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Scene Map 47
# PG SLUGLINE
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The Ivanhoe Gig
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INT SMALL CAR.
3 4
INT CAR (CONT'D)
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INT CAR
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EXT TRAFFIC LIGHTS - LATE AFTERNOON.
6 8
EXT PALISADES HOME DRIVEWAY DAY
7 13
INT LIVING ROOM DAY
8 16
INT LARGE PALISADES KITCHEN
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EXT POOL SIDE - DAY - SUNNY
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INT MAINTENANCE BUILDING - DARK
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INT LIVING ROOM
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EXT DRIVEWAY
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EXT DRIVEWAY (CONT'D)
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INT COMPACT CAR
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EXT SIDE OF PCH - PROPERTY WITH A WIRE GATE DUSK
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INT CAR (CONT'D)
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EXT HANG GLIDING CLUB NIGHT
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EXT PACIFIC COAST HIGHWAY NIGHT
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EXT CAMP GATE NIGHT
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EXT HANG GLIDING CLUB NIGHT
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EXT CAMP GATE NIGHT
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EXT MARINA NIGHT
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EXT DOCKSIDE NIGHT
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EXT CAMP GATE NIGHT
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EXT BOATS AT DOCK NIGHT
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EXT CAMP ROAD NIGHT
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INT BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING
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EXT MAIN BUILDING FRONT ENTRANCE NIGHT
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EXT NIGHT - MAIN ENTRANCE
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EXT OPEN LAKE - NIGHT - MISTY
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EXT OPEN WATER - NIGHT - MIST
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EXT DOCK AT MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D)
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EXT OPEN LAKE NIGHT
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INT MAIN BUILDING - MAINFLOOR ENTRY/RECEPTION
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D)
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D)
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INT HALL IN MAIN BUILDING
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INT NEXT ROOM
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INT JULIO'S HOUSE - STAIR LANDING(FLASHBACK)
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INT JULIO'S HOUSE(FLASHBACK)
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EXT DIRT ROAD - AFGHANISTAN(FLASHBACK)
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INT BACK ROOM
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EXT MAIN ENTRANCE NIGHT
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EXT BUSY INTERECTION - BUS STOP DAY
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EXT BUS STOP IN THE SURBURBS DAY
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INT FRONT OF BUS DAY
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INT BUS - FRONT SEATS
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
The Ivanhoe Gig
The Ivanhoe Gig
The Ivanhoe Gig by Rob Weafer 647-720-1637 [email protected]
2 3
INT SMALL CAR.
INT. SMALL CAR.
INT. SMALL CAR. Woman in an equally authentic Wonder Woman outfit is driving. WE SEE a rosary hanging on the rear view mirror. On the dash is a small bust of the Virgin Mary. It is engraved
3 4
INT CAR (CONT'D)
INT. CAR (CONT'D)
INT. CAR (CONT'D) WONDER WOMAN Don't think I don't appreciate the irony. You lost the toss again for Aquaman?
4 6
INT CAR
INT. CAR
INT. CAR WONDER WOMAN Ya, ya... I'm late already...I know. No gratitude. She slows the car and pulls up. SUPERMAN gets into the
5 8
EXT TRAFFIC LIGHTS - LATE AFTERNOON.
EXT. TRAFFIC LIGHTS - LATE AFTERNOON.
EXT. TRAFFIC LIGHTS - LATE AFTERNOON. We see WONDER WOMAN'S car pull up to a red light. There is a movie shoot going on.. extras in costume eating Craft bagels, and sipping coffee. In the background, we see a lifesize portion of the Acropolis, Athena columns
6 8
EXT PALISADES HOME DRIVEWAY DAY
EXT. PALISADES HOME DRIVEWAY - DAY
EXT. PALISADES HOME DRIVEWAY - DAY Our gang piles out of the car. SUPERMAN is preening his cowlick, AQUAMAN sniffs his pits and WONDER WOMAN is doing a last check in a compact mirror. She immediately notices the wide brim sunglasses
7 13
INT LIVING ROOM DAY
INT. LIVING ROOM - DAY
INT. LIVING ROOM - DAY (BALLOONS, PARTY FAVORITES, CAKE AND CHIPS, ETC. BUT UTTERLY ABANDONED.) A man is being attended to by his terrified wife... he's been worked over. She is still working on restraints that
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INT LARGE PALISADES KITCHEN
INT. LARGE PALISADES KITCHEN
INT. LARGE PALISADES KITCHEN SUPERMAN enters the kitchen... totally empty. He sees a cracked open bottle of Bushmills Black Label and takes a haul to steady himself. Starts looking around the room.. spots something on the message board written in black
9 16
EXT POOL SIDE - DAY - SUNNY
EXT. POOL SIDE - DAY - SUNNY
EXT. POOL SIDE - DAY - SUNNY Large, flowing garden with fountains, trimmed hedges, outbuilding and cabana. There is an ice sculpture of the Mexican/Aztec national symbol of an eagle devouring a snake..melting
10 17
INT MAINTENANCE BUILDING - DARK
INT. MAINTENANCE BUILDING - DARK
INT. MAINTENANCE BUILDING - DARK The door cracks and light spills in. AQUAMAN sticks his head in professionally for a look before committing. Seems OK... he cracks the door some more and steps in, flicks on the light.
11 18
INT LIVING ROOM
INT. LIVING ROOM
INT. LIVING ROOM SUPERMAN steps back in from the kitchen. WONDER WOMAN is getting nowhere with the parents.. frustrated. They are refusing to answer anything, shaking their heads forcefully against any questions and gesturing strongly
12 18
EXT DRIVEWAY
EXT. DRIVEWAY
EXT. DRIVEWAY SUPERMAN AND WONDER WOMAN exit the door onto the driveway to find AQUAMAN waiting with the radios in his hand and his trident leaning against the garage. They scrum. AQUAMAN
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EXT DRIVEWAY (CONT'D)
EXT. DRIVEWAY (CONT'D)
EXT. DRIVEWAY (CONT'D) AQUAMAN But I am still kinda worried about all the irony. WONDER WOMAN
14 22
INT COMPACT CAR
INT. COMPACT CAR
INT. COMPACT CAR (HEADING DOWN THE A STEEP ROAD OUT OF THE PALISADES AND ONTO THE PCH.) WONDER WOMAN starts shifting gears hard to accelerate. WONDER WOMAN
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EXT SIDE OF PCH - PROPERTY WITH A WIRE GATE DUSK
EXT. SIDE OF PCH - PROPERTY WITH A WIRE GATE - DUSK
EXT. SIDE OF PCH - PROPERTY WITH A WIRE GATE - DUSK A hand painted sign with an airfield name, swinging in a light breeze..'Hollywood Hang Gliding Club' Small car pulls into shot and SUPERMAN gets out. A moment of grave reflection.. leans down and looks into the car.
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INT CAR (CONT'D)
INT. CAR (CONT'D)
INT. CAR (CONT'D) They are looking off at Clark moving away. Radio squawks. SUPERMAN(V.O. RADIO) Radio check. Golden Lasso.. come in.
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EXT HANG GLIDING CLUB NIGHT
EXT. HANG GLIDING CLUB - NIGHT
EXT. HANG GLIDING CLUB - NIGHT Open air hangar and storage. Not a soul about. There are some gliders tied down. SUPERMAN enters the shot, looks down the line of hang gliders. A raven flies through cawing and lands on the 3rd or 4th one down... caws some
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EXT PACIFIC COAST HIGHWAY NIGHT
EXT. PACIFIC COAST HIGHWAY - NIGHT
EXT. PACIFIC COAST HIGHWAY - NIGHT WONDER WOMAN'S car pulls into shot and off the road using the trees as cover. They exit the car. AQUAMAN is still carrying his trident purposefully. WONDER WOMAN eyes the trident and she stops dead.
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EXT CAMP GATE NIGHT
EXT. CAMP GATE - NIGHT
EXT. CAMP GATE - NIGHT WONDER WOMAN.. skipping more than jogging in her heeled, authentic WW boots. She grimaces and wobbles at the effort occasionally. She arrives at the camp gate. Takes
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EXT HANG GLIDING CLUB NIGHT
EXT. HANG GLIDING CLUB - NIGHT
EXT. HANG GLIDING CLUB - NIGHT SUPERMAN WALKS INTO SHOT CARRYING BLACK HANG GLIDER. He gently sets it down and steps out, looking down at his take off point... fifty yards of ground followed by a cliff drop off.. He is quite a ways up, can see the whole
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EXT CAMP GATE NIGHT
EXT. CAMP GATE - NIGHT (CONT'D)
EXT. CAMP GATE - NIGHT (CONT'D) WONDER WOMAN pulls up her radio. WONDER WOMAN LASSO here. The lights are on in a couple of rooms, ground floor.
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EXT MARINA NIGHT
EXT. MARINA - NIGHT
EXT. MARINA - NIGHT AQUAMAN is moving stealthily along the darkened dock. There are a half dozen or so kiddie boats tied up, a charging station on the dock. He tries the boathouse door and it opens.. he steps in.
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EXT DOCKSIDE NIGHT
EXT. DOCKSIDE - NIGHT
EXT. DOCKSIDE - NIGHT He moves along, carrying the steel trident like a weapon, and hops quietly into each KIDDIE BOAT, checking the battery charge. First boat... a fiberglass My Little Pony. Indicator
24 33
EXT CAMP GATE NIGHT
EXT. CAMP GATE - NIGHT (CONT'D)
EXT. CAMP GATE - NIGHT (CONT'D) WONDER WOMAN is still retreated behind cover. She squawks her radio. WONDER WOMAN LASSO here. Alright, Clark.. you're
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EXT BOATS AT DOCK NIGHT
EXT. BOATS AT DOCK - NIGHT
EXT. BOATS AT DOCK - NIGHT AQUAMAN checks his watch, unties the boat and throws rope in...he grabs the little kiddie steering wheel and flips a switch. The little boat begins to putter along silently. He turns and approaches POV from the front.
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EXT CAMP ROAD NIGHT
EXT. CAMP ROAD - NIGHT
EXT. CAMP ROAD - NIGHT (2 beats) then.. CUT TO: Cell phone aerial map zoomed in. We see the AirTag location pulsing slowly on the building in the map. A
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INT BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING
INT. BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING
INT. BACKROOM IN THE MAIN BUILDING - LOW LIGHTING We see the poor kid, apparently locked in a room, bound to a chair by a window, moonlight streaming in. He has been crying, is a lonely, desperate mess. He has a habit
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EXT MAIN BUILDING FRONT ENTRANCE NIGHT
EXT. MAIN BUILDING FRONT ENTRANCE - NIGHT (CONT'D)
EXT. MAIN BUILDING FRONT ENTRANCE - NIGHT (CONT'D) GUARD is sitting on the steps watching Shakira videos on his phone. We hear the shitty speaker music spilling into the night. He takes another swig from the bottle. As he lifts his head up, he catches the barely visible
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EXT NIGHT - MAIN ENTRANCE
EXT. NIGHT - MAIN ENTRANCE
EXT. NIGHT - MAIN ENTRANCE First bag hits the guy in the chest, he drops his gun, doubles over. Second bag glances off his head.. money shot... he lifts his hand briefly to the contact point on
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EXT OPEN LAKE - NIGHT - MISTY
EXT. OPEN LAKE - NIGHT - MISTY
EXT. OPEN LAKE - NIGHT - MISTY We see AQUAMAN in the little boat. In profile,noble posture, with whiny little electric motor sound, pushing boat at 5 miles an hour.. Small wake noises. He pulls out his radio for a quick reply.
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EXT OPEN WATER - NIGHT - MIST
EXT. OPEN WATER - NIGHT - MIST
EXT. OPEN WATER - NIGHT - MIST AQUAMAN, trident ready, plowing through water and mist behind the snarly seahorse in bridle. EXT. DOCK AT MAIN BUILDING
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EXT DOCK AT MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D)
EXT. DOCK AT MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D)
EXT. DOCK AT MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D) CARTEL GUY still postured for a shot but.. We hear the ting of steel in flight and the trident nails the guy's hand to the post.
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EXT OPEN LAKE NIGHT
EXT. OPEN LAKE - NIGHT
EXT. OPEN LAKE - NIGHT SUPERMAN is in flight in the moonlit night, hovering above and over from AQUAMAN in moving boat. SUPERMAN hovers 15 feet up and over from the little boat. CUT TO:
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INT MAIN BUILDING - MAINFLOOR ENTRY/RECEPTION
INT. MAIN BUILDING - MAINFLOOR ENTRY/RECEPTION
INT. MAIN BUILDING - MAINFLOOR ENTRY/RECEPTION Building is dark inside save for a sliver of light coming out of a room down the hall from reception. Someone in the room is listening to music again on their cell phone ..another Einstein.
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D)
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D)
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D) The CARTEL GUY starts coming to. He looks up at ANNIE.. blinks hard, then down at the golden rope wrapped several times around his body... shakes his head.. looks back up at ANNIE.
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INT ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D)
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D)
INT. ROOM IN MAIN BUILDING (CONT'D) ANNIE (eyes wide, shock) What the Holy fuck, Elvis!!!? Jeesus!
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INT HALL IN MAIN BUILDING
INT. HALL IN MAIN BUILDING
INT. HALL IN MAIN BUILDING Our heroes arrive and gather in front of door next room over. WONDER WOMAN tries the door just in case.. The door is locked.
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INT NEXT ROOM
INT. NEXT ROOM
INT. NEXT ROOM We see the lad utterly apprehensive, ecstatic about his rescue. Eyes wide, big smile. The door gives way in a flurry of door jam wood, flying splinters in slo mo. Our heroes enter professionally in a
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INT JULIO'S HOUSE - STAIR LANDING(FLASHBACK)
INT. JULIO'S HOUSE - STAIR LANDING(FLASHBACK)
INT. JULIO'S HOUSE - STAIR LANDING(FLASHBACK) JULIO hiding on a stair landing while all hell is breaking loose in the house in the moments before his abduction. He pulls the gleaming white AirTAG from his dress jacket pocket, sticks out his tongue, places it
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INT JULIO'S HOUSE(FLASHBACK)
INT. JULIO'S HOUSE(FLASHBACK)
INT. JULIO'S HOUSE(FLASHBACK) Julio's Dad is at his PC in his home office, waves young Julio over.. starts scrolling through the head shots and action photos of our heroes on the agency website. JULIO gets excited.. his dad rubs his head gets up and leaves
41 48
EXT DIRT ROAD - AFGHANISTAN(FLASHBACK)
EXT. DIRT ROAD - AFGHANISTAN(FLASHBACK)
EXT. DIRT ROAD - AFGHANISTAN(FLASHBACK) JOHN/AQUAMAN sitting roadside in Afghanistan, both eyes bandaged, being attended to by a medic. Stunned, shocked look.. distant. JULIO (V.O.)
42 48
INT BACK ROOM
INT. BACK ROOM
INT. BACK ROOM They all have pretty floored expressions. JULIO continues... JULIO
43 50
EXT MAIN ENTRANCE NIGHT
EXT. MAIN ENTRANCE - NIGHT
EXT. MAIN ENTRANCE - NIGHT The main door opens and ANNIE and JULIO exit in slow motion and onto the driveway, head toward the main gate. The light fades behind them and we only see their silhouettes eventually...
44 50
EXT BUSY INTERECTION - BUS STOP DAY
EXT. BUSY INTERECTION - BUS STOP - DAY
EXT. BUSY INTERECTION - BUS STOP - DAY The same 2 homeless veterans are on their favorite bench in fatigue jackets chatting it up. Their conversation overlays the following scene.
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EXT BUS STOP IN THE SURBURBS DAY
EXT. BUS STOP IN THE SURBURBS -DAY
EXT. BUS STOP IN THE SURBURBS -DAY Sunny, birdsong, etc. CLARK/SUPERMAN is in full costume, sitting waiting for a bus on a bench, heading out for a solo gig. Bus pulls up and SUPERMAN attempts to stand. There is a slight
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INT FRONT OF BUS DAY
INT. FRONT OF BUS - DAY (CONT'D)
INT. FRONT OF BUS - DAY (CONT'D) CLARK.. catches their look, turns and looks over. He looks away briefly, tilts his head in thought, a moment of realization, reckoning...then contentment and a private smile. He steps up. He looks back at the kids.
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INT BUS - FRONT SEATS
INT. BUS - FRONT SEATS
INT. BUS - FRONT SEATS Kid walks excitedly into shot, slows then approaches nervously, hands over comic and marker. CLARK smiles big and takes it, pops off the marker top, positions it for an autograph.

The Ivanhoe Gig

Three decorated, unemployed vets masquerading as party superheroes are forced to stop playing dress-up and become real heroes when a cartel-style kidnapping puts a kid's life on the line — a high-stakes, human-scaled action-thriller about courage, fate and second chances.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

The script's unique selling proposition is its brilliant juxtaposition of superhero mythology with the gritty reality of struggling veterans. It transforms what could be a simple action premise into a character study about redemption, purpose, and what heroism means when the costumes are just rented props. The concept of military veterans using their actual combat skills while dressed as comic book characters creates both poignant drama and unexpected humor that would appeal to audiences who enjoy character-driven action with emotional depth.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Consider
Claude
 Consider
Grok
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Consider
Average Score: 7.5
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To enhance 'The Ivanhoe Gig', focus on tightening pacing by streamlining expository dialogue and smoothing tonal shifts between humor and drama for better flow. Strengthen antagonist development and plausibility in key sequences, such as the rescue logistics, to make the story more believable and emotionally resonant, while leveraging the script's strong character arcs and thematic depth for a more cohesive narrative.
For Executives:
The script has solid commercial appeal with its unique blend of superhero tropes and veteran realism, offering emotional depth and market potential for character-driven action films. However, risks include uneven pacing, underdeveloped antagonists, and plausibility issues that could alienate audiences or critics, potentially limiting its box office performance and requiring significant rewrites to achieve broad marketability.
Story Facts
Genres:
Action 30% Crime 25% Drama 40% Comedy 20% Thriller 25% War 15%

Setting: Contemporary, Various locations including a busy urban intersection, a suburban neighborhood, a hang gliding club, and a camp property

Themes: Disillusionment and the Mundane Reality of Heroes, The Rediscovery and Reaffirmation of Heroism, Identity and the Nature of a Hero, The Weight of Past Trauma and Military Experience, Faith, Fate, and Coincidence, Social Commentary and Marginalization

Conflict & Stakes: The main conflict revolves around the heroes' efforts to rescue a kidnapped boy while grappling with their personal struggles and societal roles, with the stakes being the boy's safety and the heroes' redemption.

Mood: A mix of somber, reflective, and uplifting tones, balancing humor with serious themes.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The juxtaposition of superhero personas with their struggles in everyday life, highlighting themes of vulnerability.
  • Character Depth: The exploration of each hero's backstory and personal challenges, making them relatable and multidimensional.
  • Humor and Heart: The blend of comedic moments with serious themes, creating a balanced tone that appeals to a wide audience.
  • Social Commentary: Addressing issues like addiction and PTSD, providing a deeper narrative that resonates with contemporary audiences.

Comparable Scripts: The Boys, Superhero Movie, The Tick, Mystery Men, The Incredibles, Watchmen, Deadpool, The Umbrella Academy, Kick-Ass

🎯 Your Top Priorities

Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

You have more than one meaningful lever.

Improving Theme (Script Level) and Visual Impact (Script Level) will have the biggest impact on your overall score next draft.

1. Theme (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 7.4
Expected gain: ~5% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.6 in Theme (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~4,174 similar revisions)
  • This is your top opportunity right now. Focusing your rewrite energy here gives you the best realistic shot at raising the overall rating.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.6 in one rewrite.
2. Visual Impact (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Visual Impact (Script Level) score: 7.7
Expected gain: ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.4 in Visual Impact (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~3,341 similar revisions)
  • This is another strong option. If the top item doesn't fit your rewrite plan, this is a solid alternative.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Visual Impact (Script Level) by about +0.4 in one rewrite.
3. Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Moderate Impact Script Level
Your current Emotional Impact (Script Level) score: 7.5
Expected gain: ~3% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.5 in Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~3,773 similar revisions)
  • This is another strong option. If the top item doesn't fit your rewrite plan, this is a solid alternative.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Emotional Impact (Script Level) by about +0.5 in one rewrite.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.61
Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script's creative depth, focus on deepening character backstories, particularly for Superman, to make his emotional journey more resonant and relatable. Additionally, refine pacing by tightening exposition-heavy scenes and incorporating moments of silence for greater emotional impact, ensuring that humor and serious themes are balanced to strengthen audience connection and thematic clarity.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core strength lies in its character-driven narrative and blend of humor with serious themes, but to elevate it, focus on smoothing out the disjointed plot transitions and tightening pacing across all sections. Integrate backstories more organically with the main conflict to avoid slowing the momentum, and build tension gradually in the action sequences for a more immersive experience. Emphasizing these craft elements will enhance emotional depth and narrative flow, making the story more compelling and resonant.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights opportunities to enhance the script by delving deeper into the protagonists' military backstories and emotional vulnerabilities, which would add layers of authenticity and resonance. Focusing on clarifying character arcs, such as Aquaman's transition from reluctance to action, and incorporating more moments of vulnerability in dialogues and scenes like scene 4 can create stronger emotional connections, making the narrative more engaging and impactful from a creative standpoint.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is strong but can be refined by enhancing variety and pacing to avoid repetition and fatigue, deepening character empathy through more personal revelations, and adding layers of complexity to key scenes. Focus on integrating suggestions like varying emotional tones in action sequences and ensuring smoother transitions to create a more engaging, resonant narrative that better balances tension with relief and introspection with humor.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative standpoint, the script's strength lies in its deep exploration of character growth and philosophical themes, but to elevate it further, focus on tightening the integration of internal conflicts with external action. By deepening moments of vulnerability, such as Aquaman's paternal struggles or Wonder Woman's scar-revealing flashback, and ensuring they directly influence key decisions, the narrative can achieve greater emotional resonance and authenticity. This will enhance the overall craft, making the hero's journey more relatable and impactful for audiences.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script effectively captures themes of disillusionment and heroism through its character arcs, but to enhance its emotional depth and pacing, focus on tightening the transition from mundane struggles to heroic resurgence. By adding more nuanced flashbacks and subtle symbolism, such as expanding on the white butterfly motif, the writer can create a more cohesive narrative that avoids melodrama and strengthens the audience's investment in the characters' redemption.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
To strengthen the script's overall quality, prioritize organic character development by building motivations gradually rather than forcing shifts for plot convenience, address major plot holes with logical explanations to enhance believability, refine dialogue to feel more authentic and less expository, and reduce redundancies to tighten pacing. This will create a more cohesive and emotionally resonant narrative, making the story of veteran superheroes more compelling and true to life.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script's creative craft, leverage the strong voice of sharp, sarcastic dialogue to deepen character arcs and thematic exploration in scenes beyond the highlighted best scene. Focus on integrating more moments of vulnerability and humor to balance the gritty realism with fantastical elements, ensuring emotional resonance is consistent and avoiding over-reliance on banter that might overshadow deeper conflicts, as seen in the effective use in Scene 4.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay effectively combines action, humor, and emotional depth, but to enhance its craft, focus on deepening character motivations and internal conflicts, improving pacing to sustain tension in key scenes, and refining dialogue for greater authenticity and resonance. By incorporating suggested exercises and resources, such as writing monologues and studying exemplary screenplays, the writer can create more compelling narratives that better engage audiences on an emotional level.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world building effectively blends real-world grit with fantastical superhero elements, creating a compelling contrast that drives character development and plot. To enhance this, focus on tightening the integration of cultural and societal elements to avoid overwhelming the narrative, ensuring that motifs like the white butterfly or Aztec flute serve clear thematic purposes rather than feeling coincidental, which could deepen emotional resonance and make the story more cohesive for audiences.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The scene pattern analysis highlights strengths in suspenseful sequences that drive plot progression, but identifies opportunities to balance humorous elements with higher stakes to avoid diluting tension. Additionally, ensuring that inspirational scenes include more explicit character development will deepen emotional arcs and prevent them from feeling underdeveloped, ultimately enhancing the script's overall craft and pacing for a more cohesive narrative.
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Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (5)
  • Theme Integration: 8.2 → 8.5 +0.3
  • Emotional Impact: 8.0 → 8.3 +0.3
  • Character Complexity: 7.7 → 8.0 +0.3
  • Conflict: 7.8 → 8.1 +0.3
  • Visual Imagery: 8.4 → 8.7 +0.3
Areas to Review (0)

No regressions detected