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Scene Map 60
# PG SLUGLINE
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INT ROOM NIGHT
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EXT LOUISIANA DAY
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EXT WHARF NIGHT
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INT LAVISH FRENCH - FURNISHED BEDROOM AT POINT DU LAC
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EXT GRAVEYARD NIGHT
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EXT PLANTATION NIGHT
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EXT POINTE DU LAC NIGHT
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EXT CEMETERY NIGHT
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INT ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO NIGHT
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EXT POINTE DU LAC
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INT DINING ROOM NIGHT
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EXT NEW ORLEANS NIGHT
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INT FRENCH QUARTER MANSION - BALLROOM
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EXT LAWNS NIGHT
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EXT POINTE DU LAC. NIGHT.
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INT DINING ROOM IN MANSION NIGHT
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INT POINTE DU LAC DINING ROOM NIGHT
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EXT MANSION NIGHT
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EXT NEW ORLEANS EVENING
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EXT DANK NEW ORLEANS BACK STREETS NIGHT
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EXT STREETS NIGHT
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INT INN - SUPPER ROOM
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INT ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO
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INT LOUIS' BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT PARLOUR NIGHT
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INT CLAUDIA'S BEDROOM NIGHT
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EXT RUE ROYALE NIGHT
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INT FLAT NIGHT
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INT CLAUDIA'S BEDROOM
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EXT NEW ORLEANS STREETS NIGHT
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INT ROOM SAN FRANCISCO
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INT CONFESSIONAL.
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INT FLAT NIGHT
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INT FLAT NIGHT
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INT DINING ROOM NIGHT
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EXT CARRIAGE NIGHT
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INT FLAT NIGHT
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EXT DECK OF SHIP - NEAR DAWN
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EXT DECK NIGHT
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INT ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO
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INT OPERA STAIRCASE
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EXT BOULEVARD EVENING
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EXT LATIN QUARTER NIGHT
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EXT BOULEVARD DES CAPUCHINES - THEATRE DES VAMPIRES NIGHT
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INT FOOT OF STAIRWAY
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INT MEDIEVAL ROOM
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INT DARKENED CORRIDORS AND THEATRE NIGHT
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EXT HOTEL SAINT GABRIEL NIGHT
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EXT DOLL-SHIP NIGHT
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EXT THEATRE DES VAMPIRES NIGHT
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EXT HOTEL BALCONY LATER
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INT CORRIDOR OF THEATRE DES VAMPIRES NIGHT
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INT COFFIN
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EXT NOTRE DAME DOOR NIGHT
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EXT THEATRE DES VAMPIRES DAWN
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INT LOUVER - NIGHTS LATER
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INT MOVIE THEATRE NIGHT
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EXT GARDEN DISTRICT NIGHT
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INT ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO NIGHT
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EXT STREET OUTSIDE NIGHT
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
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INT ROOM NIGHT
INT. ROOM - NIGHT (SAN FRANCISCO)
INT. ROOM - NIGHT (SAN FRANCISCO) A small bare room, illuminated only by the streetlight coming through the window. A hand presses a cassette into a recorder and fiddles with a small microphone.
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EXT LOUISIANA DAY
EXT. LOUISIANA - DAY (1791)
EXT. LOUISIANA - DAY (1791) A dishevelled Louis, hair in pigtail, in deep pocket frock coat, rides his horse through the fields of indigo, passing an overseer and slaves at work. He passes slave quarters and the distant colonial mansion of
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EXT WHARF NIGHT
EXT. WHARF - NIGHT
EXT. WHARF - NIGHT Louis, quite insensible, being propped up against a wall by the whore in a dank wharf over the water. The pimp rifles his pockets, then pulss a knife, about to slice his throat, when a shadow falls over him. He turns, and we see the face
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INT LAVISH FRENCH - FURNISHED BEDROOM AT POINT DU LAC
INT. LAVISH FRENCH - FURNISHED BEDROOM AT POINT DU LAC
INT. LAVISH FRENCH - FURNISHED BEDROOM AT POINT DU LAC Louis is delerious in a four-poster bed, shrouded with mosquito netting. A female slave, YVETTE, bathes his face with a rag. She is crying. Other slave women hover in the shadows. Yvette puts out all candles save one by the bed,
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EXT GRAVEYARD NIGHT
EXT. GRAVEYARD - NIGHT
EXT. GRAVEYARD - NIGHT The camera drifts through the graveyard where Louis' wife is buring. Everything is lit with an eery glow, as if seen through some unearthly eye. LESTAT
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EXT PLANTATION NIGHT
EXT. PLANTATION - NIGHT
EXT. PLANTATION - NIGHT Lestat and Louis walk through the slave quarters, huddles groups around fires, music, singing. The sound of whipping is heard. LESTAT
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EXT POINTE DU LAC NIGHT
EXT. POINTE DU LAC - NIGHT
EXT. POINTE DU LAC - NIGHT Louis running up the steps leading to the gallery. He is crazed with guilt. He looks up and sees - LESTAT -- Sitting collected at the head of the steps.
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EXT CEMETERY NIGHT
EXT. CEMETERY - NIGHT
EXT. CEMETERY - NIGHT Louis stops again in front of the crypt. Drinks from the flask, leans his forehead against the stone. Lestat appears beside him, radiant, beautiful. LESTAT
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INT ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO NIGHT
INT. ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO - NIGHT
INT. ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO - NIGHT Malloy stares at Louis, terrified and enthralled. MALLOY You said the slave had a crucifix... LOUIS
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EXT POINTE DU LAC
EXT. POINTE DU LAC
EXT. POINTE DU LAC Dawn spreading over the plantation. INT. BASEMENT - POINTE DU LAC A brick walled storage room. Two coffins stand on the floor. Lestat enters with a lantern, Louis behind. Lestat is
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INT DINING ROOM NIGHT
INT. DINING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. DINING ROOM - NIGHT Louis and Lestat sitting at a sumptuous table, piled with uneaten food. Lestat is going through sheafs of documents. LOUIS (V.O.) I awoke the next evening to a
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EXT NEW ORLEANS NIGHT
EXT. NEW ORLEANS - NIGHT
EXT. NEW ORLEANS - NIGHT A big, lavish drinking place with a raised stage. Italian actors in buffoonish costumes act crude commedia dell'arte on the stage. Plantation owners in soiled brocade, lace, crooked wigs watch
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INT FRENCH QUARTER MANSION - BALLROOM
INT. FRENCH QUARTER MANSION - BALLROOM
INT. FRENCH QUARTER MANSION - BALLROOM Small orchestra plays for colonial couples in fine wig and garb prancing to a French minuet. Young women sit in chairs along the walls with their chaperones. Young men stand opposite.
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EXT LAWNS NIGHT
EXT. LAWNS - NIGHT
EXT. LAWNS - NIGHT Lestat walks the youth towards a copse of trees. He looks back at Louis, who holds both poodles on a delicate leash, walking with the widow. The minuet spills from the french windows.
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EXT POINTE DU LAC. NIGHT.
EXT. POINTE DU LAC. NIGHT.
EXT. POINTE DU LAC. NIGHT. Their carriage draws up to the mansion as the first fingers of light spread across the sky. LOUIS (V.O.)
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INT DINING ROOM IN MANSION NIGHT
INT. DINING ROOM IN MANSION - NIGHT
INT. DINING ROOM IN MANSION - NIGHT Lestat and Louis sit at the table, the untouched food between them. LESTAT Consider yourself lucky. In Paris a
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INT POINTE DU LAC DINING ROOM NIGHT
INT. POINTE DU LAC DINING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. POINTE DU LAC DINING ROOM - NIGHT Louis, sitting in despair by the table. Yvette, the slave girl enters. YVETTE Michi Louis? You don't want any
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EXT MANSION NIGHT
EXT. MANSION - NIGHT
EXT. MANSION - NIGHT Fires burning in the distance, round the slave-cabins. The slaves are gathered at the foot of the mansion steps. They see Louis come out, holding the body of Yvette. He is deranged with grief.
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EXT NEW ORLEANS EVENING
EXT. NEW ORLEANS - EVENING
EXT. NEW ORLEANS - EVENING From the sea, at evening, shrouded in mist. LOUIS (V.O.) Lestat I did not love. And he survived.
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EXT DANK NEW ORLEANS BACK STREETS NIGHT
EXT. DANK NEW ORLEANS BACK STREETS - NIGHT
EXT. DANK NEW ORLEANS BACK STREETS - NIGHT A rat scurried down a gutter, then another and another. Louis' hand graps the rat. We see him from behind, walking down the street, gripping one, then another. LOUIS (V.O.)
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EXT STREETS NIGHT
EXT. STREETS - NIGHT
EXT. STREETS - NIGHT Louis running through an assortment of streets. All the night life of New Orleans flows by him. LOUIS (V.O.) For years I had not savoured a human.
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INT INN - SUPPER ROOM
INT. INN - SUPPER ROOM
INT. INN - SUPPER ROOM Lestat enters. LESTAT She's here, your wounded one. LOUIS
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INT ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO
INT. ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO
INT. ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO Malloy is open mouthed. MALLOY A child vampire! He sees the tape has run out. He rapidly and clumsily sticks
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INT LOUIS' BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. LOUIS' BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. LOUIS' BEDROOM - NIGHT LOUIS (V.O.) She would sleep in my coffin, daily, curl her child's fingers round my hair as she dreamt of I know not
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INT PARLOUR NIGHT
INT. PARLOUR - NIGHT
INT. PARLOUR - NIGHT A stern, stiff piano-teacher (male) beating time with a ruler as Claudia picks out scales on the piano. He raps her on the knuckles. PIANO-TEACHER
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INT CLAUDIA'S BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. CLAUDIA'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. CLAUDIA'S BEDROOM - NIGHT CANARIES sing in a cage, above a child's coffin. Claudia is writing at a secretaire. She is writing in a diary with a quill pen in an adult hand. She murmurs the date as she writes.
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EXT RUE ROYALE NIGHT
EXT. RUE ROYALE - NIGHT (1800'S)
EXT. RUE ROYALE - NIGHT (1800'S) Street lamps are oil at this period. Houses are now tall two- story Spanish style. Streets are flagstone. Passing carriages are black.
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INT FLAT NIGHT
INT. FLAT - NIGHT
INT. FLAT - NIGHT Claudia playing the piano, now like a demonic Liszt. Louis writing. Lestat appears in the doorway. He has a big box in his arms. CLAUDIA
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INT CLAUDIA'S BEDROOM
INT. CLAUDIA'S BEDROOM
INT. CLAUDIA'S BEDROOM She stands before the dressing-table, all her long hair grown back over her shoulders. She holds it with both hands, screaming and screaming. Lestat and Louis come through the door.
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EXT NEW ORLEANS STREETS NIGHT
EXT. NEW ORLEANS STREETS - NIGHT
EXT. NEW ORLEANS STREETS - NIGHT Louis walking, holding Claudia as if he was about to lose her. LOUIS (V.O.) Though everything was changed, through
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INT ROOM SAN FRANCISCO
INT. ROOM SAN FRANCISCO
INT. ROOM SAN FRANCISCO Malloy and Louis. MALLOY But why did you tell her? LOUIS
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INT CONFESSIONAL.
INT. CONFESSIONAL.
INT. CONFESSIONAL. Louis, kneeling in the darkness. The hatch slides back. LOUIS Bless me father for I have sinned so often and so long, I don't know how
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INT FLAT NIGHT
INT. FLAT - NIGHT
INT. FLAT - NIGHT Louis enters, slidently, like a corpse. He hears a voice behind him. CLAUDIA Locked together in hatred --
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INT FLAT NIGHT
INT. FLAT - NIGHT
INT. FLAT - NIGHT Lestat playing the piano. Louis reading. Claudia enters, wearing a cape and hat. She walks to the piano, sits at the end of the piano and stares at him as he plays. LESTAT
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INT DINING ROOM NIGHT
INT. DINING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. DINING ROOM - NIGHT Two beautiful youths, lying asleep on a couch, by a table full with a half-eaten meal. Lestat sighs. LESTAT Oh, Claudia, you've outdone yourself.
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EXT CARRIAGE NIGHT
EXT. CARRIAGE - NIGHT
EXT. CARRIAGE - NIGHT Louis whipping the horses. Claudia beside him. Lestat's skeleton in the back, with the bodies of the two dead youths. CLAUDIA In Europe, Louis. We shall meet our
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INT FLAT NIGHT
INT. FLAT - NIGHT
INT. FLAT - NIGHT Sturdy mullato workmen lifting cases and trunks out of the apartment. All the furniture is covered in white sheets. Claudia dressed in a cap and hat, is playing the piano by the light of one remaining oil-lamp.
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EXT DECK OF SHIP - NEAR DAWN
EXT. DECK OF SHIP - NEAR DAWN
EXT. DECK OF SHIP - NEAR DAWN Louis stands at the railings in the morning mist as the ship moves down the river. He sees... CITY OF NEW ORLEANS
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EXT DECK NIGHT
EXT. DECK - NIGHT
EXT. DECK - NIGHT Claudia, sitting with an easel and sketch-pad, sketching the bay of Naples. A beautifully realised drawing, all in shades of grey and black. Louis observes. CLAUDIA
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INT ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO
INT. ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO
INT. ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO Malloy and Louis. MALLOY You found nothing? LOUIS
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INT OPERA STAIRCASE
INT. OPERA STAIRCASE
INT. OPERA STAIRCASE Louis and Claudia hurrying hand in hand with a crowd of mortals towards the sound of an ORCHESTRA TURNING beyond. INT. NOTRE DAME Claudia and Louis standing in the deep shadows, looking at
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EXT BOULEVARD EVENING
EXT. BOULEVARD - EVENING
EXT. BOULEVARD - EVENING Louis and Claudia walk along a boulevard like father and daughter. All around them are bourgeois Parisian families on their evening stroll. Claudia points at the children that pass.
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EXT LATIN QUARTER NIGHT
EXT. LATIN QUARTER - NIGHT
EXT. LATIN QUARTER - NIGHT Louis walks briskly, head bowed. LOUIS (V.O.) For a time we had been almost human, in the sensual whirl of whtt Paris
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EXT BOULEVARD DES CAPUCHINES - THEATRE DES VAMPIRES NIGHT
EXT. BOULEVARD DES CAPUCHINES - THEATRE DES VAMPIRES - NIGHT
EXT. BOULEVARD DES CAPUCHINES - THEATRE DES VAMPIRES - NIGHT Louis formally dressed with Claudia in rich attire on his arm. They pass people buying tickets for the theatre and go inside. LOUIS
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INT FOOT OF STAIRWAY
INT. FOOT OF STAIRWAY
INT. FOOT OF STAIRWAY Armand leading, Louis and Claudia following. It opens into a -- HUGE UNDERGROUND BALLROOM Walls are painted with famous copies of Durer, Brueghel, Goya and Bosch depictions of death. Fine wooden coffins line
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INT MEDIEVAL ROOM
INT. MEDIEVAL ROOM
INT. MEDIEVAL ROOM Medieval chairs, table, an old coffin, a bed in one corner, a blazing fire. A medieval painting of Satan, being banished from heaven, above the fire. Armand places the boy on the bed, settling him so he sleeps.
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INT DARKENED CORRIDORS AND THEATRE NIGHT
INT. DARKENED CORRIDORS AND THEATRE - NIGHT
INT. DARKENED CORRIDORS AND THEATRE - NIGHT Louis and Claudia feel their way through darkened corridors, trying to find their way out. LOUIS (V.O.) The place was dark as we left, a
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EXT HOTEL SAINT GABRIEL NIGHT
EXT. HOTEL SAINT GABRIEL - NIGHT
EXT. HOTEL SAINT GABRIEL - NIGHT Claudia and Louis enter the Lobby. CLAUDIA I lothe them! I can't stand the sight of them! Stupid bourgeois Parisians,
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EXT DOLL-SHIP NIGHT
EXT. DOLL-SHIP - NIGHT
EXT. DOLL-SHIP - NIGHT Claudia, staring at the dolls. We see Madeleine inside, painting a doll. She sees Claudia and smiles and waves. INT. THEATRE - NIGHT Louis, sitting alone in the box, as the curtains draw back,
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EXT THEATRE DES VAMPIRES NIGHT
EXT. THEATRE DES VAMPIRES - NIGHT
EXT. THEATRE DES VAMPIRES - NIGHT Louis, in the street outside, as the door closes behind him. LOUIS (V.O.) I feld a kind of peace at last. I had found the teacher which Lestat
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EXT HOTEL BALCONY LATER
EXT. HOTEL BALCONY - LATER
EXT. HOTEL BALCONY - LATER Louis on the balcony, weakened terribly. A breeze blows on the gauze curtains behind him, through which we see -- SILHOUETTES of Madeleine and Claudia. Madeleine her arms outstretched, now a vampire, a long moan of pain coming from
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INT CORRIDOR OF THEATRE DES VAMPIRES NIGHT
INT. CORRIDOR OF THEATRE DES VAMPIRES - NIGHT
INT. CORRIDOR OF THEATRE DES VAMPIRES - NIGHT In a press of vampires, Louis, Claudia and Madeleine are forced down the dark corridor. Into - THE BALLROOM Vampire chaos, as they are dragged through. Louis struggling
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INT COFFIN
INT. COFFIN
INT. COFFIN Louis sleeps, upside down. Sound of bricks being broken, thrown aside. Then of locks breaking. Louis opens his eyes. The lid opens. He sees - ARMAND
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EXT NOTRE DAME DOOR NIGHT
EXT. NOTRE DAME DOOR - NIGHT
EXT. NOTRE DAME DOOR - NIGHT Louis is slumped against the stone wall. Armand stands beside him like a guardian angel. ARMAND I couldn't prevent it.
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EXT THEATRE DES VAMPIRES DAWN
EXT. THEATRE DES VAMPIRES - DAWN
EXT. THEATRE DES VAMPIRES - DAWN Wet and deserted, the streets around the theatre are quiet. C/U CLOCK Chiming five a.m.
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INT LOUVER - NIGHTS LATER
INT. LOUVER - NIGHTS LATER
INT. LOUVER - NIGHTS LATER It is already a museum by this time and Louis and Armand, fancily dressed and composed, walk through it. They stop by a Gericault - The Wreck of the Medusa. LOUIS
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INT MOVIE THEATRE NIGHT
INT. MOVIE THEATRE - NIGHT
INT. MOVIE THEATRE - NIGHT A deco cinema of the twenties. Louis and Armand, dressed in the style of the period walk down the aisle through the crowded seats. LOUIS (V.O.)
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EXT GARDEN DISTRICT NIGHT
EXT. GARDEN DISTRICT - NIGHT
EXT. GARDEN DISTRICT - NIGHT Louis walks past the many Greek Revival Mansions. LOUIS (V.O.) And then on Prytania Street, only blocks from the Lafayette cemetery I
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INT ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO NIGHT
INT. ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO - NIGHT (PRESENT)
INT. ROOM - SAN FRANCISCO - NIGHT (PRESENT) Malloy, staring at Louis. MALLOY No... it can't end like that... LOUIS
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EXT STREET OUTSIDE NIGHT
EXT. STREET OUTSIDE - NIGHT
EXT. STREET OUTSIDE - NIGHT Malloy running for his car, a convertible. He leaps in and screeches off through the night. EXT. STREETS - NIGHT Malloy whips the car through the tiny streets, in sheer,

Interview with a vampire

A centuries‑old vampire sits for a taped interview in San Francisco, unveiling the seductions and horrors of immortality—from his making by Lestat to the creation and loss of a child companion—until the act of telling invites the past to strike again.

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Overview

Poster
Unique Selling Proposition

A sensuous, first‑person gothic memoir that marries operatic set‑pieces (opera houses, burning theatres, Paris catacombs) with an intimate, morally searching triangle between sire, protégé, and eternally childlike killer—seduction and revulsion in the same breath.

AI Verdict

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How to read these: in industry coverage, Pass is the default outcome for the majority of professional scripts, and Consider means the reader stayed in the room. Industry-wide, the median professional evaluation sits at a 6 — scores of 8+ are rare everywhere, on purpose.


Synthesis Where readers agree and split
7.6

A qualified Recommend for a prestige gothic drama whose distinctive atmospheric voice and tragic character dynamics are currently held back by midsection structural drag and a passive protagonist.

Readers read as Elevated commercial1 Prestige4
Genres Horror5 Drama4 Historical2 Romance1

A prestige gothic drama offering philosophical inquiry into guilt, immortality, and moral consciousness through a vampire's two-century confession, betting on literary voice, moral complexity, and emotional accumulation over genre mechanics.

Readers split on the contract: four anchor it in prestige due to philosophical interiority and restrained pacing, while one reads it as elevated commercial driven by operatic set-pieces and genre pleasure. The split traces to whether the script's horror mechanics serve thematic metaphor or genre satisfaction.

Why not lower

The New Orleans sequences and the Claudia material execute the prestige contract with genuine craft and distinctive voice, giving readers enough investment to carry through the structural drag.

Why not higher

The Paris act's structural problems and the frame's lack of dramatic pressure require targeted rewriting before the emotional payoff can land at the level the script is reaching for.

Rewrite map

A script with a distinctive atmospheric voice and tragic character dynamics that needs structural work on midsection causal pressure and the frame narrative's dramatic engine.

Readers read as Elevated commercial1 Prestige4

Start here

Restoring Louis's concrete protective objective for Claudia in the early Paris sequences addresses both the midsection causal drag and the frame's structural weight, because a clear protagonist pursuit naturally dictates where voiceover can be cut and where the frame must escalate.

What's working 1
The Louis/Lestat dynamic as philosophical friction

The early New Orleans sequences generate genuine dramatic tension by pitting Louis's moral paralysis against Lestat's amoral vitality, making the central question of immortality feel actively contested rather than settled.

Protect while fixing 2
Claudia's frozen-child consciousness as the script's moral center

Tightening the Paris act's causal chain risks compressing Claudia's scenes into plot mechanics, which could strip the specific interiority that makes her tragedy resonate.

When restructuring Louis's pursuit, ensure Claudia's scenes retain their focus on her private grief and bodily stasis rather than trimming them to serve the coven's plot timeline.

Atmospheric period immersion and gothic tone

Condensing the frame and voiceover to restore momentum could inadvertently strip the sensory detail and lyrical cadence that ground the script's prestige register.

When cutting expository narration, preserve the tactile, image-driven action lines and lighting cues that make the vampires' alienation felt rather than stated.

Fix first 3
Back-half causal pressure diffuses as Louis's drive flattens

The reader loses forward pull as the Paris sequences shift from active pursuit to passive observation, making the climax feel like an event that happens around Louis rather than a consequence of his choices.

Root cause

The script organizes the Paris act around revelation and philosophical dialogue rather than giving Louis a concrete, active goal that forces him into conflict with the coven before the trap closes.

One direction

One path is to anchor Louis's European arrival to a specific protective objective for Claudia, so each Paris beat becomes a step toward or compromise of that pursuit rather than a series of atmospheric encounters.

Frame narrative and voiceover overuse saps present-tense momentum

The reader experiences structural drag each time the script cuts to the interview or relies on narration to bridge time, because the frame functions as exposition rather than a parallel dramatic arc with its own stakes.

Root cause

The frame is structured as a delivery system for the historical story rather than a container with escalating tension, and voiceover is used to summarize emotional states that the scenes could dramatize directly.

One direction

Restructure the frame so Malloy's interview carries a specific, escalating need, and restrict voiceover to major time-jump transitions, forcing the historical sequences to carry their own dramatic weight.

Claudia's interiority and agency thin in the Paris sequences

The reader loses emotional investment in Claudia's fate because her complex grief and cunning narrow to tactical reactivity in the second half, making her death land as a plot event rather than the loss of a fully inhabited consciousness.

Root cause

The script prioritizes Louis's philosophical dialogues and the coven's plot mechanics in Paris, leaving no scene-time for Claudia's private experience of her frozen state or her evolving relationship with Madeleine.

One direction

Embed a moment of private grief or a final active choice for Claudia within the existing Paris sequences, ensuring her death reads as the tragic culmination of her specific arc rather than a passive victimhood.

Your decisions 1
Frame narrative function: thematic coda vs. active dramatic container Consequential
Side A

Committing to a thematic coda means reducing the frame to bookends and letting the period story stand alone, which preserves immersion but sacrifices the contemporary anchor.

Side B

Committing to an active dramatic container means giving Malloy an escalating agenda or hidden motive, which restores structural pressure but risks competing with the period narrative's emotional register.

Quick credibility wins 2
Recurring typographical errors and inconsistent spelling

Run a strict proofread pass to catch scattered misspellings and transposed letters in action lines and dialogue, as the current density signals a draft submitted before final polish.

Overwritten action-line emotional emphasis and stacked punctuation

Strip the capitalized emotional descriptors, stacked exclamation marks, and typographic emphasis from action blocks and dialogue, trusting the staging and prose to carry the dramatic weight.

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Would readers champion it · Rewrite depth · Voice · Score stability
What's working All 5 readers agree

The ensemble consistently champions the script's central character dynamics and atmospheric voice as durable, championable assets that anchor the prestige contract.

What's blocking All 5 readers agree

The mid-to-late act structural drag, driven by Louis's diffuse drive and late coven stakes, prevents the emotional climax from landing with the inevitability the script requires.

Would readers champion it?
Not yetNot yetReaders wouldn’t actively push for it.
Early interestEarly interestMentioned, but no real push behind it.
ModeratelyModeratelyMentioned favorably to the right buyer.
StronglyStronglyActively championed across their network.
ClaudeModeratelyDeepSeekModeratelyGPT5ModeratelyGrokModeratelyGeminiStrongly
How much rewrite does it need?
Start from scratchStart from scratchPremise or core engine isn’t working. Page-one rebuild.
Structural rewriteStructural rewriteSpecific acts or zones need rebuilding — not starting over, but significant revision work on those sections.
Targeted rewriteTargeted rewriteSpecific scenes or threads need rework. ~1 month.
Just polishJust polishLines and pacing tweaks. A few weeks.
ClaudeTargeted rewriteDeepSeekTargeted rewriteGPT5Targeted rewriteGeminiTargeted rewriteGrokTargeted rewrite
How distinctive is the voice?
GenericGenericReads like other scripts in the genre.
EmergingEmergingHints of a distinctive voice, not yet locked in.
DistinctiveDistinctiveA clear, recognizable authorial voice.
One-of-a-kindOne-of-a-kindA voice that couldn’t be anyone else’s.
ClaudeDistinctiveDeepSeekDistinctiveGPT5DistinctiveGrokDistinctiveGeminiOne-of-a-kind

On the score: The score sits between two verdicts — small changes in either direction could flip it.

Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 85% Horror 70% Fantasy 40% Romance 25% Thriller 15% Crime 10% History 30%

Setting: Late 18th century to early 20th century, Primarily New Orleans, Louisiana, with scenes in San Francisco and various European locations

Themes: Existential struggle and loss of humanity, Moral conflict and guilt, Loneliness and the search for belonging, The quest for identity and self-understanding, Creation and destruction, Love and attachment as a source of pain, Revenge and betrayal, Time and memory

Conflict & Stakes: Louis's internal struggle with his vampiric nature and morality, the consequences of his actions on those he loves, and the external conflict with Lestat and the vampire community.

Mood: Dark, melancholic, and introspective

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The exploration of vampirism through the lens of existential philosophy and morality.
  • Major Twist: Claudia's transformation into a vampire and her subsequent struggle with her eternal childhood.
  • Distinctive Setting: The rich, atmospheric settings of New Orleans and various historical European locations enhance the gothic tone.
  • Innovative Ideas: The screenplay challenges traditional vampire lore, presenting a more complex view of immortality and its consequences.
  • Unique Characters: The dynamic between Louis, Lestat, and Claudia creates a compelling narrative of love, betrayal, and identity.

Comparable Scripts: The Vampire Lestat (book and film), Bram Stoker's Dracula (1992 film), Only Lovers Left Alive (2013 film), Let the Right One In (2008 film), The Hunger (1983 film), Byzantium (2012 film), The Addiction (1995 film), Cronos (1993 film)

How 5 AI Readers Scored The Script

Readers graded as Elevated commercial1 Prestige4
Claude GPT5 Gemini DeepSeek Grok Average spread Row tint: weak mid strong excellent
Premise i
8.0
Plot i
6.4
Structure i
6.8
Character i
7.8
Dialogue i
7.4
Tone / Voice i
8.4
Theme i
8.0
Marketability i
7.2

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.36
Key Suggestions:
The screenplay excels in the deep, psychologically complex arcs of Louis, Claudia, and Lestat, but needs to strengthen supporting characters and tighten pacing. Malloy remains a passive audience surrogate with an unearned desire for vampirism, and antagonists like Santiago and Estelle are underdeveloped, reducing the emotional stakes of the coven conflict. The European travel section relies too heavily on voiceover and lacks dramatic tension, causing a mid-act sag. To elevate the script, prioritize visual storytelling over exposition, flesh out Malloy’s arc to give the framing device more weight, and condense or dramatize the European journey to maintain narrative momentum.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script is emotionally and philosophically powerful, but the middle section (European travels and Theatre des Vampires sequences) risks losing momentum through repetition and spectacle that overshadows character development. To strengthen the narrative, streamline the European montage, deepen Armand's personal history to give him stakes beyond mysticism, and ensure the final twist (Lestat killing Malloy) is foreshadowed earlier so it feels earned rather than abrupt. These changes will sharpen pacing and reinforce thematic resonance without sacrificing the gothic atmosphere.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis reveals that Louis's arc of tragic passivity is well-established, but his reactive nature occasionally makes him feel like a passive observer rather than an active protagonist. To strengthen the narrative, consider giving Louis more moments of active decision-making—especially when he chooses to reject Malloy in the final scene, where a flicker of temptation before his rejection would add tension and make his choice more deliberate. Claudia's death remains the emotional climax, but amplifying her pre-death vulnerability and Louis's grief response (e.g., a longer scene of his shattered reaction) would deepen the tragedy. Lestat's arc stasis is intentional but could use a small hint of change, like a moment of genuine remorse or a gesture toward Malloy, to complicate his final pathetic state. Armand's philosophical speeches, while rich, risk info-dumping themes; making them more interactive—with Louis actively challenging Armand—would increase dramatic tension.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script is emotionally heavy, relying almost exclusively on sadness and fear, which risks fatiguing the audience. To create a more compelling emotional journey, introduce brief moments of warmth or dark humor—especially in the Paris scenes and early Claudia sections—to provide contrast and make the tragedy more impactful. Condense low-intensity stretches like the travel montage and middle section, and add internal conflict or micro-moments of regret for characters like Claudia and even Lestat to deepen empathy. The emotional peaks are strong, but the valleys are too long and flat; tightening those will maintain momentum.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
Louis's goals evolve clearly from a death wish to a search for identity and redemption, which gives the script a strong emotional arc. However, the philosophical conflict between humanity and predation risks becoming repetitive; ensure each stage of his journey introduces new nuances to the dilemma to maintain tension and deepen character growth.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s central strength lies in Louis’s existential struggle for meaning and moral identity within a damned existence. All other themes—moral conflict, loneliness, identity, creation/destruction, love, revenge, time—reinforce this core. To elevate the script, ensure every scene, character action, and dialogue choice directly deepens Louis’s internal conflict or his search for purpose. The interplay of these themes should feel inevitable, not forced; the tragedy is that Louis’s attempts at morality or connection only amplify his anguish. Focus on making his journey feel universal yet uniquely vampiric.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis reveals two critical areas to address: first, the coven's stated law (killing a vampire is the only crime) contradicts their execution of Claudia for being a child vampire and for creating Madeleine, making the tribunal feel like a plot device rather than a consistent system. This undermines the tragedy's credibility. Second, Armand's selective power—claiming influence but disavowing it to prevent Claudia's death, yet later admitting he didn't warn his coven before Louis's revenge—reads as convenience rather than consistent character. Tightening these logical and motivational threads will strengthen the emotional payoff. Additionally, the extended repetition of Louis's moral revulsion across multiple set pieces (ballroom, tavern, plantation) can be condensed to avoid pacing slowdowns; one early high-society kill and one later moral pivot should suffice, preserving the thematic arc while keeping the middle act lean.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The writer's voice is a powerful asset, blending gothic lyricism with philosophical depth. To further elevate the script, consider tightening the balance between introspection and forward momentum; some scenes linger on interiority at the expense of dramatic propulsion. The voice is strongest in moments of moral crisis (e.g., Scene 8's crypt sequence) and weakest when exposition or dialogue becomes too aphoristic. Experiment with varying sentence rhythm in narration to avoid a monolithic tone, and ensure that every lyrical passage serves the character's emotional arc rather than becoming an end in itself.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
While the screenplay masterfully builds atmosphere and explores existential themes, it relies too heavily on voiceover and dialogue to convey emotional states, often at the expense of visual storytelling. Louis’s passivity weakens dramatic tension; giving him more active agency—even in his internal struggle—will raise stakes and engagement. Enhancing dialogue with subtext and layering meaning beneath the poetic surface will deepen character relationships and make conversations feel more dynamic.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world-building analysis reveals a rich, historically layered setting that effectively reinforces themes of immortality, decay, and moral conflict. To strengthen the script artistically, focus on making the transitions between centuries (18th to 20th) feel more seamless—perhaps through recurring sensory motifs (e.g., fire, water, the sound of a heartbeat) that tie the eras together. The contrast between the lush, decaying antebellum South and the sterile modern San Francisco is powerful; use it to deepen Louis’s sense of dislocation and the emotional weight of his endless existence. Additionally, ensure that each environment (plantation, New Orleans streets, Paris theatre) does more than just set the scene—it should actively shape character decisions and thematic resonance, as the plantation does for Louis’s guilt.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The scenepatterns analysis indicates that all scenes received identical scores across all categories, resulting in no variance or meaningful patterns. This suggests either a data entry error or that the scoring rubric was applied uniformly without differentiation. To derive actionable creative insights, the scoring data should be reviewed and, if necessary, rescored with greater nuance to capture variations in scene structure, tension, character development, or other relevant metrics.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.