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Scene Map 60
# PG SLUGLINE
1 2
INT MUD HUT NIGHT
2 3
EXT AIRPORT - DEPARTURE GATE DAY
3 5
INT AIRPORT - DEPARTURE GATE CONTINUOUS
4 7
EXT JUBA AIRPORT DAY
5 9
EXT JUBA CITY CENTRE DAY
6 10
EXT SIMA VILLAGE - MARKETPLACE DAY
7 14
EXT HOTEL - COURTYARD EVENING
8 16
EXT MARKETPLACE - CAFE STALL DAY
9 18
EXT MARKETPLACE CONTINUOUS
10 20
EXT CENTER SQUARE - MARKETPLACE DAY
11 21
EXT FOREST - CLEARING NIGHT
12 23
INT TELEVISION STUDIO EVENING
13 24
INT NEWSROOM CONTINUOUS
14 26
EXT MARKET SQUARE - AL-FASHIR DAY
15 27
EXT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE – DAY
16 31
EXT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - ANIMAL PENS CONTINUOUS
17 32
EXT MUD SHELTER - COURTYARD DAY
18 33
INT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - COMMON AREA DAY
19 35
INT TRUCK EVENING
20 36
EXT CRASH SITE CONTINUOUS
21 37
EXT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE MOMENTS LATER
22 39
INT MUD HOUSE NIGHT
23 40
EXT FARMHOUSE - WELL DAY
24 43
EXT VILLAGE COMPOUND - COURTYARD - NORTHERN SUDAN MORNING
25 44
EXT OUTSKIRTS - ANIMAL PEN - PRE DAWN
26 45
EXT HILLSIDE – DAY
27 48
EXT MARKET SQUARE - AL-FASHIR DAY
28 49
INT MUD HOUSE NIGHT
29 51
INT HAYAT'S ROOM NIGHT
30 53
EXT TREE EVENING
31 55
INT CAPE TOWN, SOUTH AFRICA - OFFICE EVENING
32 57
INT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - KITCHEN EVENING
33 58
EXT FARMHOUSE - COURTYARD EVENING
34 61
EXT FIELDS DAY
35 62
EXT AL-FASHIR (THE SQUARE) – DAY – HAYAT’S WEDDING
36 65
EXT SIDE ALLEY – MOMENTS LATER
37 67
INT MU’AAT’S MUD SHELTER - SAME DAY
38 69
EXT VILLAGE - OUTSKIRTS MORNING
39 71
EXT ROAD DAY
40 72
EXT AL-FASHIR MARKETPLACE - CENTER SQUARE DAY
41 77
INT MUD SHELTER – NIGHT
42 78
INT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE LATER
43 80
INT MUD SHELTER NIGHT
44 81
INT HAYAT’S BEDROOM – NIGHT
45 82
EXT COURTYARD NIGHT
46 83
EXT VILLAGE - EDGE NIGHT
47 86
EXT SOUTH AFRICAN EMBASSY DAY
48 87
EXT EMBASSY GATE MOMENTS LATER
49 88
INT EMBASSY - PHONE BOOTH MOMENTS LATER
50 92
INT FATIEMA’S LIVING ROOM – DAY
51 93
INT NEWSROOM – DAY
52 95
INT FARMHOUSE NIGHT
53 96
EXT ABBAS'S VILLAGE - COURTYARD MORNING
54 98
INT EMBASSY - TEMPORARY RESIDENCE MORNING
55 101
EXT CHECKPOINT - BORDER DAY
56 102
EXT BORDER CONTINUOUS
57 103
EXT BORDER ZONE DAY
58 106
INT AUDITORIUM - CAPE TOWN, SOUTH AFRICA DAY
59 108
INT COMMUNITY CENTER LATER
60 109
EXT CAPE TOWN CEMETERY EVENING
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 2
INT MUD HUT NIGHT
INT. MUD HUT - NIGHT
INT. MUD HUT - NIGHT Moonlight cuts through the cracked roof, streaking the dirt floor. TWO BLOODIED HANDS rise, trembling, clutching a worn NOTEBOOK. HAYAT’s face appears streaked with mud and tears.
2 3
EXT AIRPORT - DEPARTURE GATE DAY
EXT. AIRPORT - DEPARTURE GATE - DAY
EXT. AIRPORT - DEPARTURE GATE - DAY A modest crowd gathers outside Departures. MU'AAT hugs his mom FATIEMA (50s) goodbye. Her grip lingers. FATIEMA (in Cape Malay Afrikaans)
3 5
INT AIRPORT - DEPARTURE GATE CONTINUOUS
INT. AIRPORT - DEPARTURE GATE - CONTINUOUS
INT. AIRPORT - DEPARTURE GATE - CONTINUOUS KHANYA TEKANI (20s) dashes toward them, dragging a brand-new suitcase. Behind him, his MOM and DAD follow, visibly anxious. KHANYA'S DAD
4 7
EXT JUBA AIRPORT DAY
EXT. JUBA AIRPORT - DAY
EXT. JUBA AIRPORT - DAY The plane rolls to a stop on the tarmac. CUT TO: Script Registration No: WGSA00871_3/19/2024_00895
5 9
EXT JUBA CITY CENTRE DAY
EXT. JUBA CITY CENTRE - DAY (FEW MOMENTS LATER)
EXT. JUBA CITY CENTRE - DAY (FEW MOMENTS LATER) Traffic crawls at a CHECKPOINT with concrete barriers and armed SOLDIERS. Felix grips the wheel. FELIX (muttering)
6 10
EXT SIMA VILLAGE - MARKETPLACE DAY
EXT. SIMA VILLAGE - MARKETPLACE - DAY (MIDDAY)
EXT. SIMA VILLAGE - MARKETPLACE - DAY (MIDDAY) Red earth and scattered acacias stretch toward distant mountains. The road shifts from asphalt to dirt. KHANYA tweaks his camera settings. Script Registration No: WGSA00871_3/19/2024_00895
7 14
EXT HOTEL - COURTYARD EVENING
EXT. HOTEL - COURTYARD - EVENING (SUNSET)
EXT. HOTEL - COURTYARD - EVENING (SUNSET) Two LOCAL MEN at a table speak urgently. MAN 1 (in Juba Arabic) Militants dahru El Jebel, kulu
8 16
EXT MARKETPLACE - CAFE STALL DAY
EXT. MARKETPLACE - CAFE STALL - DAY
EXT. MARKETPLACE - CAFE STALL - DAY MU'AAT and KHANYA sit under a faded awning. MU'AAT reviews camera photos, while KHANYA scans the crowd. FELIX approaches. FELIX
9 18
EXT MARKETPLACE CONTINUOUS
EXT. MARKETPLACE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. MARKETPLACE - CONTINUOUS KHANYA browses at a fabric stall when the gunshot echoes across the square. He spins around, confused. The VENDOR grabs his goods and runs.
10 20
EXT CENTER SQUARE - MARKETPLACE DAY
EXT. CENTER SQUARE - MARKETPLACE - DAY
EXT. CENTER SQUARE - MARKETPLACE - DAY Smoke thickens. MU'AAT is dragged through bloodied dirt, bodies strewn around. KHANYA stumbles from another alley, coughing. Their eyes meet, sharing horror.
11 21
EXT FOREST - CLEARING NIGHT
EXT. FOREST - CLEARING - NIGHT
EXT. FOREST - CLEARING - NIGHT CAPTIVES shuffle from the dark forest into a moonlit clearing. MILITANTS split them: STRONG MEN on one side, women, children, and the elderly on the other. A MILITANT grabs KHANYA, eyeing his slight build.
12 23
INT TELEVISION STUDIO EVENING
INT. TELEVISION STUDIO - EVENING
INT. TELEVISION STUDIO - EVENING A FIRST PRODUCER answers a phone, his face paling. He hangs up and rushes to Averil’s office. CUT TO: INT. AVERIL'S OFFICE - CONTINUOUS
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INT NEWSROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. NEWSROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. NEWSROOM - CONTINUOUS AVERIL paces, phone to ear. Script Registration No: WGSA00871_3/19/2024_00895 MU'AAT & HAYAT 24.
14 26
EXT MARKET SQUARE - AL-FASHIR DAY
EXT. MARKET SQUARE - AL-FASHIR - DAY
EXT. MARKET SQUARE - AL-FASHIR - DAY The sun blazes over a crowded square. Traders mix ammo with grain, and fuel drums sit beside spices. MU'AAT, wrists raw, stumbles behind ABBAS’ horse, a torn press badge dangling. ABBAS dismounts at a TEA STALL, addressing MILITANTS.
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EXT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE – DAY
EXT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE – DAY
EXT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE – DAY The sun scorches golden fields. ABBAS and MILITANTS arrive, some on horseback, others in trucks. MU’AAT, wrists bound, stumbles behind ABBAS’s horse, his clothes torn.
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EXT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - ANIMAL PENS CONTINUOUS
EXT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - ANIMAL PENS - CONTINUOUS
EXT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - ANIMAL PENS - CONTINUOUS ABBAS shoves MU’AAT through the gate. He crashes into straw and dung, while sheep scatter. He throws the staff next to MU'AAT. Points at a frail captive mending a fence. ABBAS
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EXT MUD SHELTER - COURTYARD DAY
EXT. MUD SHELTER - COURTYARD - DAY (ANOTHER DAY)
EXT. MUD SHELTER - COURTYARD - DAY (ANOTHER DAY) HAYAT writes carefully in her notebook. ZAHRA (17) enters quietly. ZAHRA (In Northern Sudanese Arabic)
18 33
INT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - COMMON AREA DAY
INT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - COMMON AREA - DAY
INT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - COMMON AREA - DAY HUSNA brings tea to ABBAS, brooding by the window. HUSNA ‫ اﻟﻮﺿﻊ ﺑﻴﺴﻲء ﻳﻮم ﺑﻌﺪ ﻳﻮم‬.‫ﺷﺎﻳﻚ ﻳﺎ ﻋﺒﺎس‬. Your tea, Abbas. The situation worsens
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INT TRUCK EVENING
INT. TRUCK - EVENING (SUNSET)
INT. TRUCK - EVENING (SUNSET) HAYAT sits between TWO MILITANTS, clutching a cloth bundle. Her face is tense. The DRIVER navigates a rutted track, dust rising toward Abbas’s compound. MILITANT #1
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EXT CRASH SITE CONTINUOUS
EXT. CRASH SITE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. CRASH SITE - CONTINUOUS Steam rises from the wrecked truck. MU’AAT, seeing the chaos, runs toward it. An OLDER CAPTIVE (60s) grabs him. OLDER CAPTIVE (in Juba Arabic)
21 37
EXT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - MOMENTS LATER ABBAS scans the horizon. MU’AAT and TWO CAPTIVES herd sheep and cows toward the farm, moving slowly with sticks. ABBAS
22 39
INT MUD HOUSE NIGHT
INT. MUD HOUSE - NIGHT (MUCH LATER)
INT. MUD HOUSE - NIGHT (MUCH LATER) Twilight seeps through cracks in mud walls. A distant gunshot echoes. MU’AAT sits on his mat, struggling to eat rice with bandaged hands; fresh injuries make it hard to grip the spoon.
23 40
EXT FARMHOUSE - WELL DAY
EXT. FARMHOUSE - WELL - DAY
EXT. FARMHOUSE - WELL - DAY HAYAT lowers a plastic bucket into a cracked stone well, straining to pull it up. MU’AAT approaches. Script Registration No: WGSA00871_3/19/2024_00895
24 43
EXT VILLAGE COMPOUND - COURTYARD - NORTHERN SUDAN MORNING
EXT. VILLAGE COMPOUND - COURTYARD - NORTHERN SUDAN - MORNING
EXT. VILLAGE COMPOUND - COURTYARD - NORTHERN SUDAN - MORNING VILLAGE CHILDREN, ages (6-12), sit in a circle under a tree. Some draw letters in the dirt with sticks. HAYAT kneels among them, gently correcting their Arabic script. Her voice is patient, encouraging.
25 44
EXT OUTSKIRTS - ANIMAL PEN - PRE DAWN
EXT. OUTSKIRTS - ANIMAL PEN - PRE-DAWN
EXT. OUTSKIRTS - ANIMAL PEN - PRE-DAWN Goats bleat, bells jingling. MU’AAT approaches the pens, a sack of feed over his shoulder, bandaged hands straining. A faint GLOW flickers from another shelter.
26 45
EXT HILLSIDE – DAY
EXT. HILLSIDE – DAY
EXT. HILLSIDE – DAY MU’AAT watches goats. HAYAT approaches with a tambur and a bundle of bread, dates, and water. Script Registration No: WGSA00871_3/19/2024_00895
27 48
EXT MARKET SQUARE - AL-FASHIR DAY
EXT. MARKET SQUARE - AL-FASHIR - DAY
EXT. MARKET SQUARE - AL-FASHIR - DAY The truck stops. MU’AAT stumbles out, dust in his eyes. A tense CROWD watches, some praying, others clutching children. ABBAS stands on a platform, rifle raised, beside a bound FOREIGN HOSTAGE.
28 49
INT MUD HOUSE NIGHT
INT. MUD HOUSE - NIGHT
INT. MUD HOUSE - NIGHT Candlelight flickers on mud walls. HAYAT writes in her notebook, pausing to reread. The door CREAKS. MU'AAT is surprised to see Hayat. Hayat looks up.
29 51
INT HAYAT'S ROOM NIGHT
INT. HAYAT'S ROOM - NIGHT (PASSAGE OF TIME)
INT. HAYAT'S ROOM - NIGHT (PASSAGE OF TIME) The NOTEBOOK lies open on the dirt floor. HAYAT's hand writes in Arabic script by candlelight. HAYAT (V.O.) ‫ ﺟﻮز إﺑ ِﺘﻬﺎل رﺑﻄﻬﺎ ﻓﻲ‬...‫اﻟﻴﻮم اﻟﺘ ﺗﺔ وﻋﺸﺮﻳﻦ‬
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EXT TREE EVENING
EXT. TREE - EVENING (SUNSET)
EXT. TREE - EVENING (SUNSET) The notebook is nearly full. HAYAT's hand pauses over the last empty space. HAYAT (V.O.) ّ ‫زواﺟﻲ ﻣﻦ ﻧﺎﺻﻴﻒ ﻣﻤﻜﻦ‬
31 55
INT CAPE TOWN, SOUTH AFRICA - OFFICE EVENING
INT. CAPE TOWN, SOUTH AFRICA - OFFICE - EVENING
INT. CAPE TOWN, SOUTH AFRICA - OFFICE - EVENING AVERIL sits at her desk, files piled high. She scrolls through her phone, pauses at an unknown number, and dials. CUT TO: EXT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - YARD - CONTINUOUS
32 57
INT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - KITCHEN EVENING
INT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - KITCHEN - EVENING
INT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - KITCHEN - EVENING HAYAT stands by the window, peering out. HUSNA enters. HUSNA ‫ ﻛﻠﻮ ﺗﻤﺎم؟‬،‫ﻳﺎ ﺣﻴﺎة‬ Hayat, everything alright?
33 58
EXT FARMHOUSE - COURTYARD EVENING
EXT. FARMHOUSE - COURTYARD - EVENING
EXT. FARMHOUSE - COURTYARD - EVENING ABBAS waits, arms folded. MU’AAT quickly hides the notebook under his clothing as he herds the sheep in. Script Registration No: WGSA00871_3/19/2024_00895
34 61
EXT FIELDS DAY
EXT. FIELDS - DAY
EXT. FIELDS - DAY Dry grass sways in the heat. MU’AAT drives the herd, his sweat dripping. An OLDER CAPTIVE watches. OLDER CAPTIVE (In Northern Sudanese Arabic)
35 62
EXT AL-FASHIR (THE SQUARE) – DAY – HAYAT’S WEDDING
EXT. AL-FASHIR (THE SQUARE) – DAY – HAYAT’S WEDDING
EXT. AL-FASHIR (THE SQUARE) – DAY – HAYAT’S WEDDING Drums. Stick dances. Toubs swirl. Zaghareet pierce the air. A dusty pickup halts. The crowd stills. KHANYA, worn, nudged out by a MILITANT, scans the square. NASEEF (50) steps down in white. Drums resume, tense.
36 65
EXT SIDE ALLEY – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. SIDE ALLEY – MOMENTS LATER
EXT. SIDE ALLEY – MOMENTS LATER MU'AAT pauses. HUSNA approaches. HUSNA ‫ ﺻﺤﻴﺢ‬...‫ﻣﻮﻋﺎت‬. Mu’Aat... right.
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INT MU’AAT’S MUD SHELTER - SAME DAY
INT. MU’AAT’S MUD SHELTER - SAME DAY
INT. MU’AAT’S MUD SHELTER - SAME DAY MU’AAT stuffs a MAP into his bag. The NOTEBOOK peeks from under the mat, unnoticed. The door CREAKS. HAYAT stands, trembling, her wedding Toub soaked. HAYAT
38 69
EXT VILLAGE - OUTSKIRTS MORNING
EXT. VILLAGE - OUTSKIRTS - MORNING
EXT. VILLAGE - OUTSKIRTS - MORNING Pink light edges the sky. Mist clings low. MU’AAT slips from the mud shelter, a worn bag on his back. His steps are quick, measured. At the village edge, KHANYA waits, tense, bag in hand. Sweat
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EXT ROAD DAY
EXT. ROAD - DAY (SAME DAY)
EXT. ROAD - DAY (SAME DAY) A cracked path cuts through the plain. Wind stirs dust. MU’AAT and KHANYA jog, their breaths ragged. KHANYA Faster.
40 72
EXT AL-FASHIR MARKETPLACE - CENTER SQUARE DAY
EXT. AL-FASHIR MARKETPLACE - CENTER SQUARE - DAY
EXT. AL-FASHIR MARKETPLACE - CENTER SQUARE - DAY The marketplace buzzes. Merchants raise tents; elders murmur in the shade. ABBAS sits with NASEEF, sipping tea. ABBAS ‫زم ﻧﺸﺪد ا ﻣﻦ‬
41 77
INT MUD SHELTER – NIGHT
INT. MUD SHELTER – NIGHT
INT. MUD SHELTER – NIGHT The door bursts open. MU'AAT and HAYAT are thrown inside. They hit the ground hard, gasping. Mud streaks their faces. A lantern sways overhead, shadows crawling across the walls.
42 78
INT ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE LATER
INT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - LATER
INT. ABBAS'S FARMHOUSE - LATER FOUR ELDERS. OMAR, KHALID, YUSUF, NASEEF. They sit opposite ABBAS, whose shoulders are rigid. He stares at the dirt floor. ELDER OMAR
43 80
INT MUD SHELTER NIGHT
INT. MUD SHELTER - NIGHT (HOURS LATER)
INT. MUD SHELTER - NIGHT (HOURS LATER) Moonlight cuts through the cracked roof, streaking the dirt floor. Two bloodied hands rise, trembling, clutching a WORN NOTEBOOK. HAYAT’s face appears streaked with mud and tears.
44 81
INT HAYAT’S BEDROOM – NIGHT
INT. HAYAT’S BEDROOM – NIGHT
INT. HAYAT’S BEDROOM – NIGHT HUSNA sits on the bed, tearfully, surrounded by scattered photos. She lifts a photo of HAYAT and SALMA, arms around each other, smiling. Her thumb traces Hayat’s face. Presses the photo
45 82
EXT COURTYARD NIGHT
EXT. COURTYARD - NIGHT
EXT. COURTYARD - NIGHT A full moon hangs high. Its pale light washes over the courtyard and the mud shelter roof. SOUND: Soft footsteps approaching.
46 83
EXT VILLAGE - EDGE NIGHT
EXT. VILLAGE - EDGE - NIGHT
EXT. VILLAGE - EDGE - NIGHT SOUND of hushed footsteps, MU'AAT's pained breathing. HUSNA, HAYAT, and MU'AAT (injured, leaning heavily on them) reach the village edge. They stop behind a cluster of low bushes, scanning back
47 86
EXT SOUTH AFRICAN EMBASSY DAY
EXT. SOUTH AFRICAN EMBASSY - DAY
EXT. SOUTH AFRICAN EMBASSY - DAY The truck rumbles to a halt. Before them stand the gates of the South African Embassy, tall and solid against the growing light. The REBEL GUIDE steps out of the truck bed. He gestures for
48 87
EXT EMBASSY GATE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. EMBASSY GATE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. EMBASSY GATE - MOMENTS LATER The Guard returns, holding the gate open. An EMBASSY OFFICIAL stands behind him, a middle-aged man, neatly dressed, his expression calm and assessing. He looks from the Guard to Hayat and MU'AAT, his gaze
49 88
INT EMBASSY - PHONE BOOTH MOMENTS LATER
INT. EMBASSY - PHONE BOOTH - MOMENTS LATER
INT. EMBASSY - PHONE BOOTH - MOMENTS LATER MU'AAT stands near a small phone booth provided by the embassy. An EMBASSY OFFICIAL approaches, holding a simple cell phone. Script Registration No: WGSA00871_3/19/2024_00895
50 92
INT FATIEMA’S LIVING ROOM – DAY
INT. FATIEMA’S LIVING ROOM – DAY
INT. FATIEMA’S LIVING ROOM – DAY FATIEMA sits holding her cell phone. Her hands tremble slightly. Tears stream down her face, but a radiant smile spreads across her lips.
51 93
INT NEWSROOM – DAY
INT. NEWSROOM – DAY
INT. NEWSROOM – DAY The newsroom is a hive of activity. Screens flash, phones ring, keyboards clatter. AVERIL enters rapidly, phone still in hand. Her face is flushed with urgency and wonder.
52 95
INT FARMHOUSE NIGHT
INT. FARMHOUSE - NIGHT
INT. FARMHOUSE - NIGHT SOUND of a door slamming. ABBAS storms in, face twisted with fury. He stands before HUSNA, who is in the center of the room, her posture steady, gaze meeting his rage directly.
53 96
EXT ABBAS'S VILLAGE - COURTYARD MORNING
EXT. ABBAS'S VILLAGE - COURTYARD - MORNING
EXT. ABBAS'S VILLAGE - COURTYARD - MORNING The courtyard is alive with tension. MILITANT MEN gather, weapons in hand. VEHICLES and HORSES are readied. SOUND of boot heels, whispered orders, engine murmurs.
54 98
INT EMBASSY - TEMPORARY RESIDENCE MORNING
INT. EMBASSY - TEMPORARY RESIDENCE - MORNING
INT. EMBASSY - TEMPORARY RESIDENCE - MORNING The room is small, simply furnished with a bed, a table, and two chairs. It is clean, quiet. HAYAT sits on the edge of the bed, leaning back, her posture relaxed.
55 101
EXT CHECKPOINT - BORDER DAY
EXT. CHECKPOINT - BORDER - DAY
EXT. CHECKPOINT - BORDER - DAY A convoy approaches a fortified border. Barbed wire fences, armed guards, and military vehicles frame the landscape. Media vans line the approach road. Cameras roll; reporters whisper updates.
56 102
EXT BORDER CONTINUOUS
EXT. BORDER - CONTINUOUS
EXT. BORDER - CONTINUOUS GUNFIRE erupts. The border explodes into chaos. BORDER PATROL GUARDS return fire. Crowds scatter. Militants are hit. NASEEF and KHALID make a quick exit for his truck and speeds
57 103
EXT BORDER ZONE DAY
EXT. BORDER ZONE - DAY
EXT. BORDER ZONE - DAY Global broadcasters capture the image of MU’AAT clutching HAYAT, still and broken. The world watches. Aerial drones and news crews document the aftermath.
58 106
INT AUDITORIUM - CAPE TOWN, SOUTH AFRICA DAY
INT. AUDITORIUM - CAPE TOWN, SOUTH AFRICA - DAY
INT. AUDITORIUM - CAPE TOWN, SOUTH AFRICA - DAY Wall displays show photographs and testimonies. A banner reads: “THE HAYAT PROJECT – AMPLIFYING UNHEARD VOICES.” The room is packed, with standing room only. BRIGHT LIGHTS
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INT COMMUNITY CENTER LATER
INT. COMMUNITY CENTER - LATER
INT. COMMUNITY CENTER - LATER MU’AAT packs books for shipment. FATIEMA approaches. FATIEMA In hoeveel tale is nou al? How many languages now?
60 109
EXT CAPE TOWN CEMETERY EVENING
EXT. CAPE TOWN CEMETERY - EVENING (SUNSET)
EXT. CAPE TOWN CEMETERY - EVENING (SUNSET) MU'AAT kneels at a headstone: "HAYAT HASSAN KHAN – JOURNALIST, BOKKIE, TRUTH-TELLER." Fresh flowers and visitors’ notebooks lie beside it. MU’AAT

Mu'Aat & Hayat

When love blooms between a captive journalist and the daughter of his captor, their flight to freedom propels a global reckoning — and the teacher’s secret notebook becomes the rallying cry that reshapes how the world hears women in war.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This script offers a rare, intimate perspective on war through a forbidden romance between a South African journalist and the daughter of his militant captor. It blends high-stakes political thriller elements with a deeply personal love story, while authentically incorporating multiple languages (Afrikaans, Arabic, Xhosa) to create a textured, multicultural narrative. The unique premise of a journalist becoming the story, and a captive finding love with his captor's daughter, provides fresh angles on familiar conflict zone tropes.

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Average Score: 8.0
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To elevate your script, focus on resolving key unresolved elements like Khanya's arc for emotional closure, tighten pacing in the middle act to maintain momentum, and deepen antagonist motivations (e.g., Abbas and Naseef) for greater nuance and believability. Leverage the script's strengths in the romantic core and symbolic motifs, such as Hayat's notebook, to enhance thematic depth and ensure character arcs feel organic and impactful, transforming a solid drama into a more polished and resonant narrative.
For Executives:
The script has strong value as an emotionally charged war romance with international appeal and festival potential, driven by its cultural authenticity and social themes, but it carries risks from unresolved subplots, pacing inconsistencies, and underdeveloped antagonists that could alienate audiences or critics. Market perception might see it as a poignant, timely story akin to 'The Kite Runner', but without revisions, it risks being dismissed as melodramatic or incomplete, limiting its commercial viability and box office draw.
Story Facts
Genres:
War 40% Drama 60% Romance 30% Thriller 25% Action 20%

Setting: Contemporary, Sudan and South Africa

Themes: The Power of Truth and Storytelling, Love and Connection Amidst Adversity, Resilience and Survival, The Destructive Impact of War and Extremism, The Role of Journalism and Bearing Witness, Cultural Conflict and Tradition vs. Modernity, Family and Sacrifice, Hope and Legacy

Conflict & Stakes: The struggle for love and freedom against oppressive cultural traditions and violent conflict, with the lives of Mu'aat and Hayat at stake.

Mood: Intense and poignant, blending tragedy with moments of hope and resilience.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The love story between a journalist and the daughter of his captor set against the backdrop of war.
  • Major Twist: Naseef's betrayal when he shoots Abbas, revealing the complexities of loyalty and love.
  • Innovative Idea: The use of a notebook as a narrative device to convey the voices of women affected by conflict.
  • Distinctive Setting: The contrasting environments of war-torn Sudan and the peaceful yet tense atmosphere of South Africa.

Comparable Scripts: The Kite Runner, Hotel Rwanda, The Breadwinner, A Thousand Splendid Suns, The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo, Beasts of No Nation, The Book Thief, The Color Purple, The Last Face

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1. Visual Impact (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Visual Impact (Script Level) score: 7.6
Expected gain: ~7% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.4 in Visual Impact (Script Level)
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  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Visual Impact (Script Level) by about +0.4 in one rewrite.
2. Theme (Script Level)
Moderate Impact Script Level
Your current Theme (Script Level) score: 8.2
Expected gain: ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.5 in Theme (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~1,521 similar revisions)
  • This is another strong option. If the top item doesn't fit your rewrite plan, this is a solid alternative.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Theme (Script Level) by about +0.5 in one rewrite.
3. Concept
Moderate Impact Scene Level
Your current Concept score: 8.6
Expected gain: ~4% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.29 in Concept
Confidence: High (based on ~1,412 similar revisions)
  • This is another strong option. If the top item doesn't fit your rewrite plan, this is a solid alternative.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Concept by about +0.29 in one rewrite.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.04
Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script's emotional depth and character arcs are strong, but improvements can be made by refining pacing in key scenes to heighten tension and deepening backstories, especially for antagonists like Abbas, to enhance relatability and conflict. Incorporating moments of silence or stillness after emotional peaks could amplify impact, ensuring the narrative resonates more profoundly with audiences through better integration of themes and visual motifs.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script 'Mu'Aat & Hayat' effectively captures the emotional depth of a love story in conflict, but to elevate it, focus on refining pacing for consistent tension, introducing unpredictable twists to avoid clichés, and enhancing cultural authenticity through more nuanced dialogue and details. Strengthening character interactions and exploring supporting roles more deeply will amplify emotional resonance and make the narrative more compelling, ensuring the story's powerful themes of love and resilience shine through with greater impact.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analyses reveal a script rich in emotional depth for protagonists like Hayat, but with opportunities to enhance arcs for supporting characters such as Khanya and Abbas to create more dynamic tension and growth. Focusing on deepening backstories, refining dialogue to reflect internal conflicts, and strengthening key scenes (like scene 12) will improve narrative coherence and audience engagement, making the story more compelling and resonant.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is powerful, with strong depictions of suffering and love, but it could be refined by incorporating more varied emotional tones and respites to avoid audience fatigue, such as adding moments of joy or cultural connection early on. Deepening secondary character arcs and ensuring balanced emotional layers in key scenes would enhance empathy and impact, making the tragedy more resonant and the narrative less exhausting from a craft perspective.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative and craft perspective, the script's goals and conflicts effectively drive character development and thematic depth, particularly in evolving the protagonist's internal journey from survival to advocacy. To enhance this, focus on tightening the philosophical conflicts—such as 'Truth vs. Safety'—by adding more nuanced character moments that show internal struggles, ensuring emotional beats land harder and avoid melodrama, which could elevate the story's resonance and make the protagonist's transformation more authentic and compelling.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core strength lies in its powerful exploration of truth and storytelling, but to elevate it creatively, focus on deepening character backstories and emotional arcs, particularly for supporting characters like Fatiema and Husna, to enhance thematic resonance and avoid flattening complex relationships. Additionally, refine dialogue in multilingual scenes to ensure authenticity and flow, making the narrative more immersive and universally relatable without diluting cultural specificity.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core strength lies in its emotional depth and themes of love and resilience, but inconsistencies in character development and plot logic dilute its impact. To elevate the narrative, focus on gradual character arcs, such as fleshing out Abbas's motivations for his violent shift, and ensure seamless plot progression by addressing gaps like the escape sequence, allowing for a more authentic and immersive storytelling experience that resonates deeply with audiences.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The script's voice excels in blending gritty realism with emotional depth, but to enhance its craft, focus on refining dialogue to include more varied pacing and subtle character revelations, ensuring that cultural elements are deeply integrated without overwhelming the narrative flow. This will strengthen audience immersion and amplify the thematic resonance, making the story even more compelling and universally relatable.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay showcases strong emotional depth and cultural authenticity, effectively drawing viewers into the characters' moral dilemmas. To enhance its craft, focus on refining dialogue for greater subtext and authenticity, deepening character backstories to heighten emotional resonance, and tightening pacing to sustain tension, ultimately making the narrative more compelling and impactful.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building effectively creates immersive contrasts between Sudan's harsh, war-torn landscapes and South Africa's structured urban environments, enhancing themes of conflict and resilience. To improve creatively, focus on tightening cultural depictions to avoid stereotypes by incorporating more nuanced character interactions with their surroundings, such as deepening how language barriers and societal norms evolve characters' arcs, which could heighten emotional stakes and authenticity, making the narrative more engaging and universally resonant.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strength lies in its emotional depth and consistent dialogue, but to enhance engagement, consider integrating subtle conflicts into reflective and intimate scenes to prevent pacing slowdowns, ensuring that character development and story progression remain dynamic without overwhelming the introspective moments that build emotional resonance.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.

Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (4)
  • Emotional Impact - resolutionOfEmotionalThemes: 6.5 → 8.0 +1.5
  • Conflict - stakesSignificance: 6.5 → 8.0 +1.5
  • Story Structure - resolutionSatisfaction: 7.4 → 8.5 +1.1
  • Emotional Impact - emotionalConsistency: 7.5 → 8.5 +1.0
Areas to Review (0)

No regressions detected