VLISSINGEN - LOWER DECK II - CONTINUOUS 14 (Sailor 2) The cow in the small stall is kicking the side of the ship's bulkhead. A few of the crew rushing in! Trying to calm the cow down.
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21 EXT. BLACK WATER DREAM - CONTINUOUS 21 In close to darkness, the bodies of Trinity and Jacob float past us and slowly sink into the dark sea. Like ghosts, each one passes and fades. The dead sink to the bottom..... DISSOLVE TO:
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25 EXT. VLISSINGEN - MAIN DECK - LATER 25 (Gusta) Subtitled: June 1, 1741 The storm is over, the sky is clearing. Trinity, Jacob, Keara, and Tom slowly step foot on the main deck of the ship.
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29 EXT. VLISSINGEN - MAIN DECK - EVENING 29 (Gusta) Trinity stands on the deck all alone, looking out at the African coastline passing by. The sun sets behind her. As she stands there, the three dead are brought to the main
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30 EXT. VILLA NUEVA DE SANTA CLARA - ESTEVEZ ESTATE - DAY 30 Andy rides up to the estate home of Luis for midday lunch. He is met by a BLACK AFRICAN slave who takes his horse. 31 INT. VILLA NUEVA DE SANTA CLARA - ESTEVEZ ESTATE - CONTINUOUS 31 (Andy, Estela, Luis)
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32 EXT. PORT OF CAPE TOWN AFRICA - DAY 32 Subtitled: June 10, 1741 The Dutch ship sails into the port of Cape Town. 33 EXT. VLISSINGEN - MAIN DECK - CONTINUOUS 33 (Keara, Trinity)
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36 EXT. CAPE TOWN - AFTERNOON 36 The four ride in a small open carriage which takes them to a small two story white Inn with small windows, grass roof,which sits, overlooking the Cape Town harbor below. The carriage stops and slowly the four step down. A MAN from the Inn
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41 EXT. CAPE TOWN INN - EVENING 41 Jacob and Tom are walking and are joined by a woman MRS BERG, 40s and her daughter Katrien, the four enter the INN. 42 INT. CAPE TOWN INN TRINITY JACOB ROOM - LATER 42 (Berg, Jacob, Keara, Katrien, Tom, Trinity)
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43 INT. CAPE TOWN INN - HALL - DAY 43 (Berg, Jacob) The boys stand in the hall waiting. Jacob looks at his 21th century watch. The door swings open and Berg marches out, past Jacob and Tom with her daughter in tow.
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45 EXT. VILLA NUEVA DE SANTA CLARA - TOWN SQUARE - MORNING 45 (Andy, Luis, Slave Dealer) Luis and Andy are riding out of town. They are met by a Spanish slave dealer who has twenty African Slaves chained together leading them to the center of town for sale in the
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46 EXT. VILLA NUEVA DE SANTA CLARA - ESTEVEZ ESTATE - AFTERNOON 46 (Andy) The three ride into the estate of Luis. Andy gets off the horse and helps GRACE down. Andy is met by two African Slaves.
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48 INT. VILLA NUEVA DE SANTA CLARA - ESTEVEZ ESTATE - LATER 48 (Andy, Luis) Luis and Andy are having a drink next to the fireplace in the main hall. The only light is that of the fire on their faces.
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50 EXT. CAPE TOWN INN - DAY 50 Subtitled: June 21, 1741 The rain falls. The day is cool, dark. 51 INT. CAPE TOWN INN TRINITY JACOB ROOM - DAY 51 (Jacob, Trinity)
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52 INT. WARNER ESTATE HOME - 2006 - CALGARY - NIGHT 52 (Trinity) Maria is giving birth at her home in Calgary. Carl looks on as does Trinity age 9. There are two midwives in the room with her. Carl smiles. Trinity is in shock as she looks
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54 INT. CAPE TOWN INN - NIGHT 54 (Jacob, Keara, Trinity) Trinity is in bed, screaming Keara is at her side. Berg and the other WOMAN are pushing Jacob out of the room. Trinity screams.....
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55 EXT. CAPE TOWN INN MAIN FLOOR - DAY 55 (Berg, Jacob, Trinity) Subtitled: July 3, 1741 In the main entrance of the Inn, Jacob, Trinity, Keara and Tom celebrate Trinity's birthday. Trinity holds Bianca in
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56 EXT. CAPE TOWN INN - FRONT YARD - DAY 56 (Jacob, Trinity) Jacob sits on a wood-bench in front of the inn, looking at the hills around Cape town. Trinity sits down next to him with Bianca in her arms.
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59 EXT. CAPE TOWN INN - STABLES - DAY 59 (Trinity) They return each night with more and more items and park the wagons out back behind the INN. The Inn Keeper looks on, he has a questioning look on his
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61 EXT. VILLA NUEVA DE SANTA CLARA - ESTEVEZ ESTATE - MORNING 61 (Andy, Grace, Luis) Andy and Grace say their good-byes to Luis and Estela. The two climb into a small wagon with a few belongings. LUIS
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65 EXT. AFRICAN COUNTRY SIDE COAST - DAY 65 (Jacob, Trinity) The wagons are now following the coastline. The ground is rocky and the wagons are having a very hard time. Jacob fights with the wagon and horses, trying to keep them
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67 EXT. AFRICA ORANGE RIVER - DAY 67 (Jacob, Keara, Tom, Trinity) Subtitled: August 22, 1741 The two wagons are parked on the beach, to the right of them is the mouth of the Orange River. Jacob jumps down from his
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68 EXT. AFRICA ORANGE RIVER - LATER 68 (Jacob, Keara, Tom, Trinity) The young adults are now setting up their camp for the next 10 weeks. Tents are pitched, wagons unloaded. The camp is about 100 meters inland from the coastline.
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69 INT. AFRICA ORANGE RIVER - TENT - NIGHT 69 (Jacob, Trinity) The tents are set. Trinity and Jacob are just turning in for the night. Trinity is putting Bianca to bed. TRINITY
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70 EXT. AFRICA ORANGE RIVER - MORNING 70 (Jacob, Keara, Tom, Trinity) The sun is just coming up over the hills behind their camp. The long morning shadows dance along the ground, finally reaching out to the sea. The ground is very rocky, with
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71 EXT. AFRICA ORANGE RIVER - AFTERNOON 71 (Keara, Trinity) Keara and Trinity spend their day getting things the way they want around the camp. Trinity looks toward the sea. Keara walks up.
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72 EXT. AFRICA ORANGE RIVER - NIGHT 72 (Jacob, Keara, Tom, Trinity) Darkness, and the two girls are sitting around the campfire trying to stay warm. Trinity has one of Jacob's pistols on her lap. Keara has the other one. They are worried!
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73 EXT. SOUTHERN ALBERTA 1739 CROWSNEST PASS - EVENING 73 (Trinity) Trinity stands looking west. With her are Jacob, Keara, Tom, Andy and Kim. They all pause before finally starting out...
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79 EXT. DUNES OF NAMIBIA - EVENING 79 (JACOB, TRINITY) Trinity, Bianca and Jacob, walk the dunes just north of the campsite. A camp fire below burns marking the safe haven for each night. The three stop and turn sitting looking out
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80 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - DAY 80 (KEARA, TRINITY) The boys are carrying buckets of gravel to their screening machine. Trinity and Keara work the camp site. The days are starting
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81 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - NIGHT 81 (JACOB, KEARA, TOM, TRINITY) Subtitled: October 15, 1741 The four sit around the campfire as Trinity feeds Bianca holding her.
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82 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - DAY 82 (JACOB, KEARA, TOM, TRINITY) The two boys are fighting with the screen machine! Finally Jacob loses it! And starts to smash the wood framed machine with a shovel.
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83 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - DAY 83 (JACOB, TRINITY) Subtitled: November 1, 1741 Trinity, Tom and Keara stand on the banks of the Orange River, looking at their home for the last two months.
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85 EXT. AFRICAN COUNTRY SIDE - AFTERNOON 85 (JACOB, TOM, TRINITY) The two wagons move on.... Trinity in back with Keara, are sharing music between the two. Moving towards them are two wagons with Dutch settlers in
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86 EXT. CAPE TOWN - DAY 86 Subtitled: November 20, 1741 The wagons make their way into Cape Town center. 87 EXT. CAPE TOWN STREET - DAY 87 (JACOB, KEARA, TOM, TRINITY)
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90 INT. FRENCH VINEYARD HOME - LATER 90 Rose shows Trinity and Keara the two small rooms. For the next few months the five will be living in two small rooms 14 x 12 with a single window, soon to be joined by Keara's baby.
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93 EXT. FRENCH VINEYARD - LATER 93 (JACOB, PIERRE, TRINITY) Trinity and Jacob are walking between the grape vines. They hold hands, slowly walking. TRINITY
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94 INT. FRENCH VINEYARD HOME - DAY 94 Trinity and Keara sit in the house trying to get true the day. Boredom is setting in, little to nothing to do each day now. From outside the two hear a fight. The girls look to one another.
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97 INT. FRENCH VINEYARD HOME BEDROOM TRINITY - NIGHT 97 (JACOB, TRINITY) Trinity and Jacob are in bed. Trinity turns to Jacob and looks at him. TRINITY
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100 INT. FRENCH VINEYARD HALL - CONTINUOUS 100 (BERG, TOM) Berg stands there talking with Tom and Trinity. BERG She is weak, skin and bones.... She
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102 INT. FRENCH VINEYARD HALL - CONTINUOUS 102 (JACOB, TRINITY) Quietly outside the bedroom, with Trinity looking anxious, Jacob tells her... JACOB
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104 EXT. SOUTH AFRICAN CEMETERY - DAY 104 (JACOB, TOM, TRINITY) The sun shines as Trinity, Jacob, Tom with a NUMBER of other Dutch gather to lay Katrien to rest. The simple wood coffin is placed into the ground. The three
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106 EXT. CAPE TOWN - HOME OF MRS. BERG - DAY 106 (JACOB, WOMAN NEXT DOOR) Jacob stands before the home of Mrs. Berg banging on the door and windows. JACOB
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111 INT. FRENCH VINEYARD HOME BEDROOM KEARA - LATER 111 (JACOB, KEARA, TOM, TRINITY) There is a knock at the door... TRINITY It's open...
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112 INT. FRENCH VINEYARD HOME - LATER 112 (PIERRE, TOM) Jacob and Tom walk into the main room of the house. Pierre is sitting there with an open bottle of wine. PIERRE
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115 EXT. CAPE TOWN STREET BLACKSMITH - DAY 115 Jacob and Tom leave a blacksmith who has just built them four round sifting screens. They load them up and head back into the hills of Cape Town. 116 EXT. FRENCH VINEYARD HOME - EVENING 116
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117 INT. FRENCH VINEYARD HOME - NIGHT 117 (PIERRE, TRINITY) All gather for Christmas eve. Seated around the table the three families now meet. Keara cradles Erich in her arms as Trinity tries to do the same, but Bianca is starting to get
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119 INT. CALGARY HOME OF TRINIYT NEW YEARS EVE - NIGHT 119 (CARL, TRINITY) Seated around a grand table are Trinity, Carl, Maria and the rest of the Warner family. They are happy, celebrating the coming new year. Carl walks around poring wine in a number
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122 INT. FRENCH VINEYARD HOME BEDROOM TRINITY - NIGHT 122 Trinity is in bed with Jacob, by her side. She looks at her iPhone, sweeping through a number of photos. She looks back at Robert, Kim and Andy, plus those of her Mom and Dad, sisters.
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124 EXT. AFRICAN COUNTRY SIDE - DAY 124 (JACOB, TOM, TRINITY) The two wagons now move north again to the Orange River. Trinity soon nodding off. She then awakes to the sight of vultures circling.
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127 EXT. AFRICAN COUNTRY SIDE - DAY 127 (JACOB, KEARA, TOM, TRINITY) The two wagons come to a stop, just short of the Bushman Village, some 300 meters out. Trinity and Jacob look at each other. They can make out
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128 EXT. BUSHMAN VILLAGE - LATER 128 Trinity, Jacob, Keara and Tom sit around eating and drinking something? Trinity looks at what she is drinking and finds it hard to swallow. The white milk like substance runs down her chin. The Chief and is wife laugh at the four new
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132 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - NIGHT 132 (JACOB, KEARA, TOM, TRINITY) The camp is built and the four now sit looking at a the ocean before them. Planning for the next day. Tom pokes at the sand with a stick. Jacob throws some small
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134 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - DAY 134 (TOM) Tom is weighing a number of stones and taking notes. Trinity walks up and from her pocket she pulls out eight stones and drops then onto the small wood desk.
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137 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - EVENING 137 (JACOB, KEARA, SHIPIPA) As Jacob and Tom walk into the campsite for night they are met with Shipipa sitting next to the fire eating with the girls.
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140 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - DAY 140 (TRINITY) The girls work the beach, with the screens. Their hands are looking like shit... TRINITY (V.O.)
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141 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - DAY 141 (JACOB, KEARA, MAN 2, MAN 3, SHIPIPA, TOM, TRINITY) Subtitled: June 22, 1742 Trinity and Keara work their small area of the beach a short distance from the main camp. They are well tanned from the
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142 EXT. ORANGE RIVER CAMP SITE - BEACH - EVENING 142 (JACOB) As the sun sets to the west, the four friends have gathered. Jacob and Tom finish digging a large hole on the upper beach area. Jacob drags the last of the three bodies in to it.

Crossing the Rubicon 203 and 204 part 6 of 7

In 18th-century South Africa, a group of time-traveling pioneers search for diamonds to secure their future, but their quest is threatened by the harsh realities of colonial life and their own personal demons.

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The unique selling proposition lies in the blend of historical fiction, adventure, and romance, centered around time-traveling teenagers navigating the harsh realities of 18th-century South Africa. The combination of perilous sea voyages, diamond hunting, and the backdrop of slavery creates a unique and potentially captivating story for audiences interested in historical dramas with a touch of fantasy and adventure. The compelling central romance provides an emotional core.

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Genres: Drama, Adventure, Historical Drama, Historical, Romance, Action, Family, Thriller, Tragedy, Historical Fiction

Setting: 1741-1742, South Africa, including Cape Town, the Orange River, and various campsites

Themes: Survival and Resilience, Loss and Grief, Friendship and Community, Motherhood and Family, Cultural Conflict and Understanding

Conflict & Stakes: The characters face survival against natural disasters, personal trauma, and societal issues, with the stakes including life, safety, and emotional well-being.

Mood: Somber and reflective, with moments of tension and hope.

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  • Unique Hook: The story intertwines survival against nature with personal trauma, creating a compelling narrative.
  • Major Twist: The tragic death of Shipipa, which highlights the consequences of violence and loss.
  • Distinctive Setting: The historical backdrop of 18th-century South Africa provides a rich and visually stunning environment.
  • Innovative Ideas: The screenplay addresses themes of motherhood and survival in a harsh landscape, offering a fresh take on historical narratives.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast that includes strong female leads and complex male characters, each facing their own struggles.

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